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Comment from prettybluebirds
You need to capitalize (His) in the sentence (His) works. Other than that, the story is perfect and unique. I loved every word. It is something different from the usual Sc-Fi. It should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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You need to capitalize (His) in the sentence (His) works. Other than that, the story is perfect and unique. I loved every word. It is something different from the usual Sc-Fi. It should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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I edited it as you pointed out. And, I found a few more. Thank you for the assist, I appreciate the read. Back to unpacking. :-)
Comment from Jim Wile
Neat story, Karen. I like these longer ones you write.
So, the world we are looking forward to is an androgynous one (as distinct from an androgenous one) in which there is virtually no distinction between men and women. I'm not sure very many would like that, as so much of the human condition seems to be concerned with that man/woman relationship, and the powerful sexual attraction between them is so necessary to perpetuate the species.
But you make a good point that when man becomes immortal, there is no further need for that, and the need for the differences dries up. That constant tension between the sexes helps to make life so much more interesting and thrilling, though.
A very thoughtful story with some great humor too. Well done!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Neat story, Karen. I like these longer ones you write.
So, the world we are looking forward to is an androgynous one (as distinct from an androgenous one) in which there is virtually no distinction between men and women. I'm not sure very many would like that, as so much of the human condition seems to be concerned with that man/woman relationship, and the powerful sexual attraction between them is so necessary to perpetuate the species.
But you make a good point that when man becomes immortal, there is no further need for that, and the need for the differences dries up. That constant tension between the sexes helps to make life so much more interesting and thrilling, though.
A very thoughtful story with some great humor too. Well done!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Thanks so much. I think if people could live forever, why would life matter? A very bad idea.
Karen
Comment from Neonewman
What a crazy ride this piece offered. Well-crafted and chock full of fantasy. I love how the story progressed and found myself immersed in the story.
Thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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What a crazy ride this piece offered. Well-crafted and chock full of fantasy. I love how the story progressed and found myself immersed in the story.
Thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 19-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Thanks for the read now I owe you two. Karen
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I wish everyone were like this, at least for one review. I generally read others who review me as well. This is how we find what we like.
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Some folks just write and pay for people to read. That's like self publishing. Yuck. One day perhaps hollywood would find me and shower me with money
unitl then I plod along here trying all kinds of things. :-)
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Yea! I'm just trying to get good enough to write a novel. I wouldn't mind being showered with money, myself, lol. Until then...
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Karen,
the scenario you've described sounds like a feminist, transgender paradise. It wouldn't work for me at all, as I love women and have all my life. It would be a real turn off to see a gal growing a beard and muscles. I actually had a friend who was trying to transition to being a man, and it was troubling to watch. The last time I saw her she was living an isolated and lonely life and was dependent on others to keep her housed and fed. You certainly have a fertile imagination.
I hope you're not over doing it with the moving gal. I know you have some health issues. I'm glad you've got some help.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Hello Karen,
the scenario you've described sounds like a feminist, transgender paradise. It wouldn't work for me at all, as I love women and have all my life. It would be a real turn off to see a gal growing a beard and muscles. I actually had a friend who was trying to transition to being a man, and it was troubling to watch. The last time I saw her she was living an isolated and lonely life and was dependent on others to keep her housed and fed. You certainly have a fertile imagination.
I hope you're not over doing it with the moving gal. I know you have some health issues. I'm glad you've got some help.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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I rather think you missed the point, dear friend.
The women wanted to have male power, they got male body parts, when the men became more like them, they didn't like it. When the guys tweaked the DNA so they could live forever , they killed themselves.Just because we want something, it doesn't always follow that we should have it. Karen
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Ah, thanks for the clarification gal. I'm kind of thick, obviously.
Blessings,
Tom
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We are us when we read. We come wth our points of view.
As hard as it to imagine, are you sitting down? Sometimes I get things wrong. Karen
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hard to imagine!
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Yea I know!!! wish me luck tomorrow
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting and fun sf story. Messing with the sexes sounded kind of extreme and so it proved to be. Living forever was another problem they had to face and dealt with in the only practical way. Good writing, no mistakes, and there is certainly an element of thinking about what can go wrong with doing everything right.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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This is an interesting and fun sf story. Messing with the sexes sounded kind of extreme and so it proved to be. Living forever was another problem they had to face and dealt with in the only practical way. Good writing, no mistakes, and there is certainly an element of thinking about what can go wrong with doing everything right.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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I would not under any circumstances want to live forever. living longer would be okay if we could spend the time being healthy and useful. Thanks for the read. Karen
Comment from Brenda Strauser
Hi Karen. Your story was so imaginative and well written. Can you imagine if we took places with men? Great writing. Good luck in the contest. This is a very good entry. Love, Brenda
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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Hi Karen. Your story was so imaginative and well written. Can you imagine if we took places with men? Great writing. Good luck in the contest. This is a very good entry. Love, Brenda
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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It is legal and fun for me.I am upset about going back to Houston to empty my storage units so many feelings and memories. This saturday. So men get killed. Here. :-)
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Are you moving alone?
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My two sisters A grandson of my sister Tammy and her best friends son, and my sister in law when I get there.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I'll keep it general in case there are any innuendos I've missed:)) Basically, you're on fire with this sci-fi story which oozes humour, imagination and your usual pro-women stance. You might have wanted your name to read Ral(ei)gh but who cares, you're obviously having fun on Mars with this. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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I'll keep it general in case there are any innuendos I've missed:)) Basically, you're on fire with this sci-fi story which oozes humour, imagination and your usual pro-women stance. You might have wanted your name to read Ral(ei)gh but who cares, you're obviously having fun on Mars with this. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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I wrote you in regular people email. I thank you for the kind words and nice stuff you said. I know some nice men, a few of them, but I am no longer sitting by and letting others take credit for all I acomplished.
I am no longer quiet. And I have no urge to get naked in front of one ever gain. I have batteries. :-) Karen
Comment from karenina
Okay then! It's not like those of us who read you regularly don't know you are pro-women and have little patience for (shall I say MOST) men...
You've taken it to a whole new planet, er level here...
You've got that wry witty sarcastic with that zings without causing mortal wounds.
(Although I shouldn't speak for the men, I suppose)
I like it!
(I think our entire planet would be improved if women ruled the world!)
This looks like a winner!
Go for it!
Karenina
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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Okay then! It's not like those of us who read you regularly don't know you are pro-women and have little patience for (shall I say MOST) men...
You've taken it to a whole new planet, er level here...
You've got that wry witty sarcastic with that zings without causing mortal wounds.
(Although I shouldn't speak for the men, I suppose)
I like it!
(I think our entire planet would be improved if women ruled the world!)
This looks like a winner!
Go for it!
Karenina
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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I was just getting ready to review some of your stuff. I now owe you four. I have been whittling my list down since I finished this piece. Some of the guys whined. It is fiction ( sorta) not a real story ( as far as I know) and I can say whatever I want because I am the one writing. I am 69 in less than a month and have no desire to get naked with a man ever again. Sure I can get a twinge now and then, but it is not worth the effort anymore. The whole idea of it is so uneven. well, I could be a geriatric dominatrix. Now, that might be fun. I crack myself up. Karen
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It's all in fun.
Hey...I'm seventy!
I so get your take on things.
All in all, I have more fun playing WORDLE!
(GRIN)
Comment from GoWiSt
"They are becoming more empathic we women find this" Put the word 'and' after empathic.
O...kay! This read like the wet dreams of the ultra-feminist movement. Uh, wake up, y'all, it's never happening. Or, better yet, keep dreaming. The lady characters should count themselves lucky that any guy would still mate with them after they grew mustaches and became more masculine. I'm surprised the wiz female scientists have developed a drug--yet--that would enable them grow penises. Then the men can be reared as cattle for meat. Oyvey!
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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"They are becoming more empathic we women find this" Put the word 'and' after empathic.
O...kay! This read like the wet dreams of the ultra-feminist movement. Uh, wake up, y'all, it's never happening. Or, better yet, keep dreaming. The lady characters should count themselves lucky that any guy would still mate with them after they grew mustaches and became more masculine. I'm surprised the wiz female scientists have developed a drug--yet--that would enable them grow penises. Then the men can be reared as cattle for meat. Oyvey!
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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Thanks for the edit, I will correct it. Did I hurt your widdle feelings? Honey pie they never wanted to mate with those half-wits in the first place. We don't want dicks. Except for when we wish to breed we don't need you at all. Could you up to the top shelf and hand me my naughty underear? i wanna try stuff on. :-)
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
omg! I am dying over here!! That was hysterical. How in the world (whichever world you want to discuss) did you come up with some of that? lol Loved it all and am glad you're back.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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omg! I am dying over here!! That was hysterical. How in the world (whichever world you want to discuss) did you come up with some of that? lol Loved it all and am glad you're back.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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I reviewed some of yours. That doggie one! My brin just percolates all I had r watched or heard and stirs it up and plops it out. Here's a secret, I don't always remember what I write. :-)