The Ocelot
a 75-word story29 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Congratulations on winning First for this clever short-short story. The illustration of the bug-eyed, half-starved ocelot also helps portray how excessive editing makes a well-rounded story turn into a sliver of a bone. Going from jungle to path is still a word, but it definitely shows we get to thinking of shorter and shorter ways to say things.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Congratulations on winning First for this clever short-short story. The illustration of the bug-eyed, half-starved ocelot also helps portray how excessive editing makes a well-rounded story turn into a sliver of a bone. Going from jungle to path is still a word, but it definitely shows we get to thinking of shorter and shorter ways to say things.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Thanks, CC
Comment from LJbutterfly
Haha! I can easily relate. All of my flash fiction posts began as larger stories, reduced to something I never intended to write. Congratulations on your well deserved, humorous win.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Haha! I can easily relate. All of my flash fiction posts began as larger stories, reduced to something I never intended to write. Congratulations on your well deserved, humorous win.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thank you, LJ
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yep, I'm a fan of flash fiction, in our needy world of instant gratification. And you've described it very well. Congratulations on your contest winner and blue ribbon. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Yep, I'm a fan of flash fiction, in our needy world of instant gratification. And you've described it very well. Congratulations on your contest winner and blue ribbon. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Ric
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Bill,
This shows how hard it is to get what you want in the first try, It also shows, with humor, how we often have to remove what we think is important to the poem or story. The woes of editing.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on the contest win.
Have a great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Hi Bill,
This shows how hard it is to get what you want in the first try, It also shows, with humor, how we often have to remove what we think is important to the poem or story. The woes of editing.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on the contest win.
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Joan.
Comment from gansach
Congratulations, Bill! I love your very funny, very clever little story for the 75 Words Flash Fiction competition. A perfect description of the ruthless editing we all must do to comply with word limits. Well done!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Congratulations, Bill! I love your very funny, very clever little story for the 75 Words Flash Fiction competition. A perfect description of the ruthless editing we all must do to comply with word limits. Well done!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thank you, G
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Thank you so very much!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
LOL You just described me trying to write something and only use on 75 words. I write prose and my novel ususally run around 90000 words. LOL I enjoyed reading this contest entry. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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LOL You just described me trying to write something and only use on 75 words. I write prose and my novel ususally run around 90000 words. LOL I enjoyed reading this contest entry. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much, Barbara.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Hi Bill,
Seventy five words sure shaves away the fluff from written works.
It was an interesting approach to do this in the contest entry.
It was sure a tough day for the lone ocelot but you goy a point across
Well done.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Hi Bill,
Seventy five words sure shaves away the fluff from written works.
It was an interesting approach to do this in the contest entry.
It was sure a tough day for the lone ocelot but you goy a point across
Well done.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Shirley
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Bill,
A 75-Word Flash Fiction makes an editor out of a writer, especially when your regular story has 1,000 words. This reminded me of the episode of "Everybody Loves Raymond" when Robert marries Amy. His mother stands up in the church, interrupting the wedding ceremony. It embarrasses Robert and takes the fun out of their special day. When Ray gives his speech at the reception, he edits Marie's folly and every other bug out of the service. Without his speech, the whole day would have been disastrous. He made light of it with one edit after another.
It takes great talent to trim a Flash Fiction down to size, yet still salvage a wonderful story.
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Hi Bill,
A 75-Word Flash Fiction makes an editor out of a writer, especially when your regular story has 1,000 words. This reminded me of the episode of "Everybody Loves Raymond" when Robert marries Amy. His mother stands up in the church, interrupting the wedding ceremony. It embarrasses Robert and takes the fun out of their special day. When Ray gives his speech at the reception, he edits Marie's folly and every other bug out of the service. Without his speech, the whole day would have been disastrous. He made light of it with one edit after another.
It takes great talent to trim a Flash Fiction down to size, yet still salvage a wonderful story.
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Kimbob. I wonder what the ocelot did?
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all by himself!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Good editing, Ed getting 1000 words back to 75 for this flash fiction story of an ocelot trekking a path rather than 3 frolicking in a jungle. This gave me a chuckle Bill. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Good editing, Ed getting 1000 words back to 75 for this flash fiction story of an ocelot trekking a path rather than 3 frolicking in a jungle. This gave me a chuckle Bill. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Valda