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The Cycle

One life ends, others continue.

2 total reviews 
Comment from pome lover
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This is a good 75 word flash fiction. It's difficult to tell a story, getting in needed facts, and a little action in 75 words. But you were definitely up for the challenge.
I always think it's sad when the mother animal is shot and her little one is left alone and scared. Well, I'm glad she got out of there before the pride descended. Good job.
Katharine

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
    Thank you for this wonderful review. 75 words is indeed a challenge, I'm glad this worked for you. This story has had positive reviews thus far.
reply by pome lover on 29-Jul-2024
    as it should :)
Comment from Pamusart
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Hi

This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!

I was unclear who minto was. He's not the Pride male. Is he a male or a female. I think he's a lioness, but he could be a fellow lion. Just not the dominant one. Usually a lion and who's the head of a pack will not allow another lion to live there when it's mature, so he kicks out all the males from the Pride once they get old enough

African Elks only way about 40 pounds. So, a single lioness can take one down by herself

I enjoyed reading your story

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
    Thank you for the positive review. Minto is the calf of the dying doe Esra. I hope that's clear, I'll take a look again!