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a limerick7 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I was wondering how you were doing after the pacemaker was placed. How are you doing?
Enjoyed your limerick - written on the day of the procedure! I wondered about the "spice" but I see now it was required.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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I was wondering how you were doing after the pacemaker was placed. How are you doing?
Enjoyed your limerick - written on the day of the procedure! I wondered about the "spice" but I see now it was required.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Last in the contest, but the pacemaker was a breeze, I guess.
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Whew! Glad to hear that it was a breeze. Hope you are sleeping better after that procedure. 🙏💖
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi,
This is a good mix of words and artwork. Does anyone get joy from driving in traffic? Yes, new cars are not made as strongly as old cars were.
You use the words well.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Hope your enjoying your week so far.
Joan
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Hi,
This is a good mix of words and artwork. Does anyone get joy from driving in traffic? Yes, new cars are not made as strongly as old cars were.
You use the words well.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Hope your enjoying your week so far.
Joan
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Got a pacemaker installed today. Now I can do anything, except lift heavy things for a week.
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Glad to hear it. Heavy lifting isn't much of a loss unless you are a professional weightlifter.
Joan
Comment from Lindsey Russell
The subject matter of this poem is unique compared to the other poems I've seen using the writing prompt for this. Thanks for sharing and happy writing!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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The subject matter of this poem is unique compared to the other poems I've seen using the writing prompt for this. Thanks for sharing and happy writing!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Hi Lindsey. If you are cutting and pasting your reviews, that is frowned on here. If not, perhaps a bit more review of the work and less generic, could-be-anything remarks.
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No I'm not copy and pasting. I have trouble typing sometimes and I have certain things I want to make sure and say so I do use predictive text to save my hand muscles sry
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is billed as a 5-7-5 which of course it isn't and reads much more like a limerick than anything else.
All words are present and correct though which is always nice.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Hi there,
This is billed as a 5-7-5 which of course it isn't and reads much more like a limerick than anything else.
All words are present and correct though which is always nice.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Excuse me. I had one idea and went with another. I will change the description.
Comment from LeeAnn Kay
Fun little short poem that I would picture in a children's book or magazine. As a surface level piece, I really enjoyed it, and could almost imagine it getting stuck in my head like a chorus from a song.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Fun little short poem that I would picture in a children's book or magazine. As a surface level piece, I really enjoyed it, and could almost imagine it getting stuck in my head like a chorus from a song.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Thanks, LeeAnn
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Your poem effectively uses the given words and creates a vivid scene with a mix of serious and whimsical elements. The contrast between "driving with joy" and "the shadow of death" adds depth, while "spice on my breath" and the final line about the car being "made of plastic" introduce a quirky twist.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Your poem effectively uses the given words and creates a vivid scene with a mix of serious and whimsical elements. The contrast between "driving with joy" and "the shadow of death" adds depth, while "spice on my breath" and the final line about the car being "made of plastic" introduce a quirky twist.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Patty.
Comment from jessizero
I enjoyed your poem. You did a good job with the words that were supplied. I don't know why you said it was a 5-7-5, though. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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I enjoyed your poem. You did a good job with the words that were supplied. I don't know why you said it was a 5-7-5, though. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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I was going to do one form and settled on another. I changed the description. Thanks, Jessizero