Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I think at one time or another in all our lives we feel caged. Thank you for sharing this Haiku contest entry with us and I want to wish you the best of luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2024

Thank you very much, Barbara! I appreciate your review and kind words.

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi, Skyler

This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!

I think this contest allows, both haiku and senryu

Yours is actually a senryu. A haiku deals with nature where the other deals with the human condition

Both examples that the contest description showed as examples are actually haikus

But it doesn't say anywhere that it has to be to the strict direction of a haiku so I think you're fine. In fact, I know you're fine because this is happening with previous haiku contests They're just not that strict

And your third line is definitely a satori line which means it's a surprise ending

I don't think they're that picky so why not just call it a 5-7-5 contest? Got me

I enjoyed reading your poem

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024

Thank you for your insight! I appreciate your review.

Comment from Patty Mazzurco

Excellent

Your poem succinctly captures a deep sense of confinement and longing for freedom. The metaphor of the caged bird effectively conveys the feeling of being trapped, while "austere captor" adds a layer of emotional and mental severity. The final line poses a powerful, open-ended question that invites reflection.

Thought as I read...
How can I break free?

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024

Thank you for your review, Patty! You interpreted this precisely how I meant it to be.