I'll Always Miss You
There comes a time to say goodbye...3 total reviews
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Your poem is heartfelt and poignant, capturing the bittersweet nostalgia and regret of lost friendship. The way you weave memories of your time with Tilly into the poem shows a deep sense of longing and remorse. The imagery of playing card games and the details about drifting apart add a personal touch that makes the loss feel even more real.
One suggestion would be to adjust the rhythm in a few places to enhance the flow. For example, in the line "We lost all touch / The very next year," you might consider something like "We lost touch the very next year" for smoother reading. Also, varying the line lengths slightly can add a more natural rhythm to the poem.
Overall, you've created a touching tribute to a lost friend, and your emotions come through strongly. It's clear you've put a lot of thought and feeling into this, and it resonates well with anyone who has experienced similar loss.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Your poem is heartfelt and poignant, capturing the bittersweet nostalgia and regret of lost friendship. The way you weave memories of your time with Tilly into the poem shows a deep sense of longing and remorse. The imagery of playing card games and the details about drifting apart add a personal touch that makes the loss feel even more real.
One suggestion would be to adjust the rhythm in a few places to enhance the flow. For example, in the line "We lost all touch / The very next year," you might consider something like "We lost touch the very next year" for smoother reading. Also, varying the line lengths slightly can add a more natural rhythm to the poem.
Overall, you've created a touching tribute to a lost friend, and your emotions come through strongly. It's clear you've put a lot of thought and feeling into this, and it resonates well with anyone who has experienced similar loss.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much for your review and suggestions.
Comment from iDri.Luv.Jesus
Hi, I like your poetry a lot, congrats to your excellent 5star view. I think if and when you can by adding a bit more meaningful touch art or artsy to your poetry with some sort of an artwork - it will bring your work to an exceptional rate. Best to your writing!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Hi, I like your poetry a lot, congrats to your excellent 5star view. I think if and when you can by adding a bit more meaningful touch art or artsy to your poetry with some sort of an artwork - it will bring your work to an exceptional rate. Best to your writing!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much for your review and suggestions.
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Hi, you're welcome, and have a nice day!
Comment from zanya
A poem with a sense of sadness and loss for a friend, yet such happy memories are laced into the stanzas and the reader shares experiences with the poet of happier times.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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A poem with a sense of sadness and loss for a friend, yet such happy memories are laced into the stanzas and the reader shares experiences with the poet of happier times.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your review!