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Willing Hearts

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Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?

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Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
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Hi Barbara,
I got behind again, but I really enjoyed this chapter. Sami really got a chance to show her vinegar! She didn't let Galvin rattle her. I think she was angry about the eyes comment as much as anything. What a terrible experience for her. First, her student wasn't found and Chen got away, then Galvin swooped in to stir up trouble, but Sami was strong and made him storm off.

Great job,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 10-Aug-2024
    Thank you. I appreciate you.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
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Barbara,
This is a nice continuation of your story. Your chapter is well/written.
I like the way you alternate short paragraphs and sentences with long ones.
A great ending leading to another chapter.
Best wishes for your series,
Barbara.
Cindy

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
    Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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Yea to Sami! She should turn Gavin in when this is over. As a civilian she can say somethings they cannot. Gavin is incompetent. That is a very dangerous place to be. Karen

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
    Thank you for the kind review. Maybe Galvin should get killed off. You want to do it tonight????
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 31-Jul-2024
    That talk with Sami angered Galvin. Treating him as is if he was nothing. Like those great lumps did all the work. They would see different tonight! He would take down Chen. A lone operative could get in as a customer and kill Chen. You just wait and see. They would be shown up for the slackards they are. Maybe he'd swing by and get Sami to use as bait. He could think up paperwork or something as an excuse. As if he needed to. He was the one in charge! Something like that? Gavin is a retard. :-)
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
    LOL
Comment from Sanku
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This has become complicated .Gavin 's irritation at not being able to arrest may have disruption since he is the boss. I wonder where Myra is . And what has really happened to her..

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
    We will find Myra very soon. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Daylily
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An interesting situation here, although it is always a sad thing when someone above your own job position has major weaknesses and character flaws.

You continue to offer excellent character development and that helps keep the story moving, plus readers want to stay involved. Another super chapter, Barbara. :-)

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
    Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Teri7
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Barbara, This is a six star chaser in my eyes, but to be honest they all are. I was a little on edge when I read she was going to take a walk with Baldwin. She must getting desperate to get on with her life! love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
    Thank you for the kind review. She didn't really have a choice. Baldwin ordered her too. LOL
reply by Teri7 on 30-Jul-2024
    lol I really like how brave she was with her talking! great chapter my friend!
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
    Thank you. I appreciate the encouragment.
Comment from Paul McFarland
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That was exciting, Barb. You have just added another item to the stew. It will be interesting to see what comes of this encounter. Will Noah be looking for a new job?

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from T B Botts
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Hello Barbara,
this story moved right along with some interesting parts that gave it a feeling of realism. I'm curious how Chen got away, but glad to see that Sami's friend isn't a pedophile. Well done gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
    I have a feeling Chen easily walked out the door because nobody was there in time to stop him. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
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Three cheers for Sami!! She really put Galvin in his place. Maybe Galvin will be looking for a new job.
Interesting chapter with Sarah's possible pregnancy that could change the dynamics of the team.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
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This chapter is well in keeping with your writing style and strong female orientated themes. I think it will greatly appeal to your target reader and give them a boost as they read. Good writing and editing.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
    Thank you for this kind review.