Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi

This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!

Hmmm. Why was Trump saying that's not true at the end? Maybe I missed something. That's not true that no puppies were harmed?

This is pretty funny, but kind of disgusting in a way. Kamala wouldn't be carrying around fetal parts in her suitcase. She may be pro-choice, but she's not that disgusting.

And I don't believe she'd be caring around a vibrator like that. She's always with her husband

But, you sure wrote up a hilarious story here and this is probably the funniest entry I've seen for this contest. Probably you are also very brave because some people from both sides probably are upset with your story. I just think it's funny.

Here why didn't you just say she?

" She/her had arrived even earlier than Don"

Here. Did you mean it neither was as?

" It neither as appetizing or as healthy as what she had packed "

Here practiced

" she practicing her dance moves"

I enjoyed reading your story

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024

Thank you Pam for this excellent and thorough review. That's way more than I get from most folks here. I have made changes on the typos you caught.

Explanation for some of the other stuff:

-I kept she/her just to mock the ubiquitous use of pronouns, which I have seen Harris using before on a plaque or nametag

-Harris is far and away the most pro-abortion candidate who has ever run for President, with a 100% rating from NARAL, and receives significant financial backing from the abortion industry. The link above shows much more detail on this. That's the singular reason I have gone after her with a vile fictional narrative -- this is a blind review so I can't discuss that here but let's just say I have been writing about her for quite some time. For his part, Trump has totally rewarded and manipulated woman who use their bodies to advance themselves in the workplace, so he's no saint either and I will probably go after him too on the subject before this election is over!

Thanks again!

Comment from PastorTee

Excellent

Hilarious! I can only imagine the turn this story can take as these characters adjust to the fact that they have reallly lost their luggage. As of now, they cannot see the real picture of their loss. Wait until they really take time to see through their situations.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024

They might decide to keep each other's luggage after the encounter that happens at the end, if they find they can live smelling their cologne on each other instead of themselves...
thanks and glad you enjoyed!
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