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Comment from Ric Myworld
Bad choices, I guess we've all made a few. And honestly, if I'm willing to admit, I've made many more than most. But this is one your character won't have to regret. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Bad choices, I guess we've all made a few. And honestly, if I'm willing to admit, I've made many more than most. But this is one your character won't have to regret. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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I couldn't find a picture anywhere of a guy or anyone going through a masher. So I found the beautiful picture of that majestic ape, whose expression told me humans! They are supposed to be the smart ones? Karen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Howie solved a problem for you. They wouldn't be taking you over until they found someone to take his place, or they might not want you after all. Howie certainly made a significant exit.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Howie solved a problem for you. They wouldn't be taking you over until they found someone to take his place, or they might not want you after all. Howie certainly made a significant exit.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Exit stage left! Well, my thinking is; He signed a statement saying he and the company he works for is 100% liable for anything he does. So, we can sue the companies heinie off. :-)
Comment from karenina
I admit I get a huge kick out of these "it's all gonna go bad" stories...
But I know your depth is profound and you are NOT a one-trick pony!
Those three named men make this all the more comical.
I'm ASTOUNDED you couldn't find a photo of a man being mauled by a mashing machine...
(Or perhaps this is reality and all the photos have been stolen to protect this guilty!)
Heh heh...
I have a dark side that laughs at your wild stories!
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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I admit I get a huge kick out of these "it's all gonna go bad" stories...
But I know your depth is profound and you are NOT a one-trick pony!
Those three named men make this all the more comical.
I'm ASTOUNDED you couldn't find a photo of a man being mauled by a mashing machine...
(Or perhaps this is reality and all the photos have been stolen to protect this guilty!)
Heh heh...
I have a dark side that laughs at your wild stories!
Karenina
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Well, I wonder what we would find if we looked inside my brain? Thanks for the read. Karen
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A lot more BRAIN than mine!
LOL...
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Yea, I thought pinterest had everything. Color me disappointed. Karen
Comment from Jim Wile
I liked this, Karen. So, was it a conscious plot on your MC's part to detach the safety bar, or was that coincidental? I think probably the former to get rid of this pest, as you are wont to do in your stories :-)
There is a certain sense of justice to your stories that is, if not exactly admirable, at least partially justified and always amusing. I have a feeling you would never be picked as a juror except by a defense attorney who desires a juror willing to exonerate his guilty client by jury nullification.
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In the following passage, you don't need the two sets of quotation marks between dentures and Every. These should both be part of the same quotation.
"Howie, I always wanted to be pawed and man-handled by a guy with bad dentures." "Every time you come near me, I dream of you whisking me away to the nearest Motel Six for five minutes of sweaty loving."
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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I liked this, Karen. So, was it a conscious plot on your MC's part to detach the safety bar, or was that coincidental? I think probably the former to get rid of this pest, as you are wont to do in your stories :-)
There is a certain sense of justice to your stories that is, if not exactly admirable, at least partially justified and always amusing. I have a feeling you would never be picked as a juror except by a defense attorney who desires a juror willing to exonerate his guilty client by jury nullification.
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In the following passage, you don't need the two sets of quotation marks between dentures and Every. These should both be part of the same quotation.
"Howie, I always wanted to be pawed and man-handled by a guy with bad dentures." "Every time you come near me, I dream of you whisking me away to the nearest Motel Six for five minutes of sweaty loving."
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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I did wonder about that I will go fix it. Thank you;
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this story with us. Some people just can't be helped. I enjoyed reading.
hree first names. It just doesn't seem normal.Just call me (space after the period)
"Howie, I always wanted to be pawed and man-handled by a guy with bad dentures." "Every time you come near me, (Why the double quotation marks in the middle of this?)
"Give me one then." He said (he)
plowed right through that sucker didn't he? (comma needed after 'sucker')
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thank you for sharing this story with us. Some people just can't be helped. I enjoyed reading.
hree first names. It just doesn't seem normal.Just call me (space after the period)
"Howie, I always wanted to be pawed and man-handled by a guy with bad dentures." "Every time you come near me, (Why the double quotation marks in the middle of this?)
"Give me one then." He said (he)
plowed right through that sucker didn't he? (comma needed after 'sucker')
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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I edited. Thanks for the read. good eye.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
Hi Karen. What an imaginative story. It was very detailed and the 3 named guy was clever. I enjoyed reading it. Liked the end. Great writing. Love, Brenda
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Hi Karen. What an imaginative story. It was very detailed and the 3 named guy was clever. I enjoyed reading it. Liked the end. Great writing. Love, Brenda
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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I always thought it was weird to have 3 first names. Icky. how about three last names? Franklin Albertson Periwinkle. :-)
Comment from GoWiSt
"Look before you leap
Bad Choices Can Be Deadly" Wise words.
"my last nerve. A dangerous place to be." What happened to the other nerves? And where is this last one?
"I never trusted anyone with three last names" So says 'Karen Cherry Threadgill the 3rd'.
Duluth has a world-renowned trading company, you know. One could do worse than 'bumping uglies' with an exec from there.
Ah, yet another classic 'obnoxious man dies from/at the hands of a strong female' literary trope from the great goddess Threadgill. Men, beware.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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"Look before you leap
Bad Choices Can Be Deadly" Wise words.
"my last nerve. A dangerous place to be." What happened to the other nerves? And where is this last one?
"I never trusted anyone with three last names" So says 'Karen Cherry Threadgill the 3rd'.
Duluth has a world-renowned trading company, you know. One could do worse than 'bumping uglies' with an exec from there.
Ah, yet another classic 'obnoxious man dies from/at the hands of a strong female' literary trope from the great goddess Threadgill. Men, beware.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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I have you on my radar. Mine looks like Ray Walston's on "MY Favorite Martain". My last nerve is located between my right big toe and your heinie! :-)
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Karen,
you chose the perfect picture for this post gal. It seems that there are an uncommon amount of jerks hanging around somewhere in your muse. I know that you like men, or at least some men- right? I agree, guys with three names are a little shaky. That's why I sign my books with two initials and my last name. I don't want to appear snobby. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Hello Karen,
you chose the perfect picture for this post gal. It seems that there are an uncommon amount of jerks hanging around somewhere in your muse. I know that you like men, or at least some men- right? I agree, guys with three names are a little shaky. That's why I sign my books with two initials and my last name. I don't want to appear snobby. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 10-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Isn't that picture a beauty? His face says so much.
I couldn't find a picture of a man getting crushed by automatic machinary, go figure! Thanks for the read. Karen
Comment from GWHARGIS
Oh, Karen, you naughty, naughty girl. You are always killing people. Seriously, this was a fun flash fiction piece. My son says the same thing about people with three first names. Lol. This was a funny piece that had a bite to it. Gretchen
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Oh, Karen, you naughty, naughty girl. You are always killing people. Seriously, this was a fun flash fiction piece. My son says the same thing about people with three first names. Lol. This was a funny piece that had a bite to it. Gretchen
Comment Written 10-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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John David Clark, Patrick allen James. yuck.Thanks for the read, I owe you two. Karen
Comment from Douglas Goff
No, Karen? Not the ol' masher! Day it isn't so!
Laughs my butt off here, because really, who doesn't? :
say, "Howie, I always wanted to be pawed and man-handled by a guy with bad dentures."
Lovely, my dear. Just lovely.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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No, Karen? Not the ol' masher! Day it isn't so!
Laughs my butt off here, because really, who doesn't? :
say, "Howie, I always wanted to be pawed and man-handled by a guy with bad dentures."
Lovely, my dear. Just lovely.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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I need dentures myself so I am kind of sensitive about it. Thanks for the read and the shiny shiny. I've missed seeing you. Karen