I Remember
Something I Will Never Forget25 total reviews
Comment from Nicki.B
Firstly sorry for your loss, it is devastating to lose a love one and even more devastating when it was before their time, so young
I'll never forget those feelings of losing my Granny and not making it to the hospital in time before she took her last breaths.
This poem really touched me and brought back all the memories, my Gran had stomach cancer which was undiagnosed she was in hospital having tests as she hadn't been well for over a year.
She died of heart failure in hospital, they did resuscitation but we didn't make it, it was devastating.
I love how you started each verse with I remember, it gave your poem great structure and flow.
Well done and take care.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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Firstly sorry for your loss, it is devastating to lose a love one and even more devastating when it was before their time, so young
I'll never forget those feelings of losing my Granny and not making it to the hospital in time before she took her last breaths.
This poem really touched me and brought back all the memories, my Gran had stomach cancer which was undiagnosed she was in hospital having tests as she hadn't been well for over a year.
She died of heart failure in hospital, they did resuscitation but we didn't make it, it was devastating.
I love how you started each verse with I remember, it gave your poem great structure and flow.
Well done and take care.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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I've lost seven family members in the last few years (all younger than me) and even more before that. It's tough to know that their lives ended so soon. My heart goes out to you as well for your loss.... it's never easy.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Carol I'm so sorry you have had to experience so much loss in your life. Blessing to you xxx
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Thank you and the same to you! Life is a game of Russian Roulette and we never know what will come our way. We just have to have faith that it wil all be okay.
Comment from BOO ghost
This looks nice and clean at first glance. First, allow me to explain something? I know for sure I had a 6 yesterday. Somehow, it mysterious vanished? Guess if you don't use them, you lose them? I was saving the six for this chapter, the reason I only gave a five the last post due to saving for this one. It's only Friday. It vanished! I have learned something. I know, I'm a procrastinator! My mugshot is in the Websters Collegiate Dictionary under procrastinator. Well, guess tardy beats nothing at all.
Reading prose...your footnotes help clarify matters. A ruptured heart valve? She died too soon! I reminisce from time to time. Memories are branded into the memory with a branding iron. Sometimes remembering can cause sadness. It's hard to say goodbye, but the spiritual world awaits. I remember trying to understand why she didn't seem to be in pain. Perhaps the cancer cells blocked the nerve pain receptors from the brain? A hypothesis.
I remember Grandma looking strangely at me and asking what was wrong. My face was drained of color, and my eyes were filled with tears. These are tear-jerking moments.
My mom died 4 years ago? First was the stroke, next the nursing home. The lame staff caused her to break two hip bones because they not watch and monitor patients and provide no walking aids.
Well, this was tragic.I only got a virtual six left. I will use them all before Friday next time. I know for sure I saw six stars available yesterday?
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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This looks nice and clean at first glance. First, allow me to explain something? I know for sure I had a 6 yesterday. Somehow, it mysterious vanished? Guess if you don't use them, you lose them? I was saving the six for this chapter, the reason I only gave a five the last post due to saving for this one. It's only Friday. It vanished! I have learned something. I know, I'm a procrastinator! My mugshot is in the Websters Collegiate Dictionary under procrastinator. Well, guess tardy beats nothing at all.
Reading prose...your footnotes help clarify matters. A ruptured heart valve? She died too soon! I reminisce from time to time. Memories are branded into the memory with a branding iron. Sometimes remembering can cause sadness. It's hard to say goodbye, but the spiritual world awaits. I remember trying to understand why she didn't seem to be in pain. Perhaps the cancer cells blocked the nerve pain receptors from the brain? A hypothesis.
I remember Grandma looking strangely at me and asking what was wrong. My face was drained of color, and my eyes were filled with tears. These are tear-jerking moments.
My mom died 4 years ago? First was the stroke, next the nursing home. The lame staff caused her to break two hip bones because they not watch and monitor patients and provide no walking aids.
Well, this was tragic.I only got a virtual six left. I will use them all before Friday next time. I know for sure I saw six stars available yesterday?
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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No need to explain about the stars, Boo! You are always so kind... and I appreciate it so much. I've lost far too many family members, most younger than me. I guess the Lord works in mysterious ways and I am still here for a reason. My heart is with you and the loss of your Mom. Take care.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Shanbreen
Thank you, Begin, for sharing such an emotional moment in your life. I have had similar experiences and, although, each of us have our own way of dealing with our emotions, it is always good to know that there is a family member to look after our newly departed. Best of luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Begin, for sharing such an emotional moment in your life. I have had similar experiences and, although, each of us have our own way of dealing with our emotions, it is always good to know that there is a family member to look after our newly departed. Best of luck for the contest.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much. I've had several blessing at the time a family member has passed, but this one was so different... actually seeing my daughter standing there if only for a moment gave me the strength to help my Mom pass away.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lancellot
Very interesting writing concept. The words I remember, can be a good thing, or a very sad thing. You do a good job bring the reader with you on an emotional trip into your past. These are, unfortunately are the trials of life we all can relate to sooner or later.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2024
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Very interesting writing concept. The words I remember, can be a good thing, or a very sad thing. You do a good job bring the reader with you on an emotional trip into your past. These are, unfortunately are the trials of life we all can relate to sooner or later.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2024
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Yes, you are right. I experience seven family deaths within 18 months and to say it was traumatic would be putting it mildly. I feel this moment was a blessing for me and my Mom. Thank you for the review and kind words.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Brenda Strauser
What a sad story. I like the way you used I remember. Losing someone close to you is so hard. So sorry for your loss. My mom died 3 years ago. The poem is written well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2024
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What a sad story. I like the way you used I remember. Losing someone close to you is so hard. So sorry for your loss. My mom died 3 years ago. The poem is written well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2024
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thank you! I lost my mother, father and husband within a few months. And then a year later I lost my brother and my Sis. If it wasn't for my faith, I'd probably not be here.
Smiles, Carol
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That is so much to deal with. God gives us strength and courage.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Well, my goodness this is a strong and poignant memory. I am thinking it won't lose ANY potency by next year.
Thank you for sharing something so personal. I am sure it was not easy. Perhaps it was a little therapeutic?
Good luck in that distant competition!
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2024
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Well, my goodness this is a strong and poignant memory. I am thinking it won't lose ANY potency by next year.
Thank you for sharing something so personal. I am sure it was not easy. Perhaps it was a little therapeutic?
Good luck in that distant competition!
D
Comment Written 21-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Doug. No, every time I think about that day, I can see every moment of it. In my heart, I know I was blessed to have the support that God sent me that day. Thank you so much for your kindness and understanding and for the lovely stars.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I am sorry for your losses. If we keep living we have them. When we need people that are gone, they sometimes show up for us.
I do not find that odd. Someone invented cheesecake, That also is a miracle if you ask me. :-) Karen
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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I am sorry for your losses. If we keep living we have them. When we need people that are gone, they sometimes show up for us.
I do not find that odd. Someone invented cheesecake, That also is a miracle if you ask me. :-) Karen
Comment Written 21-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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I believe with all my heart that my daughter was there. That's the picture I took. I wanted to post one of her when she was alive so people could compare but I didn't know how to do that on FS. Thanks so much for the review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from jessizero
I am so sorry for this loss. You did a beautiful job relaying this nonfiction story. I loved that you began every new paragraph with "I remember." Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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I am so sorry for this loss. You did a beautiful job relaying this nonfiction story. I loved that you began every new paragraph with "I remember." Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Jessi. This particular time was very important to me and I appreciate your kindness and understand. Have a great day.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sarah Sandison
I knew as soon as I started reading this that this was written from personal experience. I'm so sorry you lost two people very close to you in such a short period of time.
I lost my mum and my sister within 6 months of each other, so I know the pain of such loss, but I too believe in heaven and look forward to seeing them again one day. Well done on your beautiful story. Love Sarah
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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I knew as soon as I started reading this that this was written from personal experience. I'm so sorry you lost two people very close to you in such a short period of time.
I lost my mum and my sister within 6 months of each other, so I know the pain of such loss, but I too believe in heaven and look forward to seeing them again one day. Well done on your beautiful story. Love Sarah
Comment Written 21-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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Actually between 2012 and 2018, I lost seven family members. I was and still is devasting, but I know they are in a better place. As for the blessing of my daughter appearing when my Mom was passing, it's a gift that I will never forget. Thank you so much for your kindness, the comments and the stars.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have certainly had more than your share of tragedy in your life. I was going to enter the I Remember contest, too, but I just won the Share Your Story, so I'm not eligible. I wish you the best in the nonfiction contest.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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You have certainly had more than your share of tragedy in your life. I was going to enter the I Remember contest, too, but I just won the Share Your Story, so I'm not eligible. I wish you the best in the nonfiction contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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Thanks, April. I sent you congratulations this morning. I hope you saw it. Life's been rough at times, but blessings like this one keep me going. Thank you so much.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
