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Was It A Joke?

A ghost story with too many ghosts

9 total reviews 
Comment from Aiona
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So many twists in this short story! What a great way to use the theme! I didn't see any typos. I loved trying to figure out what was real and what was a joke.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
    Thank you so much Aiona, for reading my short story and for enjoying it. I like when I can keep the reader guessing till the end. Have a great day!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Exceptional
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I was going to enter, I went to read the other entries to make sure I am not too similiar in style, and was impressed with your work. You certainly deserve to win. I am not entering. Karen

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
    Feel free to enter! I rarely win anyhow. But it was fun to write... It was suppose to be a next day vote and suddenly it became three more days...I am waiting for it to change again. LOL Smiles and hugs.....

    I just now saw that you gave me a six...Wow! What a gift! Thank you!
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 27-Aug-2024
    I have discovered that although on occasion I can be competitive. Shocker right?
    You wrote a good piece of work, I enjoyed it. Karen
Comment from Aussie
Exceptional
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Great post with lots of ghostly energy floating around. You sure got my attention. I don't see them, but know there is a baddie if the temperature drops. I think you have a great entry for the writing prompt. Blessings, K.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 26-Aug-2024
    It's what kids do, Right? But was the last one Carrie or was something really following behind? It's a question none of them really know. thanks for the awesome review and the stars. You are more than kind and I am thrilled you enjoyed the story.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from Jacob1395
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That was a nice twist at the end, although a cruel prank for him to pull on his sister. I could really feel how frightened she was, I think I would be too, particularly after reading a ghost story. I really enjoyed your piece. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    Thank you, Jacob! We all know how getting deeply involved in a story can put your nerves on edge and make us react differently. I appreciate your thoughts on the story and wish you a great day!
Comment from Sharon Elwell
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This was a clever way to keep the reader guessing. Who was pranking whom? If Carrie was really scared, why was she brave enough to play the trick on her brother? Everybody scaring someone else was a good twist.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    Thanks for the kind review. Actually, I left the reader to figure out if Carrie was just sneaking back into the house or was she creeping out her brother on her way home? It could go either way, I suppose. Thanks for the great review.
Comment from papa55mike
Exceptional
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It sounds like Halloween at our house when the kids still lived at home. My two sons and I were always trying to outdo each other. What a wonderfully written story with several great twists. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    Thank you so much, Mike. I wasn't sure it fit into the supernatural but I hoped it was entertaining at least. I thank you for your time and your comments. Have a great day!

    Oh my, as I was about to hit save reply, I realized you've give it a six. Now I'm stunned and overjoyed. Thank you!
Comment from lancellot
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Hmm, was it really Supernatural if it was all pranks? Well, who knows. I think this was well fashioned, safe, and will be appreciated by the FanStory members. You may very well have a winning entry. Good luck.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    I'm not too good at the supernatural but i gave it a shot. I hope that it had enough whodunits to make it intersting at least. Thank you for your kindness. Have a great day!
Comment from M.Ceili
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Honestly, wasn't sure I liked it. It first yet I kept going and love how it ended each person trying to be a ghost and play a prank on another. What a creative way to have a story be told.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    You scared me the way your review started out...Maybe I saw the ghost. LOL I hoped the idea had come across, but then I was afraid it hadn't. Thanks for the review.
    Smiles and Have a great day!
Comment from RodG
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I think young readers--as well as adults--will like this ghost story because (1) it's about kids who like to scare their younger siblings with ghost stories, (2) you have set the scene very well with your description, and (3) there is plenty of action as the older kids play tricks on one another. Rod

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
    Thanks so much, Rod. I'm not to good at these supernatural stuff, but I am thrilled that you saw that tricks were being played in every direction. Smiles and Have a great day!