Insignificance Is A Word
loop poem8 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yes, I guess everything needs nourishment for the body, but a buzzard doesn't seem like much of a priority in the thick of things. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
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Yes, I guess everything needs nourishment for the body, but a buzzard doesn't seem like much of a priority in the thick of things. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2024
Comment from GoWiSt
"loop poem" Take us around.
"Insignificance Is A Word" A long, big one at that.
"I feed the buzzards
Buzzards need food" Yes, but they can easily get their own food. It's like feeding worms.
"Air on loan to everyone" So, I guess when we die we pay it back? Interesting concept--loaned/borrowed air.
"Insignificant is a Word
A Word not known to God" Aha, I knew God didn't know everything. He should go back to school.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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"loop poem" Take us around.
"Insignificance Is A Word" A long, big one at that.
"I feed the buzzards
Buzzards need food" Yes, but they can easily get their own food. It's like feeding worms.
"Air on loan to everyone" So, I guess when we die we pay it back? Interesting concept--loaned/borrowed air.
"Insignificant is a Word
A Word not known to God" Aha, I knew God didn't know everything. He should go back to school.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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I went out this morning, threw some lunch met to a bunch of hungry buzzards, came in, saw the contest, and so started with that.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I suppose all creatures, ugly or pretty are important to God as all wildlife has a right to survive on this planet, and no creature is insignificant, I enjoyed the sentiment here Jim, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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I suppose all creatures, ugly or pretty are important to God as all wildlife has a right to survive on this planet, and no creature is insignificant, I enjoyed the sentiment here Jim, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for reviewing!
Comment from shelley kaye
since this is a contest entry... last line isn't really looped - need to delete the 'a'
other than that, a great loop poem with deep meaning, nice imagery, and smooth flow
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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since this is a contest entry... last line isn't really looped - need to delete the 'a'
other than that, a great loop poem with deep meaning, nice imagery, and smooth flow
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!
shelley :)
Comment Written 27-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much, Shelley! I'll check that out now!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this loop poem contest entry with us. You did a wonderful job writing this poem and yes all of God's creations have worth. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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Thank you for sharing this loop poem contest entry with us. You did a wonderful job writing this poem and yes all of God's creations have worth. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for your kind words.
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He did. Many of your poems are inspired by God.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
wow. I've never seen such a long loop poem! I have trouble getting 4 lines done. Great job on this. Good luck in the Loop poetry contest and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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wow. I've never seen such a long loop poem! I have trouble getting 4 lines done. Great job on this. Good luck in the Loop poetry contest and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much, my friend.
Comment from pome lover
That is a very pithy poem, well expressed. I have read it several times. The only thought I disagree with, and it is small, is the one saying "air on loan to everyone." You have probably heard, all your life, the expression, "free as the air we breathe."
I know that God is all powerful and all of nature was created by Him, but I like to think that He gave us the air we breathe, that it's not on loan.
I still think your Loop poem is very good. The above just gave me pause.
Katharine
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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That is a very pithy poem, well expressed. I have read it several times. The only thought I disagree with, and it is small, is the one saying "air on loan to everyone." You have probably heard, all your life, the expression, "free as the air we breathe."
I know that God is all powerful and all of nature was created by Him, but I like to think that He gave us the air we breathe, that it's not on loan.
I still think your Loop poem is very good. The above just gave me pause.
Katharine
Comment Written 27-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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You're probably too young to remember Rush Limbaugh. One of his taglines was "talent on loan from God". I paid homage to that here.
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Mr. Vecchio, I appreciate your very nice assumption of my age. I guess the picture of me is about ten or so years old. I should probably try to find another one, but, anyway, I certainly remember Rush Limbaugh, however, if I may, "talent" is not air.
I was just remarking on the use of that word.
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I did not mean to demean you at all. I guess it was a crude attempt at a compliment.
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ah! well, a very belated apology and a grateful thank you for the compliment!
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Your poem is a thoughtful exploration of interconnectedness and the inherent value of all life. The repetition and structure create a rhythmic flow that underscores the theme, gradually building from the simple act of feeding buzzards to a broader contemplation of existence. I appreciate how you emphasize that every being, no matter how small or seemingly insignificant, has worth and purpose in God's eyes. The progression from the physical to the spiritual elements of life feels natural and meaningful, and your final lines drive home a powerful message about the absence of insignificance in God's creation. This is a beautiful reflection on the sanctity of life and the divine perspective that sees beyond surface appearances. Well done
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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Your poem is a thoughtful exploration of interconnectedness and the inherent value of all life. The repetition and structure create a rhythmic flow that underscores the theme, gradually building from the simple act of feeding buzzards to a broader contemplation of existence. I appreciate how you emphasize that every being, no matter how small or seemingly insignificant, has worth and purpose in God's eyes. The progression from the physical to the spiritual elements of life feels natural and meaningful, and your final lines drive home a powerful message about the absence of insignificance in God's creation. This is a beautiful reflection on the sanctity of life and the divine perspective that sees beyond surface appearances. Well done
Comment Written 27-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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Thank you so very much for this very in-depth review. I appreciate it very much!
