haiku (seductive red rose)
haiku contest13 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Often where there's beauty there is danger, and you reminded us of this with the beautiful contest entry. Thank you for sharing this entry with us and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Often where there's beauty there is danger, and you reminded us of this with the beautiful contest entry. Thank you for sharing this entry with us and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to review my little haiku.
Comment from Patrick Bernardy
Hello Val!
You adapt the traditional idea of a rose into something much more sinister. Good poetry creates different connotations to symbols, and make no mistake, one of the most powerful symbols in all artforms is the red rose. You eschew the most popular symbol of "rose" as wholesome romantic love for its other side, the dangerous (maybe even toxic) allure of power dynamics and manipulation, adultry and exploitation.
The rhythmic impression of your Haiku is held together by the well-placed alliteration of "s," "r," and "b." I think this is a very good Haiku--off the beaten path and original in its context. Well done!
Patrick
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Hello Val!
You adapt the traditional idea of a rose into something much more sinister. Good poetry creates different connotations to symbols, and make no mistake, one of the most powerful symbols in all artforms is the red rose. You eschew the most popular symbol of "rose" as wholesome romantic love for its other side, the dangerous (maybe even toxic) allure of power dynamics and manipulation, adultry and exploitation.
The rhythmic impression of your Haiku is held together by the well-placed alliteration of "s," "r," and "b." I think this is a very good Haiku--off the beaten path and original in its context. Well done!
Patrick
Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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This is one of the best reviews I have ever recieved on this site, and I have been on it for a long time. I can't thank you enough for all the time and energy you put in to my little haiku. Wonderful! Val
Comment from RodG
Roses like some women can be seductive and treacherous. The Speaker's warning should be heeded. But oftentimes beauty will overwhelm caution. A great picture chosen to accompany your poem. Rod
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2024
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Roses like some women can be seductive and treacherous. The Speaker's warning should be heeded. But oftentimes beauty will overwhelm caution. A great picture chosen to accompany your poem. Rod
Comment Written 06-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2024
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Thank you for this insightful review.
Comment from papa55mike
The beauty of roses can come with a little pain if not careful. A lot like life. What a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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The beauty of roses can come with a little pain if not careful. A lot like life. What a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 03-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Thank you for this lovely review
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
A love your haiku and the powerful message that you share! The contrast between the rose's beauty and its sharp thorns does a great job in sharing a message of danger. Well done!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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A love your haiku and the powerful message that you share! The contrast between the rose's beauty and its sharp thorns does a great job in sharing a message of danger. Well done!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much for you wonderfu insight
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Seductive Red Rose, has the proper formatting and reminds the readers that there are a handful of thorns to be found before the rose is touched.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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This haiku, Seductive Red Rose, has the proper formatting and reminds the readers that there are a handful of thorns to be found before the rose is touched.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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Thank you for such a lovely review
Comment from Janet Foor
I always enjoy your haiku poems. The 5/7/5 syllable count does work well for this one. Your play on words is clearly a strength you do so well.
Excellent satori line. So happy I have another 6.
Well done Val.
Hope you are doing well. My husband is much better but this week our 24 year old grandson received 2nd and 3rd degree burns on his arm, shoulder and head. He's had a few skin grafts and has to have more next week. He gets treatments on his face every few days and will probably be hospitalized for several weeks. Would really appreciate your prayers for Tristan.
Blessings Val.
Janet.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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I always enjoy your haiku poems. The 5/7/5 syllable count does work well for this one. Your play on words is clearly a strength you do so well.
Excellent satori line. So happy I have another 6.
Well done Val.
Hope you are doing well. My husband is much better but this week our 24 year old grandson received 2nd and 3rd degree burns on his arm, shoulder and head. He's had a few skin grafts and has to have more next week. He gets treatments on his face every few days and will probably be hospitalized for several weeks. Would really appreciate your prayers for Tristan.
Blessings Val.
Janet.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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Oh, Janet, thank you so much for this exceptionl. You spoil me, but I love it! Glad you husbnd is recovering nicely, as healing becomes so much harder as one ages. I am very sorry about your grandson. Is Tristan the one you wrote about, that is a soccer player? Sounds like a horrible accident. Prayers sent. Hugs dear friend.
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Yes, Tristan is the one who plays soccer and had a stroke a year ago on his way to Malaysia. He was cleared to play again about a month ago. Now this accident happened. He was sprayed with diesel fuel at work and he is in a burn unit in Tampa. They expect a full recovery after several skin grafts and chemical peals on his face but it will take months. All this happened last Monday. I write to him everyday and today he wrote back to me. Praise God.
Thank you for your prayers for Tristan.
Blessings my friend.
Janet
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How horrible. I worry about you taking on all this pain, as I sense you are a sensitive soul. I hope you have a great support system, and I know you have a very strong faith. My brother only survived, because of his strong faith so much pain in his life. Hugs and Hope
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Thanks Val. We do have a strong support system with friends,family and our church and so does Tristan. It is so very important to survive. Hope your brother is doing well.
Hugs and hope to you as well.
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Yes, family and faith are so important. My brother passed years ago, but he's still my saint. Good luck with everything.
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So sorry about your brother but glad you have good memories of your Saint. It does help to have those goid memories.
Take care Val.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from jake cosmos aller
loved this short haiku about the thorns in the flower and to beware of beautiful things. The Koreans have a word for a gold digger snake in the flowers which means they are beautiful and seductive but with deadly intent.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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loved this short haiku about the thorns in the flower and to beware of beautiful things. The Koreans have a word for a gold digger snake in the flowers which means they are beautiful and seductive but with deadly intent.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Exactly, beauty can deceptive. I grow roses, and they are Divas in many ways. Thank you the lovely review.
Comment from gansach
This is a great entry for the Haiku competition. The photo is perfect, the red shading is like a warning signal to be wary as are your words in caution yellow~it may look beautiful, but beware of love's sting. Great job!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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This is a great entry for the Haiku competition. The photo is perfect, the red shading is like a warning signal to be wary as are your words in caution yellow~it may look beautiful, but beware of love's sting. Great job!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you for this very insightful review They are rare on this site anymore.
Comment from jessizero
This was a great haiku for the contest. I liked your mental image of a rose, and you got the syllable counts right. The picture you supplied was nice, too. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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This was a great haiku for the contest. I liked your mental image of a rose, and you got the syllable counts right. The picture you supplied was nice, too. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the lovely review.
