Haiku-dark tumbling through dark
Haiku39 total reviews
Comment from BermyBye50
SugarRay77,
Congrats on winning the Haiku contest. You perfectly described the dervish dance of a tornado in this carefully crafted poem.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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SugarRay77,
Congrats on winning the Haiku contest. You perfectly described the dervish dance of a tornado in this carefully crafted poem.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Hello Eugene. Thank you so much for your wonderful review. So glad you liked it.
Melissa
Comment from Lobber
Hi Melissa,
Nice job- congratulations!
You'll have to teach me the art of writing a haiku....mine always fall flat.
I hope your summer is going well
- jer
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Hi Melissa,
Nice job- congratulations!
You'll have to teach me the art of writing a haiku....mine always fall flat.
I hope your summer is going well
- jer
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Hello Jer. Thanks so much. You have all the talent you need to write a good haiku. Just plan to express yourself in an unexpected manner. Also, a traditional haiku always as a reference to nature and a Senryu to human nature. FYI.
Melissa
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024
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Thank you so very much!! I am honored by the selection.
Melissa
Sugarray77
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
That must be a scary sight. We don't get tornados up here in New Brunswick (that I know of). Have you ever seen one?
I enjoyed your entry for the Haiku contest, especially all the "d" sounds throughout. Also the inner rhyme, "deadened, leaden", to describe the sky.
Once, just once in my whole life, a few years back, there was a dark foreboding wave of a cloud that dropped down from the northwest. It was ominous-looking! But nothing materialized for us as I thought it would. It just continued to blow towards the southeast, towards the Atlantic Ocean off Nova Scotia.
Nicely penned, and terrific picture!
Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Hi Melissa,
That must be a scary sight. We don't get tornados up here in New Brunswick (that I know of). Have you ever seen one?
I enjoyed your entry for the Haiku contest, especially all the "d" sounds throughout. Also the inner rhyme, "deadened, leaden", to describe the sky.
Once, just once in my whole life, a few years back, there was a dark foreboding wave of a cloud that dropped down from the northwest. It was ominous-looking! But nothing materialized for us as I thought it would. It just continued to blow towards the southeast, towards the Atlantic Ocean off Nova Scotia.
Nicely penned, and terrific picture!
Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 07-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2024
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Hey there KB. I appreciate your comments. I had a tornado coming straight at me when I was 22 years old. Thank goodness it veered off into the woods near my home. I was driving and as it closely passed by there was a solid sheet of rain I couldn't see through.... and I was inching along. Ugh! Not fun. Thanks again!
Melissa
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My pleasure, Melissa! Have a good sleep tonight!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment from Pearl Edwards
What a picture of this destructive force, a weather event you wouldn't want to be in the middle of. Love the alliteration of dark, deadened, dervishing in your haiku, Melissa. Great presentation and good luck in the contest.
cheers
valda.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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What a picture of this destructive force, a weather event you wouldn't want to be in the middle of. Love the alliteration of dark, deadened, dervishing in your haiku, Melissa. Great presentation and good luck in the contest.
cheers
valda.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Hello Valda. Thanks so much for your wonderful review and insightful comments. So appreciated!
Melissa
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was such a dramatic poem. From the darkness you described which in the sky is so imposing and oppressive to the description of the dervish dance. So action packed and dramatic. Gretchen
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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This was such a dramatic poem. From the darkness you described which in the sky is so imposing and oppressive to the description of the dervish dance. So action packed and dramatic. Gretchen
Comment Written 04-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
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Hello Gretchen. Thank you. It is a dramatic poem... I know first hand what it is like to have a tornado coming at you... scary! So appreciate your comments!
Melissa
Comment from Ulla
Hi Melissa, your dark words in this well written haiku certainly portray the stark image of a tornado. I have experienced a cat 4 in Missouri back in 2003. Your words brought it all back. Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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Hi Melissa, your dark words in this well written haiku certainly portray the stark image of a tornado. I have experienced a cat 4 in Missouri back in 2003. Your words brought it all back. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 04-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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Oh my, Ulla, I known what you mean... I had one coming directly at me until it veered. So appreciate your take on this one!
Melissa
Comment from karenina
Yikes. This reminds me of the Wizard of Oz and that awful tornado bearing down on Dorothy's home! I've only experienced one in my life...and one was too much!
Dervish dance... alliterative and precisely what this looks like!
Nice!
Karenina
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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Yikes. This reminds me of the Wizard of Oz and that awful tornado bearing down on Dorothy's home! I've only experienced one in my life...and one was too much!
Dervish dance... alliterative and precisely what this looks like!
Nice!
Karenina
Comment Written 04-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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Thanks Karenina... I really appreciate your take on this one. They are fearsome events ~ I know firsthand. Hugs!
Melissa
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I was so frightened of the ONE we had in Massachusetts!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
The artwork you're describing with this contest entry is very intimidating. I would be afraid if I saw it coming towards me. Thank you for sharing this entry with us. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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The artwork you're describing with this contest entry is very intimidating. I would be afraid if I saw it coming towards me. Thank you for sharing this entry with us. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much Barbara!!
Melissa
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
It's like a snapshot of a moment where darkness is both a physical and emotional force. The imagery of ...dark tumbling through dark... and the ...deadened, leaden sky... creates a heavy, almost oppressive atmosphere that's really striking. Great font choice!
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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It's like a snapshot of a moment where darkness is both a physical and emotional force. The imagery of ...dark tumbling through dark... and the ...deadened, leaden sky... creates a heavy, almost oppressive atmosphere that's really striking. Great font choice!
Comment Written 04-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
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Thanks for your intriguing review, Patty! So glad it struck a chord with you!
Melissa