Fall's Farewell
Her beauty slips away30 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed the sentiments here and the end rhymes, it is a pity that some lines are out of metre as the flow is somewhat interrupted, nevertheless, the theme of the poem is poignant, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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I enjoyed the sentiments here and the end rhymes, it is a pity that some lines are out of metre as the flow is somewhat interrupted, nevertheless, the theme of the poem is poignant, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Dolly. I appreciate your review.
John
Comment from F. William Lester
Nicely done. "A backward glance, she waves goodbye" is one of those lines that stick in your mind. Your description of this rite of nature is also a metaphor for a child growing up and leaving the protective cloak of home - parents letting go. Lovely poem. Poignant. Thank you for sharing it. Good luck in the contest. Be well.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Nicely done. "A backward glance, she waves goodbye" is one of those lines that stick in your mind. Your description of this rite of nature is also a metaphor for a child growing up and leaving the protective cloak of home - parents letting go. Lovely poem. Poignant. Thank you for sharing it. Good luck in the contest. Be well.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Thank you. I appreciate your very insightful review and especially your generous sixth star.
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You're absolutely welcome.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
With perfect rhyme and flow, your Quatern pulls us into this autumn farewell. Lovely imagery. Good luck in the contest - this is a great contender.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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With perfect rhyme and flow, your Quatern pulls us into this autumn farewell. Lovely imagery. Good luck in the contest - this is a great contender.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Ginda. I appreciate your kind comments and good luck wish. I especially appreciate your generous sixth star.
Comment from Nicki.B
This poem is written beautifully. You brought raw emotion into the ending of one season into the next. Like losing a love, I suppose it is the lose of a type of love.
I love your use of 'a backwards glance' and how she's so upset to leave aswell. I adore also metaphorical message, this poem holds so much emotion and meaning that will differ for each reader.
Well done and best of luck with the contest
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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This poem is written beautifully. You brought raw emotion into the ending of one season into the next. Like losing a love, I suppose it is the lose of a type of love.
I love your use of 'a backwards glance' and how she's so upset to leave aswell. I adore also metaphorical message, this poem holds so much emotion and meaning that will differ for each reader.
Well done and best of luck with the contest
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much for your beautifully descriptive review. I appreciate your lovely comments and good luck wish. I especially appreciate the sixth star.
Comment from Patrick Bernardy
Hello!
You did a great job with this quatern. The way you personified autumn in the form of a tree losing her colors and leaves is perfect! You also did a great job integrating the refrain as it slid into its new slot with each stanza. That really is the key to these types of poems.
I absolutely loved this: "Her leaves get weak and lose their grip/And in the wind, they learn to fly." --Leaves tearing from branches are not normally portrayed as "learning to fly" but this is shockingly obvious in its desription. Well done! Good luck in the contest!
Patrick
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Hello!
You did a great job with this quatern. The way you personified autumn in the form of a tree losing her colors and leaves is perfect! You also did a great job integrating the refrain as it slid into its new slot with each stanza. That really is the key to these types of poems.
I absolutely loved this: "Her leaves get weak and lose their grip/And in the wind, they learn to fly." --Leaves tearing from branches are not normally portrayed as "learning to fly" but this is shockingly obvious in its desription. Well done! Good luck in the contest!
Patrick
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Patrick. I appreciate your thorough and descriptive review. Thanks for the review and good luck wish.
Comment from l.raven
as we are just about to go into fall here...
our tree leaves are turning red rusty colors...
and it is magical...the starting of the holiday
seasons...
the times I don't like...is when they wave a sad
farewell...I love your poem Fall Farewell poem...
and your picture says it all...so very nicely written...
love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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as we are just about to go into fall here...
our tree leaves are turning red rusty colors...
and it is magical...the starting of the holiday
seasons...
the times I don't like...is when they wave a sad
farewell...I love your poem Fall Farewell poem...
and your picture says it all...so very nicely written...
love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Linda. I appreciate your review and kind words.
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your so very welcome...🌼🙏
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet, you now have 8 votes.
I love Autumn and Mother Nature's farewell was brilliantly captured in your words starting from the perfect catch line :
A backward glance, she waves goodbye.
I will paste and copy your lovely poem.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Ciao mystery poet, you now have 8 votes.
I love Autumn and Mother Nature's farewell was brilliantly captured in your words starting from the perfect catch line :
A backward glance, she waves goodbye.
I will paste and copy your lovely poem.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much for your most encouraging review and your vote. I especially appreciate your sixth star.
Comment from Wendy G
This is both beautiful in its composition and very meaningful. The image is perfect, as is the presentation. Very smooth rhyme and metre - very well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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This is both beautiful in its composition and very meaningful. The image is perfect, as is the presentation. Very smooth rhyme and metre - very well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Wendy. I appreciate your review and sweet words.
Comment from Boogienights
This is wonderful, I love the repeating line in this colorful poem. I'm never unhappy to see summer go, because l love fall. However, I'm always sad to see autumn leave, it's my favorite season. Best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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This is wonderful, I love the repeating line in this colorful poem. I'm never unhappy to see summer go, because l love fall. However, I'm always sad to see autumn leave, it's my favorite season. Best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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I love autumn, too. You're right...there's a melancholy feeling in it. I appreciate your kind words and good luck wish.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Author,
Your poignant personification of Fall's departure reflects how I and many others feel about the season. What a wonderful way of expressing mourn of the colorful season, leading into a dark, dreary winter.
Great poem,
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Author,
Your poignant personification of Fall's departure reflects how I and many others feel about the season. What a wonderful way of expressing mourn of the colorful season, leading into a dark, dreary winter.
Great poem,
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Cindy. I appreciate you taking the time to read my poem and give it such a nice review. Your best wishes for the contest are also appreciated.