Comment from Katiemae1977

Excellent

Wow this is a beautiful quatern poet. You have some fantastic lines in here. "Twighlight sings it's tender tale" "Till sunset spills its ruby wine" are just a few. Wish I had a six for this. This should do well in the contest.
Take care and
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2024

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

A pretty piece, complying nicely to the required form. You chose a successful repeating line around which to construct your four rhyming stanza. Excellent rhythm too although I stumbled on the meter in line 15 (around the word 'supernal'

Good luck in the contest.

Steve

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024

Steve,

Thank you for your review. I appreciate and value your comments. I've noted your concern and corrected the meter in line 15.

All the best

reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024

Steve,

Thank you for your review. I appreciate and value your comments. I've noted your concern and corrected the meter in line 15.

All the best

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A delightful poem about our changing skies and I enjoyed the rhymes and metre here and this is an ideal poem for the contest, a joy to read, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024

Dolly,

Thank you for your wonderful reviews of my poetry. You are one of my favorite writers here on Fanstory and I appreciate and value your comments.

All the best,

Eugene