Comment from tempeste

Excellent

Ciao mystery poet,

some of those old downtrodden houses hold unpleasant surprises.

I believe in stricken souls who have unfinished business and rest anchored to this world.

PS. You need to check your font it is not highlighted

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024

Thank you. Will check.

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Good

Such a wonderful offering for this contest -- You do need to add an 'ed' to the word 'abandon' here to make it grammatically correct... Thanx for sharing and best of luck! :-)

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024

Thanks. Added ed to abondon ed

Comment from phoegon

Excellent

Yup, I learned a lesson here. I'm laughing out loud; don't enter that house ever again. Thank you for the laugh. The middle line feels a little clunky, I'm thinking it could be the order of the words. I'm sorry I can't offer much more help than that. I do like the imagery you have painted in the words and the image matches the words great. I'm open to updating my review upon any edits. Best of luck in the contest.

***Updated review 4 stars changed to 5. I love the edit. It got a laugh out of me.

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024

Thanks for the helpful feedback. I have edited. See below.
An abandon house
I enter, a ghost appears~
Scream, run, lesson learned

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I have a suggestion for the first line for the sake of grammar and it doesn't change the syllable count.

(An (abandoned) house)

You made me smile with this ghostly write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024

Glad the write made you smile. x