Murder At The Berkshire
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Attendant Hazel"Things aren't as they seem at the elderly home.
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Comment from Ulla
Uhh, I see how much I've fallen behind behind with everything. For what it worth, it's well written and I will do my best to catching up. All the best, Ulla :)))
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Uhh, I see how much I've fallen behind behind with everything. For what it worth, it's well written and I will do my best to catching up. All the best, Ulla :)))
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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No worries, my friend. We all get busy. ;)
Comment from Tom Horonzy
and the beat goes on. Not much new here, pal, but I sense an undercurrent of mystery with Hazel.
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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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and the beat goes on. Not much new here, pal, but I sense an undercurrent of mystery with Hazel.
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Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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I am no longer ACDC in the elderly home?
Comment from royowen
Now Hattie is being accused of having a little scumpy bumpy, a flirt with the skirt, with Art Antica, but how could she, but she's not short of giving mis Gossip.breeches and a little bit of curry, well done Douglas, you've captured the mood well, good lib, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Now Hattie is being accused of having a little scumpy bumpy, a flirt with the skirt, with Art Antica, but how could she, but she's not short of giving mis Gossip.breeches and a little bit of curry, well done Douglas, you've captured the mood well, good lib, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Roy!
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Well done
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I happen to be a great fan of chocolate covered cherries. Hmm, if she lost the earring on the night Edger died, but hadn't seen him for a couple of days, it seems strange to me. Also, if she administers medicine, wouldn't he have received some?? Can't wait to read more.
Oh my goodness, Joy, let it rest. Nothing happened." (missing beginning quotation marks, "On, and a comma)
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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I happen to be a great fan of chocolate covered cherries. Hmm, if she lost the earring on the night Edger died, but hadn't seen him for a couple of days, it seems strange to me. Also, if she administers medicine, wouldn't he have received some?? Can't wait to read more.
Oh my goodness, Joy, let it rest. Nothing happened." (missing beginning quotation marks, "On, and a comma)
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Barbara! Big help!
Comment from BethShelby
It is interesting that a resident would leave something to a person like an attendant. It sounds a bit suspicious. She claims she didn't see him the night he died but her earring was on the floor.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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It is interesting that a resident would leave something to a person like an attendant. It sounds a bit suspicious. She claims she didn't see him the night he died but her earring was on the floor.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Oh boy! You should join the ladies as you hit upon a key point!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Another amusing and fun-filled chapter as Hattie continues to keep the investigation on track. I love Joy and all her delightfully nosy questioning of Hattie's antics with Art (Rom)antica (brilliant). Wonderful idioms too. And the cherry-silencing is a winner when it comes to trying to keep Joy's gob shut! Now Attendant Hazel definitely falls into the suspect mix. Some small edits/suggestions below. Thanks for sharing your entertaining story, Doug. Take care, Debbie
Should the following have inverted commas - Apparently Joy didn't understand what I had meant by 'subtle' (or is this a thought process that should be in italics?
The attendant took on a distant look as if she were remember(ing) something.
After joy got a look, Hattie nonchalantly shoved (it) into...
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Another amusing and fun-filled chapter as Hattie continues to keep the investigation on track. I love Joy and all her delightfully nosy questioning of Hattie's antics with Art (Rom)antica (brilliant). Wonderful idioms too. And the cherry-silencing is a winner when it comes to trying to keep Joy's gob shut! Now Attendant Hazel definitely falls into the suspect mix. Some small edits/suggestions below. Thanks for sharing your entertaining story, Doug. Take care, Debbie
Should the following have inverted commas - Apparently Joy didn't understand what I had meant by 'subtle' (or is this a thought process that should be in italics?
The attendant took on a distant look as if she were remember(ing) something.
After joy got a look, Hattie nonchalantly shoved (it) into...
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Awesome fixes! I suck. I must have reread that five times. No eye for editing.
Comment from Begin Again
The ladies are on the hunt, and I do believe Attendant Hazel knows more than she is willing to tell. And does she really think telling the women no more meetings is going to work? I doubt it! Great chapter, Doug! I'm looking forward to some more undercover stuff!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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The ladies are on the hunt, and I do believe Attendant Hazel knows more than she is willing to tell. And does she really think telling the women no more meetings is going to work? I doubt it! Great chapter, Doug! I'm looking forward to some more undercover stuff!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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Tee hee!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I don't want to stay ina home that treats me as a child. Telling them what they can and can't talk about.
What groups the can form. Good work. Have a good week, Karen
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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I don't want to stay ina home that treats me as a child. Telling them what they can and can't talk about.
What groups the can form. Good work. Have a good week, Karen
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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My kids do art shows in homes. They have a lot of rules.
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That's why I have my own little apartment. I don't mind well. Kareb
Comment from Wendy G
My bet is that they will continue to have meetings. They will solve the issue about the death, and she will fall for Art Antica. My only gripe is that you have a Windy Wendy with the residents! Lol.
Wendy (not windy)
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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My bet is that they will continue to have meetings. They will solve the issue about the death, and she will fall for Art Antica. My only gripe is that you have a Windy Wendy with the residents! Lol.
Wendy (not windy)
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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But Windy Wendy is hilarious!
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Lol.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written scene. You used great descriptive words and very good dialogue. I think I may need to go back and read some of this work! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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This is a very well written scene. You used great descriptive words and very good dialogue. I think I may need to go back and read some of this work! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Teri!