Afterlife
Heaven or Hell?2 total reviews
Comment from Kahlani
The picture and background are really effective - they suit the theme. The imagery is strong with a spark of humor. I thoroughly enjoyed this dark sonnet.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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The picture and background are really effective - they suit the theme. The imagery is strong with a spark of humor. I thoroughly enjoyed this dark sonnet.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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So kind, Kahlani. Thanks.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a scary sonnet for the contest and I have a suggestions for this line to bring if in line with metre:
(The pitchfork-wielding imps show (little) pity). I wish you luck, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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This is a scary sonnet for the contest and I have a suggestions for this line to bring if in line with metre:
(The pitchfork-wielding imps show (little) pity). I wish you luck, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 19-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Dolly. That exceeds the pentameter.
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It exceeds the syllable count because you have used a feminine ending here. That means you have ended on an unstressed syllable.