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Dolphin Shenanigans

575 Poem

6 total reviews 
Comment from dragonpoet
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Hi Shirley,
I think this dolphin may have been trained to do this dousing of the crowd.
I like the porpoise for purpose pun.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a terrific rest of the week.
Joan

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
    Thank you Joan :) x
reply by dragonpoet on 23-Oct-2024
    No problem, Shirley.
    Joan
    P S I would just like you to know I have just published a book called The Interloper and other stories in prose and poetry by Joan Pechter. It is available on Amazon.com.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
    Thank you, Joan. Well done for publishing a book. I'll have a look at it x
Comment from Mark D. R.
Exceptional
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Shirley Ann,

This was ingenious 5-7-5 writing for this contest entry. Apparently, your post was Paul Bunyan-esque LOL

Your photograph really complemented your verse. There was a purpose to your madness - nice going!! Congrats on your win.

Mark

P.S. In hindsight, I would recommend a period or dash after your middle line to set off your pun conclusion.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
    Haha, thank you, Mark. That's a great suggestion :)
Comment from Brooke Metoxen-Smith
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Met criteria for contest. The pun was all-age humorous while the technicality of word usage benefited the subject (animal). However, the tone of the entire 5-7-5 poem does not match the image, where they are expecting to get splashed at a show. The poem would suggest a tone that is undelighted and otherwise blaming or finding fault in the subject.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
    Thank you, Brooke.
Comment from F. William Lester
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

LOL! This is good. The last line was great. I couldn't stop laughing. Nice pun and good work. You got my vote. Good luck in the contest and have a great week. Be well.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
    Wow, William! Thanks so much for the great review and the sixer just for my teeny weeny poem :) :)
reply by F. William Lester on 21-Oct-2024
    My pleasure.
Comment from Patrick Bernardy
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Hello!

I have to admit, I am having a ball reading all these animal poems. Yours was another great one! I know one thing: I am going to have a hard time voting when this goes to vote. Your punchline was very clever! Good luck!

Patrick

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
    Thank you, Patrick.
Comment from RodG
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This 5-7-5 was indeed witty. I have seen dolphins at special marinas splash the crowd. Your play on words in the last line was terrific. Also, your photo enhances your whole presentation. Rod

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2024


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
    Thank you, Rod.