Detour
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Lea Tonin Version"Two very real women in not so real situation.
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is another fun read in this fan story convention collection.I liked your quick thinking to get those red cars all caught up amongst themselves, and the fun with Jim on the way in. A fun read Lea, well done.
not in a hurry (to) get anywhere.
valda
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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This is another fun read in this fan story convention collection.I liked your quick thinking to get those red cars all caught up amongst themselves, and the fun with Jim on the way in. A fun read Lea, well done.
not in a hurry (to) get anywhere.
valda
Comment Written 31-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Valda great to hear and see your words! Thank you for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you again.Had comment about jim's pretty funny, baby chuckle. Thanks for the fine rating, and for your time to have an awesome evening!
Comment from pome lover
well you certainly have more guts than I do! Question 1. You said, "I can finally see my friends." How did you know who they were, never having seen them before? (except for Rachelle, and her identifying red hair), and 2. Why a head lock on Jim? I don't think you are shy. Sounds to me like you're very outgoing. If you go around to book signings and things, sounds like you have your act together. Oh, 3rd question. What were the red cars, and why were they after you?
Chocolate pie in your face, hair and I'm sure some got on your dress - ohhh, what a way to start a party!
Katharine
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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well you certainly have more guts than I do! Question 1. You said, "I can finally see my friends." How did you know who they were, never having seen them before? (except for Rachelle, and her identifying red hair), and 2. Why a head lock on Jim? I don't think you are shy. Sounds to me like you're very outgoing. If you go around to book signings and things, sounds like you have your act together. Oh, 3rd question. What were the red cars, and why were they after you?
Chocolate pie in your face, hair and I'm sure some got on your dress - ohhh, what a way to start a party!
Katharine
Comment Written 31-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Hi! To answer your question. I know that they look like true photos. Emails text conversations and the profile. That's for dinner I have to burst with him for some time now.
I'm always joking around, that is my nature. The three red cars that is a story in itself, and it's in my book called "Ghost". They are government people sent by those who are not happy with what has been revealed in my book and out there in the public. Thanks Katherine for your curiosity, for your time reading this chapter. I hope i've answered your questions. Thanks for the great rating for your time to have an awesome day!
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you, too!
Comment from Neonewman
This was fun, and it added a chapter to the Detour book. I enjoyed this adventure you were taken on. Sometimes it's better to crack the door and peek inside, lol. Thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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This was fun, and it added a chapter to the Detour book. I enjoyed this adventure you were taken on. Sometimes it's better to crack the door and peek inside, lol. Thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Thank you.See for your awesome review.And you're fine rating! I'm very happy you enjoyed it! Hope you have the best day ever!
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My pleasure, Lea.
Comment from Jim Wile
What an interesting and amusing post, Lea. It was very interesting to hear some of your thoughts about your situation now. I can certainly understand some of the ambivalent feelings you've been experiencing lately. This has been quite a year for you.
But I'm happy I got to escort you in, despite the headlock and the joke about old men! (Good one, by the way.) You're in my chapter too and take a creative approach to the problem we have.
This sure was fun to be able to contribute to this amazing story.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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What an interesting and amusing post, Lea. It was very interesting to hear some of your thoughts about your situation now. I can certainly understand some of the ambivalent feelings you've been experiencing lately. This has been quite a year for you.
But I'm happy I got to escort you in, despite the headlock and the joke about old men! (Good one, by the way.) You're in my chapter too and take a creative approach to the problem we have.
This sure was fun to be able to contribute to this amazing story.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Hi, Jim.I read your rendition, too. It's really great! The monkey in the chandelier shrimp and hot sauce.Nice, or was that prawns and hot sauce. You created a pretty funny visual. Thank you for stopping in and reading. Once again with your fine comments and great rating! May your day be awesome!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Love the 'splat' of the chocolate cake...'smackdab'... This is great humour, Lea, and a wonderful ending to this slightly different approach to the convention story. Here we're given a much more reflective Fanstorian and discover that, as well as her more sensitive side is a steely resolve for nothing to interrupt her new path in life. She is worthy and every bit as suited to the convention as the rest. An excellent and entertaining read, Lea. Thank you for sharing. Debbie
This is not my life, this (is) not me
But that feeling has been dim(in)ishing over time
Jim was a stroller and not in a hurry (to) get anywhere
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Love the 'splat' of the chocolate cake...'smackdab'... This is great humour, Lea, and a wonderful ending to this slightly different approach to the convention story. Here we're given a much more reflective Fanstorian and discover that, as well as her more sensitive side is a steely resolve for nothing to interrupt her new path in life. She is worthy and every bit as suited to the convention as the rest. An excellent and entertaining read, Lea. Thank you for sharing. Debbie
This is not my life, this (is) not me
But that feeling has been dim(in)ishing over time
Jim was a stroller and not in a hurry (to) get anywhere
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Hello Debbie! Thank you again for your fine review.Any great suggestions for which, i'm always appreciative! Your comments and your suggested always helpful and uplifting! I'm glad you enjoyed this! Thank you again so much happy.You'd like it poke your days great!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is hilarious Lea, you are so inventive and funny and I had a great time reading your version of events here, what fun evening it was, from ball gowns to cat fighting, with champagne corks and powder kegs exploding. I loved your post, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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This is hilarious Lea, you are so inventive and funny and I had a great time reading your version of events here, what fun evening it was, from ball gowns to cat fighting, with champagne corks and powder kegs exploding. I loved your post, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much Dolly. I'm glad you enjoyed it and then smile out of it. That was mine, ken, so hallelujah! Thank you again for your fine comments. It was a great uplifting words. Always something interesting and evocative.You present when you do your reviews so thank you again.I hope your day is amazing!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You did a wonderful writing your addition to this ongoing novel. I enjoyed reading. My suggestion would be to physically put in spaces between paragraphs for ease of reading.
fifteen minutes later, at the end of this beautiful country road, (Fifteen)
see my friends. there they all were gathered together, ready to walk in. (There)
was Gretchen and the incomparable Rachelle.
I looked over at Jim and said,
"Well? Are you going to give me your arm and walk me in or am I going to have to get you in a headlock?" (move the dialogue closer to 'said,')
This time was no different, so I turned and looked at Jim and asked him,
"Jim, do you know why old men take viagra?" He groaned in response. He knew he wasn't getting away unscathed. (dialogue closer to 'asked him,')
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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You did a wonderful writing your addition to this ongoing novel. I enjoyed reading. My suggestion would be to physically put in spaces between paragraphs for ease of reading.
fifteen minutes later, at the end of this beautiful country road, (Fifteen)
see my friends. there they all were gathered together, ready to walk in. (There)
was Gretchen and the incomparable Rachelle.
I looked over at Jim and said,
"Well? Are you going to give me your arm and walk me in or am I going to have to get you in a headlock?" (move the dialogue closer to 'said,')
This time was no different, so I turned and looked at Jim and asked him,
"Jim, do you know why old men take viagra?" He groaned in response. He knew he wasn't getting away unscathed. (dialogue closer to 'asked him,')
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Hi Barbara! I'm certainly glad to see you here. As I almost forgot to pop your name into this version. I meant to do it at the beginning. I was thinking about it, and then it left my brain to the end of the chapter, and I saw you here today today phil, i've gone in added you. That's the least I could do for all your fine reviews. I have taking your suggestions and made corrections, and i'm so glad you found this amusing! Thank you again, barbara.Hope you're having a great day!
Comment from Jacob1395
I loved reading your piece, Lea and thank you for the mention as well. It brought a big smile to my face when I saw my name. This is a fantastic idea by Rachelle and Gretchen, I'm hoping to post my chapter in the next day or so. An excellent piece.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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I loved reading your piece, Lea and thank you for the mention as well. It brought a big smile to my face when I saw my name. This is a fantastic idea by Rachelle and Gretchen, I'm hoping to post my chapter in the next day or so. An excellent piece.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Hi, Jacob.I'm so glad you're pleased and that you like this rendition! You and I have exchanged a few words Uber time and you've done any reviews for me. And so I am grateful I'm pleased to put you in the book as you deserve! Thank you again for your kind words and you're uplifting comments.I hope you're having the best day ever!
Comment from GWHARGIS
I loved it. You carried the intrigue of the cars following you and then you outsmarted them and left them with egg on their faces...and you made it to the convention with a hilarious joke and ended up with cake on your face. Excellent piece. Gretchen
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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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I loved it. You carried the intrigue of the cars following you and then you outsmarted them and left them with egg on their faces...and you made it to the convention with a hilarious joke and ended up with cake on your face. Excellent piece. Gretchen
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Gretchen i'm glad you like it! Thanks for your awesome with you too.And your kind comments I very much appreciate it! I hope you have the best day ever!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
OMG!!! Now THAT is practical!! In fact, you have taken it to a whole different level!! What's hilarious is that, if you read Jim's version, he has you dipping shrimps into the cocktail sauce on his face and eating it!! Moral: There is no five-second rule in Lea Tonin's life. All food is considered available to be eaten!! I guess that's what comes of living in the woods for six months when you're a teenager!!
Great chapter, my dear - full of authenticity and excitement and PLUCK (of course), bawdy humor and just plain entertainment. Thank you times a million zillion for contributing your talents to the adventure. xoxox
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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OMG!!! Now THAT is practical!! In fact, you have taken it to a whole different level!! What's hilarious is that, if you read Jim's version, he has you dipping shrimps into the cocktail sauce on his face and eating it!! Moral: There is no five-second rule in Lea Tonin's life. All food is considered available to be eaten!! I guess that's what comes of living in the woods for six months when you're a teenager!!
Great chapter, my dear - full of authenticity and excitement and PLUCK (of course), bawdy humor and just plain entertainment. Thank you times a million zillion for contributing your talents to the adventure. xoxox
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Thank you.I'm really pleased that you like it! And thank you for your great comment and for your great waiting too! All the best my friend thanks again!
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Right back atcha, Cute Girl. xoxox