A Professional Choice
Decisions Made, Laws Broken10 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
A story that held me captive from the very first line. You pulled me in and I stayed for the whole story. I can sympathise with you and feel your embarrassment.
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A story that held me captive from the very first line. You pulled me in and I stayed for the whole story. I can sympathise with you and feel your embarrassment.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
Comment from Gayla putnam
You have an enjoyable, compelling story that qualifies as a secret. However, multiple misspellings, left-out words, and fragmented sentences detract from your excellent tale. I use Grammarly, a free program that helps catch simple mistakes. I believe it would assist you. Keep on editing and proofreading. gayla
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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You have an enjoyable, compelling story that qualifies as a secret. However, multiple misspellings, left-out words, and fragmented sentences detract from your excellent tale. I use Grammarly, a free program that helps catch simple mistakes. I believe it would assist you. Keep on editing and proofreading. gayla
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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Thanks, I am new to this, have to own up to the stupid mistakes, I am learning.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
FanStory ate my first review. It is cranky today. I sre would have moved too. I hope youn avoided stern people with Italian names at your nest posting. Happy Turkey day.
Karen
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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FanStory ate my first review. It is cranky today. I sre would have moved too. I hope youn avoided stern people with Italian names at your nest posting. Happy Turkey day.
Karen
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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I obviously survived. LA was not a good place for me. Had to move on to a quieter, safe place. Experienced and saw things there that I cannot forget. Became a loving father, that was all I needed and wanted in my life.
Comment from Tim Margetts
An interesting story but the writing needs a lot of work. It feels clumsy to read and there are some spelling and grammatical errors throughout it.
I wish you luck with the contest but I feel it could do with more polishing up.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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An interesting story but the writing needs a lot of work. It feels clumsy to read and there are some spelling and grammatical errors throughout it.
I wish you luck with the contest but I feel it could do with more polishing up.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024
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My writing definitely needs lots of work, sometimes hard to admit, having fun trying though, the different categories make me think and want to explore the different avenues, for example had never written any thing before, other than medical notes, which carry their own responsibility and criticism you had to deal with, until this February, now can't stop. My wife says many things I write are hard to ponder, who ever has used that word in a sentence? I tried to correct the errors as best that I could. Thanks for the directions.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You were put in a possition where you had no choice but to do what you were told. It's good that you moved away from that area or I would imagine you would have been called for other unlawful jobs to be done. I've known of people who have wanted their animals unthanised when they died, but in both those cases they wishes were denied. It was a cruel request and the people who excepted money to make sure those wishes were carried through, were the guilty ones, not you. With a knife at your throat who the heck wouldn't do what was asked. I think you paid the price through the guilt and sorrow you felt after each case. Well done for finally getting it out. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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You were put in a possition where you had no choice but to do what you were told. It's good that you moved away from that area or I would imagine you would have been called for other unlawful jobs to be done. I've known of people who have wanted their animals unthanised when they died, but in both those cases they wishes were denied. It was a cruel request and the people who excepted money to make sure those wishes were carried through, were the guilty ones, not you. With a knife at your throat who the heck wouldn't do what was asked. I think you paid the price through the guilt and sorrow you felt after each case. Well done for finally getting it out. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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I entered a very toxic environment. Was young and naive. Had to learn quickly, it was sink or swim. I was very talented, could perform at a level few could. Had famous Hollywood stars waiting to see me.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is an incredible story of someone being forced to go against their personal code of ethics. It must have been awful to be put in such a horrible position. I understand why you moved from LA to try to get a fresh start. This was the perfect story for the Deep Secret contest, and I wish you the best in the contest.
I've included a few typos and words that need to be edited. I did not include them all. You might consider giving your story a quick review.
I was a talented small animal Veyerinarian (veterinarian)
occured (occurred)
Nothing special about the owner or the cat one exam (on exam)
very rapid resilts (results)
six health poodles (healthy)
I would be asked to do another job, this was the job (The word 'this'
begins a new sentence)
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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This is an incredible story of someone being forced to go against their personal code of ethics. It must have been awful to be put in such a horrible position. I understand why you moved from LA to try to get a fresh start. This was the perfect story for the Deep Secret contest, and I wish you the best in the contest.
I've included a few typos and words that need to be edited. I did not include them all. You might consider giving your story a quick review.
I was a talented small animal Veyerinarian (veterinarian)
occured (occurred)
Nothing special about the owner or the cat one exam (on exam)
very rapid resilts (results)
six health poodles (healthy)
I would be asked to do another job, this was the job (The word 'this'
begins a new sentence)
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thanks, need to review with being critical and thorough.
Comment from royowen
I like this story, it seems to follow a number of things that go on on in government of any country and industrial goings as well. Huge amount of intrigue, and if one dares to questions, concrete floaters may be their destiny heh heh, beautifully written I like this post, good luck, blessings Roy
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I like this story, it seems to follow a number of things that go on on in government of any country and industrial goings as well. Huge amount of intrigue, and if one dares to questions, concrete floaters may be their destiny heh heh, beautifully written I like this post, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
a secret indeed. I'm sure it'll be fine though.
This feels more like a draft than the finished article at present and could maybe do with some ironing out in places.
talented small animal Veyerinarian - Veterinarian.
It's quite repetitive, especially early on.
euthanize six healthy dogs an had an audience to watch. - and had?
It's a little awkwardly expressed in places throughout the piece. Some overly long sentences which meander and lose focus. Some feel like a few words may be missing. As well as fragmented sentencing which make for a jerky read.
to trained technicians to start and sometimes due the whole procedure.- sometimes do?
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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Hi there,
a secret indeed. I'm sure it'll be fine though.
This feels more like a draft than the finished article at present and could maybe do with some ironing out in places.
talented small animal Veyerinarian - Veterinarian.
It's quite repetitive, especially early on.
euthanize six healthy dogs an had an audience to watch. - and had?
It's a little awkwardly expressed in places throughout the piece. Some overly long sentences which meander and lose focus. Some feel like a few words may be missing. As well as fragmented sentencing which make for a jerky read.
to trained technicians to start and sometimes due the whole procedure.- sometimes do?
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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Thanks for the review. I went on to be a talented Veterinarian, a profession very hard to enter. Competition is mind boggling.
Comment from Zach Gallows
Interesting story. You don't usually read about stuff like that coming from the vet's point of view. However there are a number of spelling errors. I would recommend a reread or spell check. Just a few I noticed:
"animal Veyerinarian at" veterinarian
"the respnsible care" responsible
"any reprocussions of" repercussions
"sometimes due the whole" do
"a compassinate death" compassionate
There are more, but like I said otherwise a good story. Hope this helps.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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Interesting story. You don't usually read about stuff like that coming from the vet's point of view. However there are a number of spelling errors. I would recommend a reread or spell check. Just a few I noticed:
"animal Veyerinarian at" veterinarian
"the respnsible care" responsible
"any reprocussions of" repercussions
"sometimes due the whole" do
"a compassinate death" compassionate
There are more, but like I said otherwise a good story. Hope this helps.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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Thanks, edited per what you pointed out, hopefully soon enough. Since there was a time limit, I had to hurry to get it entered in time. Learning how to practice medicine at a large hospital in Los Angeles was eye opening. Quite innocent at that time, from a cow town in Colorado, then LA. Whoa, hang on, couldn't believe what I as seeing. Early on a client who apparently liked me invited me to a high enema party. How do you respond to that? Did not want her to feel I was rejecting her. I just said not tonight. but thanks. Fido is ready to go home.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Wow! What a great story. A little sad for the poodles that you had to put to sleep. It must have been very hard for you to go against your oath.
Yeah, I think if I had a knife to my throat I would have forged paperwork too. Who knew being a vet could be so dangerous.
I found a couple errors:
He (them) said I am from Sicily-I think this should be then)
All the paper work was (change) to meet the (nunbers) of birds in the flock- (changed) and (numbers).
Well done
Cecilia
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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Wow! What a great story. A little sad for the poodles that you had to put to sleep. It must have been very hard for you to go against your oath.
Yeah, I think if I had a knife to my throat I would have forged paperwork too. Who knew being a vet could be so dangerous.
I found a couple errors:
He (them) said I am from Sicily-I think this should be then)
All the paper work was (change) to meet the (nunbers) of birds in the flock- (changed) and (numbers).
Well done
Cecilia
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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Thanks again, you give me confidence every time.
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You're welcome. You are a good writer, don't doubt that ability.
Cecilia
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Thanks, I am still here, had some animals try to kill me also.
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I hope it wasn't a pit bull.
Cecilia