Miracles
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Miracles - Chap 24"From the ashes of crime, miracles arise
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Comment from Julie Helms
A great chapter with Rossi handled in a very satisfying manner. I have to wonder, Carol, how you know how to write mobster scenes so well (big grin)!
Only suggestion, for clarity:
Garth moved toward Rossi, but he jerked away.
(I'd identify 'he'. Structurally sounds like Garth, but I think it's referring to Rossi)
Great job!
Julie
:-)
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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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A great chapter with Rossi handled in a very satisfying manner. I have to wonder, Carol, how you know how to write mobster scenes so well (big grin)!
Only suggestion, for clarity:
Garth moved toward Rossi, but he jerked away.
(I'd identify 'he'. Structurally sounds like Garth, but I think it's referring to Rossi)
Great job!
Julie
:-)
** This reviewer has pledged to rate in accordance with site guidelines.**
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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It is, but I thought it weird to have Rossi used twice in one sentence. Maybe ...Garth moved forward, but Rossi jerked away. I'll have to go read it in context. Thanks as always for reading another chapter.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
This is another excellent chapter. You have so many characters and you use first name, last names and nicknames so I not sure I could bet thought it without you table of contents to refer back to. I think Jack must have a history with Eleanor but I not sure.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. You have so many characters and you use first name, last names and nicknames so I not sure I could bet thought it without you table of contents to refer back to. I think Jack must have a history with Eleanor but I not sure.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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I am so far behind on reviews as I try to finish this story within the deadline and enjoy being with my granddaughters. I have faithfully read and greatly appreciated each review. I am thankful for all the time, comments, and reviews everyone has given to my story. There is no way I can catch up on almost 250 reviews, so please accept my thanks and know that I truly appreciate that you have stuck with me throughout the story. Thank you.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from karenina
Whew! Double wbew! So it seems diamonds ARE a (baby) girl's best friend!
You played this like the pro you are, Carol.
I wasn't aware of how this would go down....but I'm loving a gangster with a heart.
My pulse is racing!
I must move on to the next chapter!
Karenina
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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Whew! Double wbew! So it seems diamonds ARE a (baby) girl's best friend!
You played this like the pro you are, Carol.
I wasn't aware of how this would go down....but I'm loving a gangster with a heart.
My pulse is racing!
I must move on to the next chapter!
Karenina
Comment Written 29-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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I dropped hints about the diamonds throughout the story but never once indicated it they were in Frankie's hands. Of course, Doyle wasn't going to reveal it since it was his leverage to gain what he wanted in prison.
Smiles, Carol
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You got me! I thought Doyle had the diamonds...
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Oh that handover was well done, Carol. Rossi thought he was still secure right up until the light bulb hit him in the face. He was too impressed with his own supposed power to notice what was really going down. Well done,
cheers
valda
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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Oh that handover was well done, Carol. Rossi thought he was still secure right up until the light bulb hit him in the face. He was too impressed with his own supposed power to notice what was really going down. Well done,
cheers
valda
Comment Written 29-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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I am so far behind on reviews as I try to finish this story within the deadline and enjoy being with my granddaughters. I have faithfully read and greatly appreciated each review. I am thankful for all the time, comments, and reviews everyone has given to my story. There is no way I can catch up on almost 250 reviews, so please accept my thanks and know that I truly appreciate that you have stuck with me throughout the story. Thank you.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Jacob1395
You do an excellent job of painting the scene as always Carol and I really felt as though I was there. That was very harsh of Vince to say that Jenna's daughter might never know her father. I think I'd have the same reaction as Eleanor. An excellent piece, I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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You do an excellent job of painting the scene as always Carol and I really felt as though I was there. That was very harsh of Vince to say that Jenna's daughter might never know her father. I think I'd have the same reaction as Eleanor. An excellent piece, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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I am so far behind on reviews as I try to finish this story within the deadline and enjoy being with my granddaughters. I have faithfully read and greatly appreciated each review. I am thankful for all the time, comments, and reviews everyone has given to my story. There is no way I can catch up on almost 250 reviews, so please accept my thanks and know that I truly appreciate that you have stuck with me throughout the story. Thank you.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Tim Margetts
Been busy for a couple of days, not as mad as you but...
Anyway, now catching up and this was excellently done.
Less words for now, as I need to get onto the next :)
Tim x
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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Been busy for a couple of days, not as mad as you but...
Anyway, now catching up and this was excellently done.
Less words for now, as I need to get onto the next :)
Tim x
Comment Written 27-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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I am so far behind on reviews as I try to finish this story within the deadline and enjoy being with my granddaughters. I have faithfully read and greatly appreciated each review. I am thankful for all the time, comments, and reviews everyone has given to my story. There is no way I can catch up on almost 250 reviews, so please accept my thanks and know that I truly appreciate that you have stuck with me throughout the story. Thank you.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
I knew that Frank had them! Yay! And Jack learned a valuable lesson that helping friends and being loyal are much more precious than diamonds. I like the gesture of giving one diamond to the baby. Jack really does want to be the "Godfather." Lol
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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I knew that Frank had them! Yay! And Jack learned a valuable lesson that helping friends and being loyal are much more precious than diamonds. I like the gesture of giving one diamond to the baby. Jack really does want to be the "Godfather." Lol
Comment Written 27-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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I am so far behind on reviews as I try to finish this story within the deadline and enjoy being with my granddaughters. I have faithfully read and greatly appreciated each review. I am thankful for all the time, comments, and reviews everyone has given to my story. There is no way I can catch up on almost 250 reviews, so please accept my thanks and know that I truly appreciate that you have stuck with me throughout the story. Thank you.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Frank has shown that he is fully done with crime. Lexington has changed. Rossi has been tangled up by his own ruthlessness. I like that he offered a diamond for Margaret. Great chapter. The ends are slowly being threaded together.
Well written
Wendy
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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Frank has shown that he is fully done with crime. Lexington has changed. Rossi has been tangled up by his own ruthlessness. I like that he offered a diamond for Margaret. Great chapter. The ends are slowly being threaded together.
Well written
Wendy
Comment Written 27-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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I am so far behind on reviews as I try to finish this story within the deadline and enjoy being with my granddaughters. I have faithfully read and greatly appreciated each review. I am thankful for all the time, comments, and reviews everyone has given to my story. There is no way I can catch up on almost 250 reviews, so please accept my thanks and know that I truly appreciate that you have stuck with me throughout the story. Thank you.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Apparently even a crime kingpin like Jack can do nice things, like the diamond for Margaret, and also smart things, like turn in a loose cannon like Rossi. Frank DiVito has proved he can turn over a new leaf in a really big way with his hospital that has saved many a good person.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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Apparently even a crime kingpin like Jack can do nice things, like the diamond for Margaret, and also smart things, like turn in a loose cannon like Rossi. Frank DiVito has proved he can turn over a new leaf in a really big way with his hospital that has saved many a good person.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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I am so far behind on reviews as I try to finish this story within the deadline and enjoy being with my granddaughters. I have faithfully read and greatly appreciated each review. I am thankful for all the time, comments, and reviews everyone has given to my story. There is no way I can catch up on almost 250 reviews, so please accept my thanks and know that I truly appreciate that you have stuck with me throughout the story. Thank you.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from royowen
What a lovely story, even gangsters have a soft spot, and who said that when a child is born, hope comes into the world. I could not help but love this episode, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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What a lovely story, even gangsters have a soft spot, and who said that when a child is born, hope comes into the world. I could not help but love this episode, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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I am so far behind on reviews as I try to finish this story within the deadline and enjoy being with my granddaughters. I have faithfully read and greatly appreciated each review. I am thankful for all the time, comments, and reviews everyone has given to my story. There is no way I can catch up on almost 250 reviews, so please accept my thanks and know that I truly appreciate that you have stuck with me throughout the story. Thank you.
Smiles and hugs, Carol