BOOK OF RENGA POEMS
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Baby, It's cold outside"Renga is a collective poets Japanese poem
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Comment from F. William Lester
This is an interesting book of poems. I've never heard of Renga poems but have since learned that they are an alternating 7/7, 5/7/5 format and that each is based on the theme of the poem before it. Nicely done. Has anyone ever published a book resulting from one of these challenges? Thanks for sharing it, Karen.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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This is an interesting book of poems. I've never heard of Renga poems but have since learned that they are an alternating 7/7, 5/7/5 format and that each is based on the theme of the poem before it. Nicely done. Has anyone ever published a book resulting from one of these challenges? Thanks for sharing it, Karen.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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I think she is publishing this one. Or adding it to another. Thanks for the read. Karen
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My pleasure.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Karen,
we didn't have much of a fall either, but then we seldom do. It's certainly winter here, though today was in the twenties, much warmer than a few days ago when I was driving in six below. However... we're almost to the shortest day of the year, and then it will begin an uphill climb again-yay!!
Blessings,
tom
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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Hello Karen,
we didn't have much of a fall either, but then we seldom do. It's certainly winter here, though today was in the twenties, much warmer than a few days ago when I was driving in six below. However... we're almost to the shortest day of the year, and then it will begin an uphill climb again-yay!!
Blessings,
tom
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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I hope you get some thermal socks for Christmas. Karen
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I don't spend as much time outside as I used to. When I was in Hoonah I went hunting in the winter and my feet always got cold, but even though it's much colder here, it's much drier too, so its not so much of a problem.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
I do have to admit that I absolutely love your phrases. Perfect for us who are still not use to winter but have to deal with it right now now. Great job on this.
Yes, here in Minnesota, winter knocked and didn't bother waiting to hear anyone say come in. Now I am freezing, even at 73 degrees. Brrrrr. My summer blood didn't have a chance to get used to Fall, because we didn't have a fall. It went right from summer to winter. So it seemed anyway. So love this, Karen. Well said for such few syllables. Thanks again. Love, Debi
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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I do have to admit that I absolutely love your phrases. Perfect for us who are still not use to winter but have to deal with it right now now. Great job on this.
Yes, here in Minnesota, winter knocked and didn't bother waiting to hear anyone say come in. Now I am freezing, even at 73 degrees. Brrrrr. My summer blood didn't have a chance to get used to Fall, because we didn't have a fall. It went right from summer to winter. So it seemed anyway. So love this, Karen. Well said for such few syllables. Thanks again. Love, Debi
Comment Written 03-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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How very nice you are. Thanks for the read. Much like you we had just a tiny Autumn and the winter weather. In Texas we very rarely get snow. But we can get very cold. Get under an electric blanket. Karen
Comment from karenina
It's happened in New England! We transitioned from fifty degrees to thirties throughout the day just about overnight!
You'd think I'd be used to it by now!
Karenina
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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It's happened in New England! We transitioned from fifty degrees to thirties throughout the day just about overnight!
You'd think I'd be used to it by now!
Karenina
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Oooh. When Hollywood, or a big publishing house finds me, and decides they must have my work, and give me obscene amounts of money. I will come visit. I have never seen piles of snow in person. Karen
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Let me know! I'll brew up some killer hot chocolate and we can make senior citizen snow angels!
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Being in the cold would be bad enough, but puting my body on the cold snow floor. would probably send me into shock from the pain. That would not be fun for me. Cold is not my friend. Karen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well done, Karen! You certainly know how to create an atmosphere! From autumn to winter, we retreat ever more willingly into our snug interiors, blessed with warm, woolly socks and hot chocolate! Perfect! Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Well done, Karen! You certainly know how to create an atmosphere! From autumn to winter, we retreat ever more willingly into our snug interiors, blessed with warm, woolly socks and hot chocolate! Perfect! Debbie
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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I love fluffy socks, and a fireplace, and someone to share it with. Thanks for the read. Karen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Karen,
Thank you for participating in our renga book. You wrote a beautiful tanka but it doesn't follow the Renga Book's chapter numbers order. Yours should be a 5/7/5 so it will be easy to fix, delete the last two lines.
Autumn closes door
Winter knocks and comes on in
Life keeps repeating
I love your 5/7/5 ... is wonderful. Well done.
renga rules:
RENGA is a unique collaborative Japanese style of poetry in which multiple poets write alternating stanzas. Renga is complicated and requires a good understanding of the form, but I am available to help you step by step, you can send me a message.
THE BOOK OF RENGA FORM:
To post your chapter, make sure that you have THE RIGHT CHAPTER NUMBER. The chapter numbers are at the top of the post. Scroll down, above the review box and Click on ADD CHAPTER.
FIRST POET - starts with a three-line haiku 5/7/5 that sets the theme and season of the poem.
THE SECOND POET writes a 7/7 stanza with same theme and season of the previous haiku stanza.
THE THIRD POET writes a 5/7/5 stanza sharing the same theme and season of the previous stanza.
THE FOURTH POET writes a 7/7 stanza sharing the same theme and season of the previous stanza.
The process continues repeating the same process of 1, 2, 3, 4 renga poems.
When you open the Renga Book, notice the type of stanza (5/7/5) or (7/7) and follow the next one.
Thank you for participating in our Renga Book. Let me know if I can help.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Hello, Karen,
Thank you for participating in our renga book. You wrote a beautiful tanka but it doesn't follow the Renga Book's chapter numbers order. Yours should be a 5/7/5 so it will be easy to fix, delete the last two lines.
Autumn closes door
Winter knocks and comes on in
Life keeps repeating
I love your 5/7/5 ... is wonderful. Well done.
renga rules:
RENGA is a unique collaborative Japanese style of poetry in which multiple poets write alternating stanzas. Renga is complicated and requires a good understanding of the form, but I am available to help you step by step, you can send me a message.
THE BOOK OF RENGA FORM:
To post your chapter, make sure that you have THE RIGHT CHAPTER NUMBER. The chapter numbers are at the top of the post. Scroll down, above the review box and Click on ADD CHAPTER.
FIRST POET - starts with a three-line haiku 5/7/5 that sets the theme and season of the poem.
THE SECOND POET writes a 7/7 stanza with same theme and season of the previous haiku stanza.
THE THIRD POET writes a 5/7/5 stanza sharing the same theme and season of the previous stanza.
THE FOURTH POET writes a 7/7 stanza sharing the same theme and season of the previous stanza.
The process continues repeating the same process of 1, 2, 3, 4 renga poems.
When you open the Renga Book, notice the type of stanza (5/7/5) or (7/7) and follow the next one.
Thank you for participating in our Renga Book. Let me know if I can help.
Gypsy
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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I saw that you had two 5-7-5's in a row. So, I wrote one of each hoping you could pick the appropriate one. I thought since it was your book, you could edit. Can't you? Karen
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no worries, it's fine now
no I cannot change anybody's chapters but my own.
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I di not realize this. Karen
Comment from Neonewman
Baby it's cold outside. Well, not here in Texas, lol. I love that song and your wonderfully crafted piece brought it to mind. This is a great addition, Karen.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Baby it's cold outside. Well, not here in Texas, lol. I love that song and your wonderfully crafted piece brought it to mind. This is a great addition, Karen.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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SPOILER ALERT: Gyspy wanted my poems to be separate . so, the first one is now called "Baby it's cold outside" And the second will be "Warmth". So You have reviewed Baby it is cold outside, And when I repost "warmth" You will need to re-review it. Please. Karen
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That's cool, and I will review it. I'll have to look today, this week has been all consuming.
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Poor baby.I do so love that picture. Have a better weekend. Karen
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Well, it's the time of year for all those Christmas parties. Things will calm down after New Year's and ramp back up for Valentine's.
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I am real busy lately too. But I will read you! Karen
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Awe! Same here, I'm reviewing as we speak.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Nothing is more wonderful being sitting by a fire and huge snowflakes gently falling outside. There'll be hot chocolate and some cuddling. Sounds great to me. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I had fun with it.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Nothing is more wonderful being sitting by a fire and huge snowflakes gently falling outside. There'll be hot chocolate and some cuddling. Sounds great to me. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I had fun with it.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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SPOILER ALERT: Gyspy wanted my poems to be separate . so, the first one is now called "Baby it's cold outside" And the second will be "Warmth". So You have reviewed Baby it is cold outside, And when I repost "warmth" You will need to re-review it. Please. Karen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
The fire and the warm socks picture looks so good. We haven't been above freezing in three days here and this is way colder than usual. Your poem gives such a cozy feeling just reading it, although the picture helps. You missed a letter: snowfall keep(s) Stay warm and cozy. Hope your Thanksgiving was as special as ours was.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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The fire and the warm socks picture looks so good. We haven't been above freezing in three days here and this is way colder than usual. Your poem gives such a cozy feeling just reading it, although the picture helps. You missed a letter: snowfall keep(s) Stay warm and cozy. Hope your Thanksgiving was as special as ours was.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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SPOILER ALERT: Gyspy wanted my poems to be separate . so, the first one is now called "Baby it's cold outside" And the second will be "Warmth". So You have reviewed Baby it is cold outside, And when I repost "warmth" You will need to re-review it. Please. Karen
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
A beautiful scene you have set in this poem. I liked the personification of the seasons as they close a door and knock and come in. The final line is my favorite. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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A beautiful scene you have set in this poem. I liked the personification of the seasons as they close a door and knock and come in. The final line is my favorite. Nicely done.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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SPOILER ALERT: Gyspy wanted my poems to be separate . so, the first one is now called "Baby it's cold outside" And the second will be "Warmth". So You have reviewed Baby it is cold outside, And when I repost "warmth" You will need to re-review it. Please. Karen