Paint It Black, Black As Night
No colors anymore, I want them to turn black7 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Goff
Thoughts:
Wouldn't have been as good without the add on, contest he damned.
Sixteen Candles song may be tormenting, but what a great classic movie!
Group hugs are the best. Unless it's in a prison shower. Then they are the worst.
Seriously. Had to six star this.
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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2024
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Thoughts:
Wouldn't have been as good without the add on, contest he damned.
Sixteen Candles song may be tormenting, but what a great classic movie!
Group hugs are the best. Unless it's in a prison shower. Then they are the worst.
Seriously. Had to six star this.
D
Comment Written 29-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2024
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Fabulous review. I read it to Debbie, my wife. Thank you.
And bless you for the six stars!
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Fabulous read, Wayne.
Comment from Wendy G
A different, and very moving story, and it gives an inside view into black grief and depression - and the issues surrounding it.
And yes, I agree with you. A deadline should be a deadline, and if people haven't met the rules then they should be disqualified. (I was disqualified once for writing a Christmas story set on Christmas Eve - the reason I was given was that that wasn't Christmas, as Christmas hadn't happened yet, and you can't write about something which hasn't happened!!) Unbelievable.
Wendy
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2024
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A different, and very moving story, and it gives an inside view into black grief and depression - and the issues surrounding it.
And yes, I agree with you. A deadline should be a deadline, and if people haven't met the rules then they should be disqualified. (I was disqualified once for writing a Christmas story set on Christmas Eve - the reason I was given was that that wasn't Christmas, as Christmas hadn't happened yet, and you can't write about something which hasn't happened!!) Unbelievable.
Wendy
Comment Written 29-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2024
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Truly unbelievable!
When a person wants to remain depressed...
Thank you for your great review. I don't know of a thing these parents could do that wouldn't push the boy over the edge.
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That's the hard thing for parents - the feeling of powerlessness, and that whatever they tried would be "wrong", and that terrible sense of guilt that they couldn't meet his needs.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
The entire story is really great, and I see where you will fit in the extra. The story you submitted shows someone so depressed that suicide seems likely. In the short version you might somewhere hint at or mention his brother's death. My 33-year-old grandson, who we raised, had a week of that blackness down in Florida without telling us until the end. He killed himself in April.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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The entire story is really great, and I see where you will fit in the extra. The story you submitted shows someone so depressed that suicide seems likely. In the short version you might somewhere hint at or mention his brother's death. My 33-year-old grandson, who we raised, had a week of that blackness down in Florida without telling us until the end. He killed himself in April.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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I'm so sorry about your grandson. My brother did the same last spring.
Thank you for your very nice review.
Best wishes for the new year.
Comment from lyenochka
I'm a little confused with the series of events. First it's from the teenager's point of view. He's either neglected and got into trouble or even died per the conversation with the Principal but it sounds like the family was reunited through all of them turning to God ?
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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I'm a little confused with the series of events. First it's from the teenager's point of view. He's either neglected and got into trouble or even died per the conversation with the Principal but it sounds like the family was reunited through all of them turning to God ?
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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Hmmm.
Maybe I shouldn't have had the brothers have the same beginning letter (David/Daniel). Daniel was killed in war. David went into depression. The parents were at wits end. The school principal wanted to help. After my little rant, the rest is in 3rd person. Mom left her Bible open. David saw it and read it.
Thank you for reviewing. I think I'll go back and change Daniel to Joseph.
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Oh, okay. I totally missed the differences. Maybe don't change the POVs?
Comment from Ric Myworld
As with most of your stories there is always something in them that grabs my attention and goes back to touch on something from my earlier life, which always keeps me anxiously waiting to see what you'll post next.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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As with most of your stories there is always something in them that grabs my attention and goes back to touch on something from my earlier life, which always keeps me anxiously waiting to see what you'll post next.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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Thank you. I wasn't going to post this, but gave in to a pouty-party, a bit of a tantrum. No one should be able to extend a contest deadline 'ad infinitum'.
As always, I appreciate your review.
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I see you as a patient man always in control: but thanks for helping me realize your humanity. :-)
Comment from jim vecchio
Love those Thompson Chain Bibles! I used them when I was teaching Bible. This is an interesting story. Of course, we learned much more in the second part. I had some ideas about David in the first half, but they were wrong. Anxious to see how this develops.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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Love those Thompson Chain Bibles! I used them when I was teaching Bible. This is an interesting story. Of course, we learned much more in the second part. I had some ideas about David in the first half, but they were wrong. Anxious to see how this develops.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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That was it.
The first part was for the 'Dark' contest. But after the 4th or 5th extension, I let myself pitch a little tantrum. (smiley face here)
thank you for your very nice review.
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Well, I enjoyed it, anyhow.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Hi Wayne.
That was such a touching story, of pain and loss. That David was grieving so badly that it affected his whole way of life. He could only see black, the dark, not the light. It was then we get to read his parents and head teacher's thoughts on the matter. It was hard for them all. Then, when for some unknown reason, David's mother left her Bible open at the most incredible page, God was insturmental there, and David got to read it. At last he came out of the dark and into God's light. A lovely, lovely story, my friend. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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Hi Wayne.
That was such a touching story, of pain and loss. That David was grieving so badly that it affected his whole way of life. He could only see black, the dark, not the light. It was then we get to read his parents and head teacher's thoughts on the matter. It was hard for them all. Then, when for some unknown reason, David's mother left her Bible open at the most incredible page, God was insturmental there, and David got to read it. At last he came out of the dark and into God's light. A lovely, lovely story, my friend. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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Thank you so very much. Your words are a blessing!
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You are very welcome. Have a wonderful 2025. xx
