The Kirby Case - Part 3
A homicide detective tries to catch a serial killer23 total reviews
Comment from jake cosmos aller
another part of the saga. well done narrative, in a blank verse format. i asked earlier if this was based on a true case or not. if so, would be nice to see author's notes about the original case
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another part of the saga. well done narrative, in a blank verse format. i asked earlier if this was based on a true case or not. if so, would be nice to see author's notes about the original case
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
Comment from Charles D Ezell
Getting closer, now we wait for the results and take another step toward the shoe clue. I like this mystery poem, not many here on the site can do this. Keep it going.
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Getting closer, now we wait for the results and take another step toward the shoe clue. I like this mystery poem, not many here on the site can do this. Keep it going.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
Comment from Michele Harber
You really could write a crime series for television. Your knowledge of evidence and how it's dealt with seems well researched and very logical. If I ever become a victim of crime, I think I might call you before I call the police.
Your story is coming along at a very enjoyable pace, quick enough to not let the reader get bored, but slow enough to not reveal too much too soon. Again, the fact that you're doing this in excellent rhyme and meter is amazing!
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You really could write a crime series for television. Your knowledge of evidence and how it's dealt with seems well researched and very logical. If I ever become a victim of crime, I think I might call you before I call the police.
Your story is coming along at a very enjoyable pace, quick enough to not let the reader get bored, but slow enough to not reveal too much too soon. Again, the fact that you're doing this in excellent rhyme and meter is amazing!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from kahpot
I love the way your story/poem gives us all the information we need to know about the progress of the case, and how things back at this time would have taken so much longer than now, very well written****kahpot
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I love the way your story/poem gives us all the information we need to know about the progress of the case, and how things back at this time would have taken so much longer than now, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from DonandVicki
I have been following your poetic serial killer story. A very original and engaging story in poem form. I have enjoyed this and look forward to reading much more.
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I have been following your poetic serial killer story. A very original and engaging story in poem form. I have enjoyed this and look forward to reading much more.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Sorry, I missed your note before about there being no high tech cameras at the time. This investigation is certainly coming up with some excellent clues about the victims and the perpetrator. Horrific as it is, it's still fascinating piecing the evidence together. You do a great job here, Pam, conveying this story. Well done! Debbie
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Sorry, I missed your note before about there being no high tech cameras at the time. This investigation is certainly coming up with some excellent clues about the victims and the perpetrator. Horrific as it is, it's still fascinating piecing the evidence together. You do a great job here, Pam, conveying this story. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Shanbreen
Hi Pam.
I believe this is the first one I have read that reads like a prose poem. It is well written.
For a while I was wondering where the shoe saga from Chen :
...distinctive pattern made by Chen.
would come into play.
It did some lines later:
...for shoes by Chen on showroom floors.
Well done, Pam. I am glad you are back into writing your poems.
I noticed that you are using a much larger font with double space between lines. You did it in the last one I reviewed, too. Any reason?
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Hi Pam.
I believe this is the first one I have read that reads like a prose poem. It is well written.
For a while I was wondering where the shoe saga from Chen :
...distinctive pattern made by Chen.
would come into play.
It did some lines later:
...for shoes by Chen on showroom floors.
Well done, Pam. I am glad you are back into writing your poems.
I noticed that you are using a much larger font with double space between lines. You did it in the last one I reviewed, too. Any reason?
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Tim Margetts
Loving the painstaking way they are tracking down the evidence. From such scarce clues can a killer be found and stopped..
This really is very good, Pam.
Now onto the next part.
Tim x
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Loving the painstaking way they are tracking down the evidence. From such scarce clues can a killer be found and stopped..
This really is very good, Pam.
Now onto the next part.
Tim x
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Pam,
You do the difficult task of rhyming and telling a story in tandem.
I'm eager to follow your clues and find out who the culprit is.
Good luck, Pam.
Have a healthy and happy new year.
Cindy
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Pam,
You do the difficult task of rhyming and telling a story in tandem.
I'm eager to follow your clues and find out who the culprit is.
Good luck, Pam.
Have a healthy and happy new year.
Cindy
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Begin Again
What takes me tens of thousands of words to write and explain, you, my dear, are doing it in rhyme and have me grasping at each clue to see where it might be leading us. this is fun!
Smiles, Carol
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What takes me tens of thousands of words to write and explain, you, my dear, are doing it in rhyme and have me grasping at each clue to see where it might be leading us. this is fun!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
