The Kirby Case - Part 4
Detective Mike Brady continues to look for a serial killer19 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This killer is torturing the girls too, oh my goodness this is a grim scene painted here Pam. They will have gathered much DNA and once the killer is caught they will be able to identify him at last, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
This killer is torturing the girls too, oh my goodness this is a grim scene painted here Pam. They will have gathered much DNA and once the killer is caught they will be able to identify him at last, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Dolly for this great review. But, they have gathered no DNA
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
The story is moved slightly, but there are rhyming mistakes. some of the lines sound forced when you say them out loud. The best thing anyone ever told me about poetry, was to read it out loud over and over, so we hear whether or really flows or not. Good luck with your story.
Karen
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
The story is moved slightly, but there are rhyming mistakes. some of the lines sound forced when you say them out loud. The best thing anyone ever told me about poetry, was to read it out loud over and over, so we hear whether or really flows or not. Good luck with your story.
Karen
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Hhhhh
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Pam,
This is a great poem. I never would have thought about doing a series of poems to talk about a case. You are brilliant my friend. This is a good case. Did it happen where you live? I have never heard of it and I am a crime junkie.
Well done my friend
Cecilia
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
Pam,
This is a great poem. I never would have thought about doing a series of poems to talk about a case. You are brilliant my friend. This is a good case. Did it happen where you live? I have never heard of it and I am a crime junkie.
Well done my friend
Cecilia
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Cecilia for another wonderful review
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You're welcome my sweet friend.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This is like reading both a newspaper article telling us what the latest in the investigation is, and a crime novel.
What an interesting idea you've taken on here, Pam.
xo
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
This is like reading both a newspaper article telling us what the latest in the investigation is, and a crime novel.
What an interesting idea you've taken on here, Pam.
xo
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you again Pam for a great review
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This is so much fun to be reading your poems and learning about the case at the same time. So cool and interesting. Thanks for sharing. Stay on the case!
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
This is so much fun to be reading your poems and learning about the case at the same time. So cool and interesting. Thanks for sharing. Stay on the case!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Marilyn for a great review
Comment from jake cosmos aller
another great series in your epic poem about the hunt for a serial killer. BTW the stanzas are not formatted properly. Fan Story sometimes messes up formating spaces when posting from word. to fix this go to advnce editing and click post from Word control V then check print preview sometimes it just does not take the stanza breaks. A workaround is to add a line like this --------------------------------------
after each stanza makes it easier to read and follow
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
another great series in your epic poem about the hunt for a serial killer. BTW the stanzas are not formatted properly. Fan Story sometimes messes up formating spaces when posting from word. to fix this go to advnce editing and click post from Word control V then check print preview sometimes it just does not take the stanza breaks. A workaround is to add a line like this --------------------------------------
after each stanza makes it easier to read and follow
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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That is a good suggestion Jake I will take that for my next few posts
Thanks for the wonderful review
Comment from Charles D Ezell
Another good one. We are getting closer. Only a matter of time and we will nail the guy. Did I say nail? Perhaps we need looking in another small town for the saloon.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
Another good one. We are getting closer. Only a matter of time and we will nail the guy. Did I say nail? Perhaps we need looking in another small town for the saloon.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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lol. Thank you, Charles for humorous review.
Comment from bob cullen
As I previously said, clever in the extreme. an entire story in poetic form. I'd like to add some extra letters to your name. I'd make it, Pamursosmart.
This truly is brilliant, original and exceedingly skilled.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
As I previously said, clever in the extreme. an entire story in poetic form. I'd like to add some extra letters to your name. I'd make it, Pamursosmart.
This truly is brilliant, original and exceedingly skilled.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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lol Bob. I am blushing. Thank you for your thoughtful and humorous review.
Comment from Michele Harber
I like the way you're adding a mystery (the nail salon) within a mystery. It adds an extra layer of interest to an already interesting story. Again, your crime knowledge seems very believable (at least to someone like me, who's watched many police procedurals on TV).
The one thing I'm missing in the story, which I suspect you'll include in later chapters, is the introduction of possible/likely suspects, which, of course, leads to red herrings.
I'm enjoying this mystery journey, and hope we don't get to the end any time soon.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
I like the way you're adding a mystery (the nail salon) within a mystery. It adds an extra layer of interest to an already interesting story. Again, your crime knowledge seems very believable (at least to someone like me, who's watched many police procedurals on TV).
The one thing I'm missing in the story, which I suspect you'll include in later chapters, is the introduction of possible/likely suspects, which, of course, leads to red herrings.
I'm enjoying this mystery journey, and hope we don't get to the end any time soon.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Hi Michele. No, I have not added suspects. In fact, the suspect is not known till near the end of the series.
Thanks for the wonderful review
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You're very welcome, and I'll be waiting for the reveal.
Comment from Shanbreen
I am glad they found the location by the matching sap the tree produced and the footprints on the forest floor. But while the mystery deepens, I am curious to know what the cameras will show.
And so the mystery deepens. =)
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
I am glad they found the location by the matching sap the tree produced and the footprints on the forest floor. But while the mystery deepens, I am curious to know what the cameras will show.
And so the mystery deepens. =)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Hi my friend. Thank you for this wonderful review.