BOOK OF RENGA POEMS
Viewing comments for Chapter 84 "Frozen Secrets "Renga is a collective poets Japanese poem
3 total reviews
Comment from Brenda Strauser
What a neat poem. It is a clever idea. Your words match the picture well. Secrets beneath the ice is an unique idea. I liked reading your poem., R.J.
Brenda
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2025
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What a neat poem. It is a clever idea. Your words match the picture well. Secrets beneath the ice is an unique idea. I liked reading your poem., R.J.
Brenda
Comment Written 11-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2025
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Thank you Brenda for those kind words.
RJ
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I am happy you contributed to the Renga Book. It's an excellent chapter. Unfortunately, we both wrote the same chapter number so now we have two 7/7 stanzas. But that is okay, it's about to happen sometimes.
You followed this chapter:
elk's ( ice ) sculpture neath
aurora borealis
Is frozen in time
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Yours
what secrets beneath the ( ice )
in millennia shall rise ( ... ) please delete the three dots
The poem has a good composition. Beautiful presentation and imagery. Good syllables and connection between lines. Please add rules to your author notes :)
***** PLEASE COPY AND PASTE THE RULES TO YOUR AUTHOR NOTES *****
HOW TO WRITE A RENGA POEM:
It's very important to LINK your Renga stanza to the previous stanza keeping the same theme and season of the year.
First copy and paste this link to your browser to check the Renga Book. Your chapter will follow the last chapter: fanstory.com/chapterdetails.jsp?id=42337
FIRST POET - starts with a three-line haiku 5/7/5 that sets the theme and season of the year.
THE SECOND POET writes a 7/7 stanza that links to the previous 5/7/5 chapter with the same theme and season of the year.
This pattern (5/7/5 stanza followed by a 7/7 stanza) continues on and on. Some renga books can be 100 stanzas or more.
To post your chapter, scroll down the renga poem page you are reading. Above the review box click on ADD CHAPTER.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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I am happy you contributed to the Renga Book. It's an excellent chapter. Unfortunately, we both wrote the same chapter number so now we have two 7/7 stanzas. But that is okay, it's about to happen sometimes.
You followed this chapter:
elk's ( ice ) sculpture neath
aurora borealis
Is frozen in time
====
Yours
what secrets beneath the ( ice )
in millennia shall rise ( ... ) please delete the three dots
The poem has a good composition. Beautiful presentation and imagery. Good syllables and connection between lines. Please add rules to your author notes :)
***** PLEASE COPY AND PASTE THE RULES TO YOUR AUTHOR NOTES *****
HOW TO WRITE A RENGA POEM:
It's very important to LINK your Renga stanza to the previous stanza keeping the same theme and season of the year.
First copy and paste this link to your browser to check the Renga Book. Your chapter will follow the last chapter: fanstory.com/chapterdetails.jsp?id=42337
FIRST POET - starts with a three-line haiku 5/7/5 that sets the theme and season of the year.
THE SECOND POET writes a 7/7 stanza that links to the previous 5/7/5 chapter with the same theme and season of the year.
This pattern (5/7/5 stanza followed by a 7/7 stanza) continues on and on. Some renga books can be 100 stanzas or more.
To post your chapter, scroll down the renga poem page you are reading. Above the review box click on ADD CHAPTER.
Gypsy
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thank you Gypsy. I have made the corrections you suggested.
RJ
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
It would be interesting to know the answer to that question. nicely worded and the picture you chose is very cool for your presentation. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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It would be interesting to know the answer to that question. nicely worded and the picture you chose is very cool for your presentation. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thank you very much. So would I.
RJ
