Love Honor and a Mail Order Bride
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "The Jail House Visit"Indian girl vies for the heart of a homesteader
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Comment from Gayla putnam
A good story makes the reader want to know what happens next. There is much mystery to solve, so I hope you continue writing. I like your character descriptions, the vanilla dress etc. I did wonder if it would be called dime store candy in those days? (maybe penny candy). I am unsure of that. gayla
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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A good story makes the reader want to know what happens next. There is much mystery to solve, so I hope you continue writing. I like your character descriptions, the vanilla dress etc. I did wonder if it would be called dime store candy in those days? (maybe penny candy). I am unsure of that. gayla
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Oh. You are right about penny candy. Thanks for stopping by.
Comment from royowen
Yes, Luke is quite obviously an honourable man, despite the third variable in the plot, Ayanna, who, according to Ruth, is in love with Luke, boy, what a complicated plot, particularly since the in-laws will inflict their vengeance on the child, it seems like he doesn't really have a choice, well done Stan, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2025
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Yes, Luke is quite obviously an honourable man, despite the third variable in the plot, Ayanna, who, according to Ruth, is in love with Luke, boy, what a complicated plot, particularly since the in-laws will inflict their vengeance on the child, it seems like he doesn't really have a choice, well done Stan, blessings Roy
Typo : she didn't have (to) lay...
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2025
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You might says its like trying wriggle your way out of sinkhole. God's providence will reveal itself over time. Thanks!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I understand about the child, but Ayanna loves Luke, and I believe he loves her. Somehow something needs to work out here. I love the story.
Luke put his face to her ear from the other side and whispered. "The judge said if I married you, I could (whispered,)
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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I understand about the child, but Ayanna loves Luke, and I believe he loves her. Somehow something needs to work out here. I love the story.
Luke put his face to her ear from the other side and whispered. "The judge said if I married you, I could (whispered,)
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Thanks Barbara. So much to resolve going forward. Appreciate your sincerity. Sometimes true love can move mountains over time. Blessings ahead.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi Stan,
I'm behind on reading as well, but I've kept the basic storyline in mind. I know he loves Ayanna, and visa versa. It's sad he can't be with her, but understand his inclination to save the little girl.
An interesting and unique western story.
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Hi Stan,
I'm behind on reading as well, but I've kept the basic storyline in mind. I know he loves Ayanna, and visa versa. It's sad he can't be with her, but understand his inclination to save the little girl.
An interesting and unique western story.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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No worries Rhonda. Sometimes we are both like ships passing in the night. But the lighthouse from above gives us safe harbor.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Stan.
In this chapter you've done an excellent job of exposing the emotions of each of your key characters. You have clearly defined potential disappointment In devastation in Ruth's life. You have introduced the possibility of Luke becoming a father. You have lengthy emotions with the potential reality that Ruth is facing. Well done.
Robert
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Hello Stan.
In this chapter you've done an excellent job of exposing the emotions of each of your key characters. You have clearly defined potential disappointment In devastation in Ruth's life. You have introduced the possibility of Luke becoming a father. You have lengthy emotions with the potential reality that Ruth is facing. Well done.
Robert
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Appreciate how you take the time to review and discuss the way the plot unfolds. I'm trying to go for a gritty western with faith tough as leather.
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You're welcome, Stan
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This chapter really pulls me! I love how you've built the tension with the struggle Ruth is facing. The scene at the jailhouse is especially powerful.
The dialogue feels real. I can really feel the weight of the decisions they're making. It's an enjoyable read that kept me wanting to know what would happen next. Keep writing this wonderful story!
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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This chapter really pulls me! I love how you've built the tension with the struggle Ruth is facing. The scene at the jailhouse is especially powerful.
The dialogue feels real. I can really feel the weight of the decisions they're making. It's an enjoyable read that kept me wanting to know what would happen next. Keep writing this wonderful story!
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2025
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Thanks so much. I really appreciate this. Helps to keep me going!
