Welcome to the Neighborhood
Mr. Rogers does not live here...31 total reviews
Comment from Lori Mulligan
Imagine a sixth star! This was brilliant and so descriptive! I loved the cleverness and the tense dialogue.
With your vivid descriptions, I could imagine what the entire scene looked like. I see why it's best of the best!
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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Imagine a sixth star! This was brilliant and so descriptive! I loved the cleverness and the tense dialogue.
With your vivid descriptions, I could imagine what the entire scene looked like. I see why it's best of the best!
Comment Written 01-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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Oh, you sweet-talkin' reviewer! Thank you!! xoxox
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Comment from tfawcus
Love the laconic humour in this well-constructed story. eg You fucker!" he growls at me.
"Well, I used to,"
The twist is superbly crafted. Never saw it coming, even though it emerges organically from the earlier part of the story.
A tough one to beat in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2025
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Love the laconic humour in this well-constructed story. eg You fucker!" he growls at me.
"Well, I used to,"
The twist is superbly crafted. Never saw it coming, even though it emerges organically from the earlier part of the story.
A tough one to beat in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2025
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From your computer screen to G-d's ears, Tony. Thank you. xoxo
Comment from humpwhistle
I like your story, Rachelle. It's both funny and evocative. You have a knack for dialogue and banter. But, I'm not sure you have the male voice, nor the male psyche correct. I may be way off base, Rachelle, but your male protagonist sounds like a character without enough dimension.
I think you can do better, Shelley. Don't buy into FS praise. I love you, and I'm telling you straight.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2025
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I like your story, Rachelle. It's both funny and evocative. You have a knack for dialogue and banter. But, I'm not sure you have the male voice, nor the male psyche correct. I may be way off base, Rachelle, but your male protagonist sounds like a character without enough dimension.
I think you can do better, Shelley. Don't buy into FS praise. I love you, and I'm telling you straight.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2025
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You know I always appreciate your candor, Del. Thank you.
Comment from Debbie Pope
Wow! And I just finished reading your zen poem!! In my review, I perceptively stated that you have a knack for peaceful zen. Now I must say that you have a knack for titillating sexual prose. You can do anything, girl. This was riveting. And you even managed to capitalize on your fashion expertise using the absence of fabric in those bikinis.
This was great!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2025
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Wow! And I just finished reading your zen poem!! In my review, I perceptively stated that you have a knack for peaceful zen. Now I must say that you have a knack for titillating sexual prose. You can do anything, girl. This was riveting. And you even managed to capitalize on your fashion expertise using the absence of fabric in those bikinis.
This was great!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2025
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Haha! Yes, I never want it said that I didn't make my questionable female characters unfashionable!! Thanks for this terrific review. I love it! Xo
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Wow!!! Well, I learn new things every day I learned them from you l o l! You're always such an amazing writer to me. You never have to guess what's going on. Uh, what you're saying or the picture crystal clear in my ninth, especially this kind of picture hallelujah! Nice ending you got there very well done! I love your writing! My humble opinion Watching no issues with grammar spelling punctuation sentence structure, that's all it's perfectly done.This can only be done by you! Only one thing that I can do that's for sure! Have an awesome night!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2025
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Wow!!! Well, I learn new things every day I learned them from you l o l! You're always such an amazing writer to me. You never have to guess what's going on. Uh, what you're saying or the picture crystal clear in my ninth, especially this kind of picture hallelujah! Nice ending you got there very well done! I love your writing! My humble opinion Watching no issues with grammar spelling punctuation sentence structure, that's all it's perfectly done.This can only be done by you! Only one thing that I can do that's for sure! Have an awesome night!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2025
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Thank you, Sweet Lea. You're always my kind supporter. Xoxo
Comment from judiverse
You're destined to be the site's female Lancellot. This was so funny, too. Vito's last name, which I won't try to write, makes him sound like a gangster. Great description of the characters and their behavior. Vito has himself the perfect trophy wife in Lilianna. Turns out she's not so dumb, though, as she will soon be awarded $400 million dollars. (Hope I read that right.) Jesse also has reason to divorce his own wife, as he's a PI and has the goods on Vito and Cleo. This is not a scene that I'm in any way familiar with, but it is probably the norm among some of the Hollywood elite. Great dialogue. I like the turn-the-tables ending with Lilianna beingJJesse's client.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025
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You're destined to be the site's female Lancellot. This was so funny, too. Vito's last name, which I won't try to write, makes him sound like a gangster. Great description of the characters and their behavior. Vito has himself the perfect trophy wife in Lilianna. Turns out she's not so dumb, though, as she will soon be awarded $400 million dollars. (Hope I read that right.) Jesse also has reason to divorce his own wife, as he's a PI and has the goods on Vito and Cleo. This is not a scene that I'm in any way familiar with, but it is probably the norm among some of the Hollywood elite. Great dialogue. I like the turn-the-tables ending with Lilianna beingJJesse's client.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025
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Hahaha. The female Lancellot. So then, Lancellette?
Thanks for this absolutely fantastic review. Yes, sometimes people underestimate bimbos. Gawd knows Vito did!!
Thanks, Judi! Xoxo
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You're welcome. Thoroughly enjoyed. I was wondering what particular state this might have occurred in. It's easier to see this happening in some states than in others. judi
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It's in DC...you know, where all our lawmakers congregate...
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Oh, my. No wonder Jesse can afford to live in such a ritzy neighborhood. He must have the goods on a lot of politicians. judi
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Oh, my. No wonder Jesse can afford to live in such a ritzy neighborhood. He must have the goods on a lot of politicians. judi
Comment from Thesis
Well done! I enjoyed this story. You did a good job of creating a wonderful story of revenge when it appeared to be a story going in a completely different direction. I don't know if you needed the adult warning on this. It wasn't vulgar or graphic.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025
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Well done! I enjoyed this story. You did a good job of creating a wonderful story of revenge when it appeared to be a story going in a completely different direction. I don't know if you needed the adult warning on this. It wasn't vulgar or graphic.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025
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The warning was a requirement of the contest., so that's why I did it. Unlike the members of that neighborhood, I, personally, am a rule follower.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
LoL. Wow, this erotic story flows well and the characters are well developed. It's easy to visualize the scene .. Sodom and Gomorrah-ish. It has all the eye candy for the guys and the humor for us ladies. Hahaha
I went through a period when I wrote a lot of erotic poetry, now I'm more into romance but sometimes can be steamy (*÷*) u la la
Great job, Rachelle, I love the ending.... I didn't expect it...
An awesome entry for the Erotic Writing Contest. Makes me want to write something lol...nah, I'll leave it to the pros, like you.
Good luck!!!!
Gypsy
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025
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LoL. Wow, this erotic story flows well and the characters are well developed. It's easy to visualize the scene .. Sodom and Gomorrah-ish. It has all the eye candy for the guys and the humor for us ladies. Hahaha
I went through a period when I wrote a lot of erotic poetry, now I'm more into romance but sometimes can be steamy (*÷*) u la la
Great job, Rachelle, I love the ending.... I didn't expect it...
An awesome entry for the Erotic Writing Contest. Makes me want to write something lol...nah, I'll leave it to the pros, like you.
Good luck!!!!
Gypsy
Comment Written 05-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025
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This makes me so happy, Gypsy! Thank you for this really encouraging review. I totally appreciate it. Xoxo
Comment from Brad Bennett
What a hoot! Great fun, Rachelle. I discovered it by looking at the pictures , then I started in to the intro copy. But I couldn't stop there so I ventured on. Best line: She opened her legs like barbeque tongs...
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025
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What a hoot! Great fun, Rachelle. I discovered it by looking at the pictures , then I started in to the intro copy. But I couldn't stop there so I ventured on. Best line: She opened her legs like barbeque tongs...
Comment Written 04-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025
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Yessss! Brad, thank you times a million zillion, because that was MY favorite line, too, and no one mentioned it until you.
Thank you for this terrific review!! Xoxo
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Favorite line for me, Rachelle. Sometimes, I wonder if some people are really reading my stuff or just skimming through it.
I must read more of your postings. I'm learning a lot from your style.
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Hmm! Now you have me intrigued. Xo o
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I will start reading soon. In the meantime, I gotta rewrite some of my stuff; someone told me I use too many adverbs. That is a recurring, upsetting, but improving, informing message. :>)
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL! Okay, so the pen went there, I see... you could do a stint on the soap opera Broken Hearts Club... :) ;) Certainly has the heat and back-stabbing and surprise necessary... :) ;) Thanx for sharing (I think... wink, wink!) and best of luck! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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LOL! Okay, so the pen went there, I see... you could do a stint on the soap opera Broken Hearts Club... :) ;) Certainly has the heat and back-stabbing and surprise necessary... :) ;) Thanx for sharing (I think... wink, wink!) and best of luck! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 04-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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And this was another assignment I rose to. I just love to be challenged.
"Thanks for sharing." Hahaha. I see what you did there, you naughty thing!! Xoxoxou
