Trouble In Red
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34 total reviews
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
LJ,
This is a good story. It's funny they took the private detective and then returned him. This story is well organized and flows nicely from beginning to end.
Well done
Cecilia
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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LJ,
This is a good story. It's funny they took the private detective and then returned him. This story is well organized and flows nicely from beginning to end.
Well done
Cecilia
Comment Written 01-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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Thank you Cecilia, for your review and comments. This is a multi-author novel with each writer continuing where the previous writer left off. I think it's up to 9 chapters now. I appreciate you reading mine.
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You are welcome
Comment from Harry Craft
"Which one of you Goombas is going to tell me what's going on?" This is my favorite line in the whole story. This makes it sound like gangsters or the mob lol! Great story. Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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"Which one of you Goombas is going to tell me what's going on?" This is my favorite line in the whole story. This makes it sound like gangsters or the mob lol! Great story. Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 28-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much Harry for your review and encouraging comments about my chapter in this multi-author mystery and crime book. There are currently 9 chapters. Thanks again for reading mine.
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You are so welcome LJbutterfly.
Comment from F. William Lester
I just read the opening chapter, and this project caught my eye. I'm interested in how these chapters are progressing. Your description of Mama George is good: old, worn, but someone you don't want to mess around with. I like Fefe. Nice hook at the end. Thanks for sharing it. Frank
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2025
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I just read the opening chapter, and this project caught my eye. I'm interested in how these chapters are progressing. Your description of Mama George is good: old, worn, but someone you don't want to mess around with. I like Fefe. Nice hook at the end. Thanks for sharing it. Frank
Comment Written 27-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2025
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Thank you so very much for your encouraging comments. As you saw, it is a multi-author book created by Carol (Begin Again). It now has 8 chapters, each chapter taking off where the previous chapter left off. Thanks again for reading my contribution. I really appreciate it.
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My pleasure. Be well.
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My pleasure. Have a great week.
Comment from Neonewman
This is an excellent continuation of chapter one. I particularly liked the Strawberry Shortcake caper, which continues on the red theme. So Ethan Cole has found himself in quite a predicament. Mama George (lI ove the name) will kill him, and her daughter will pay double. Great work!
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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This is an excellent continuation of chapter one. I particularly liked the Strawberry Shortcake caper, which continues on the red theme. So Ethan Cole has found himself in quite a predicament. Mama George (lI ove the name) will kill him, and her daughter will pay double. Great work!
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 25-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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Thank you Steve for this encouraging review. This was my first time trying to tack on a sequence to another writer's story, and write in their style. It was a challenge, but fun. There are currently 6 chapters. Feel free to add yours. Anyway, thank you for reading my chapter, and I appreciate the stars.
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My pleasure, LJ. I just finished all six chapters. What great fun this is. I will see If I can find the time to join in.
Comment from Jessica Wheeler
I love where you took this! Mama George is so perfectly described, from her weathered face right down to the bully lap on her lap. You have provided much to build on in this chapter. Loved it!
Xo
Jess
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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I love where you took this! Mama George is so perfectly described, from her weathered face right down to the bully lap on her lap. You have provided much to build on in this chapter. Loved it!
Xo
Jess
Comment Written 25-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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Thank you so much Jessica, for your review and encouraging comments. This was my first attempt adding a sequence to another writer's story. It was big fun. Hope you decide to join in. Thanks again for reading mine, and a BIG thank you for SIX, bright, beautiful stars.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Well that's explosive! In the sense that a lot went on in these paragraphs! He doesn't like the dog. I'll take the dog l o l! And who's this lady in red? Interesting and intriguing. You have a unique matter of fact. Way of writing, which I find quite interesting too! Your dialogue looks good and I can see no issues with aesthetics sentence structure spelling, or punctuation. Very interesting chapter to what i'm sure is an interesting book. Best of luck to you.And thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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Well that's explosive! In the sense that a lot went on in these paragraphs! He doesn't like the dog. I'll take the dog l o l! And who's this lady in red? Interesting and intriguing. You have a unique matter of fact. Way of writing, which I find quite interesting too! Your dialogue looks good and I can see no issues with aesthetics sentence structure spelling, or punctuation. Very interesting chapter to what i'm sure is an interesting book. Best of luck to you.And thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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Hi Lea,
I'm so glad to hear from you. Thank you for your review and comments. This is part of a multi-author story. Begin Again (Carol) wrote Chapter 1. This is Chapter 2, which I added. Rachael Allen wrote Chapter 3, and other writers are adding chapters. Everyone is invited to join the fun. Thanks again for reading my chapter.
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This could be fun. Need one more?
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Carol, the lady that started the story suggested we write a chapter 500 words or less, that continues where the previous story left off. It was fun. I invite you to jump right in.
Comment from teafor2
LJ, Ethan's quasi-kidnapping didn't seem to place him in mortal-fear of his
life...As a seasoned sleuth, his chosen gig had brought him into contact
with various henchmen hired to do others bidding, not unlike being fetched by their boss...I like the contrast of the treatment of the dog, verses the veiled threats given to Ethan about the jewels...Anxiously wait-
for the next installment. teafor2
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2025
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LJ, Ethan's quasi-kidnapping didn't seem to place him in mortal-fear of his
life...As a seasoned sleuth, his chosen gig had brought him into contact
with various henchmen hired to do others bidding, not unlike being fetched by their boss...I like the contrast of the treatment of the dog, verses the veiled threats given to Ethan about the jewels...Anxiously wait-
for the next installment. teafor2
Comment Written 24-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2025
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Thank you so much for your review and encouraging comments. This story is part of a multi-author book. Begin Again (Carol) wrote Chapter 1. Then I picked up the story where she left off, with Chapter 2. Rachelle Allen wrote Chapter 3, and so on. There are now 5 chapters posted.
Everyone is invited to pitch in. All you have to do is read the last chapter and write 500 words or less picking up where the previous chapter left off. This is my first time joining in on a multi-author story. (There have been several) It is BIG fun. If you want to see all the chapters, go to Begin Again's portfolio and click on Trouble in Red. You will see all chapters listed. We are having fun. Join us.
Thanks again for reading my chapter.
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You are welcome, but no thanks...I do
appreciate the invite, but must decline.
Comment from jmdg1954
LJ.
You continued chapter one perfectly in the same tone (I'm not sure how to explain).
I like the intro of new characters and an old caper, Strawberry Shortcake.
I might get into a chapter.
Sounds like fun,
John
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2025
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LJ.
You continued chapter one perfectly in the same tone (I'm not sure how to explain).
I like the intro of new characters and an old caper, Strawberry Shortcake.
I might get into a chapter.
Sounds like fun,
John
Comment Written 24-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2025
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Thank you John, for your encouraging comments. Begin Again (Carol) had a great idea to start this project. I've never attempted to add a sequence chapter to another writer's story, but this was big fun. I DO hope you decide to jump in. It's just 500 words or less. You'll enjoy it. Thanks again for reading mine.
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Yes, I'm contemplating throwing my hat in the ring. It does sound like fun.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
this is an interesting book chapter, short and snappy, well-paced; you have managed to incorporate a good deal of intrigue into the action. i enjoyed my read. kay
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2025
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this is an interesting book chapter, short and snappy, well-paced; you have managed to incorporate a good deal of intrigue into the action. i enjoyed my read. kay
Comment Written 24-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2025
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Hi Kay,
I'm glad you enjoyed my addition to the story started by Begin Again (Carol). This was my first attempt to add a sequence chapter to another writer's story. It was big fun. I hope you decide to jump in and continue with 500 words or less where someone left off. If you have time, you'll enjoy it. Thanks again for reading mine.
Comment from Jim Wile
Great continuation to the story, Lorraine. It seems it's back on one track now, and I've just added my own chapter which gives a little history behind your mention of the Strawberry Shortcake caper. I've also continued with the recaps and added a character list to the notes area that I hope contributors will add to.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2025
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Great continuation to the story, Lorraine. It seems it's back on one track now, and I've just added my own chapter which gives a little history behind your mention of the Strawberry Shortcake caper. I've also continued with the recaps and added a character list to the notes area that I hope contributors will add to.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2025
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Thank you so much Jim, for your review. I can't wait to see how you continued the story. A character list is a great idea, since each writer seems to add someone. Thanks for joining in the fun.
