Trouble In Red
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Comment from F. William Lester
What a great idea. I'm trying to catch up on the past chapters with the hope that I can add a chapter - if it doesn't end before I get there. :-) Nice writing. Lots of questions for Ethan to follow up (and the writers as well). Gigi, bleached blond, good 40s-style noir, although the "princess-style house phone" dates the scene 20 years later. Thanks for sharing it. Be well. Frank
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2025
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What a great idea. I'm trying to catch up on the past chapters with the hope that I can add a chapter - if it doesn't end before I get there. :-) Nice writing. Lots of questions for Ethan to follow up (and the writers as well). Gigi, bleached blond, good 40s-style noir, although the "princess-style house phone" dates the scene 20 years later. Thanks for sharing it. Be well. Frank
Comment Written 27-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2025
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Yesss!! You are right about that phone. Thank you, Frank! I will change that at once!!
I DEFINITELY HOPE YOU ADD A CHAPTER!!! Send Begin Again a request for a chapter number. As long as people are still requesting chapters, she won't be inclined to end the story! So PLEASE jump on board!! It's really fun.
Thanks for this terrific review. xoxo
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Is the gorgeous redhead your alter ego? LoL she sounds very attractive and seems to have Ethan around her finger.
Excellent addition to the multi-author book.... sounds like fun.
You definitely gave it that "Rachelle style"
Well done, ms red
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2025
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Is the gorgeous redhead your alter ego? LoL she sounds very attractive and seems to have Ethan around her finger.
Excellent addition to the multi-author book.... sounds like fun.
You definitely gave it that "Rachelle style"
Well done, ms red
Comment Written 27-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2025
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Yes, every gorgeous redhead is my alter ego...okay, and my prime ego, too.
Thanks for the very nice review! I know prose isn't your favorite form of self-expression, but I think your brand of writing would definitely add something fabulous to this book. Please give it some thought!
xoxoxo
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I like to write stories, especially the horror genre, but I am a better poet than writer. I have written several stories with the help from my friends.
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But, Gypsy! I used to write nothing but prose but then decided to stretch myself and delved into Japanese poetry! I honestly believe that if a person can write, he or she can write regardless of genre. The TALENT is intrinsic. The style just has to be coaxed out. Don't box yourself in so, you talented wench!!! xoxoxox
Comment from Y. M. Roger
I'm in for the bidding war thought...lol! ;) Will have to check this out on my next day off... looks like it could be fun!! ;) A great look at a man that I suspect is not as solid as he should be.... hmmmm. :) Yvette
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2025
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I'm in for the bidding war thought...lol! ;) Will have to check this out on my next day off... looks like it could be fun!! ;) A great look at a man that I suspect is not as solid as he should be.... hmmmm. :) Yvette
Comment Written 26-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2025
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That has a familiar ring to it, right?
You should definitely join in the fun, Yvonne! You'd be so great at furthering the tale in the perfect way.
Just be sure to contact Begin Again first before you write anything because I believe the chapter count is now up to 10, so if you write anything prematurely, by the time your # comes around, it might not work with the plot line anymore.
It's turning into a very good story, I think, though!!
Thanks for reviewing me! I always appreciate your feedback. xoxo
Comment from Neonewman
This is a brilliant addition to this already addictive storyline, Rachelle. I may have to jump in at some point. This looks like a ton of fun.
Like a hamster with a Brazil nut, I loved this!
Should he call Mama George and incite a bidding war? "Hell, yes! Wait, maybe, no."
red-lipped kiss over her shoulder. Great addition.
Your talent is above and beyond, Young Lady!
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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This is a brilliant addition to this already addictive storyline, Rachelle. I may have to jump in at some point. This looks like a ton of fun.
Like a hamster with a Brazil nut, I loved this!
Should he call Mama George and incite a bidding war? "Hell, yes! Wait, maybe, no."
red-lipped kiss over her shoulder. Great addition.
Your talent is above and beyond, Young Lady!
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 25-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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Yesss!! JOIN US!! Jump in with both feet; the water is warm and wonderful! No wolves allowed, though...
Thanks for the delightful review. xoxo
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The wolves currently reside deep in East Texas and seem to be territorial. However, this damn rogue wolf may be an exception, lol.
I've read all the chapters and will wait to see what the next ones produce before diving in.
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written and I enjoyed listening to it. It flowed very well when it was read out loud. I wish you the very best with your writing so wish the group very good day and they may come up with more chapters that continue to add to the story. Patricia.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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This is very well written and I enjoyed listening to it. It flowed very well when it was read out loud. I wish you the very best with your writing so wish the group very good day and they may come up with more chapters that continue to add to the story. Patricia.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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Now, Patricia, YOU are a writer!! Why don't you spread that pizzazz here and treat us to a chapter penned by YOU!!! I'd read it with the utmost delight!!
All you'd need to do is PM Begin Again to get a chapter number, then read the chapter immediately before yours and build upon that plot line! I really hope you join in the fun!!!
Thanks for the very nice review! xoxox
Comment from Jessica Wheeler
You are so damn talented. I love where you took this, and I love love love your signature writing style- always crafted with a killer opening. There is something so brilliant about this: "like a hamster with a Brazil nut, returned to his table to mull this new crinkle over in his mind."
Exceptional, as usual!
XOXO
Jess
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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You are so damn talented. I love where you took this, and I love love love your signature writing style- always crafted with a killer opening. There is something so brilliant about this: "like a hamster with a Brazil nut, returned to his table to mull this new crinkle over in his mind."
Exceptional, as usual!
XOXO
Jess
Comment Written 25-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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I appreciate that because that was the one simile that I mulled over a LONG time: Should I/shouldn't I include it? It is just too weird? But now I'm glad I didn't delete it. Thank you for always knowing JUST what to say. xoxox
PS - I love to read a chapter YOU pen, as well. You know how much I love every last thing you write, Miss Talent!! xoxox
Comment from jmdg1954
The continuation of the story with the voluptuous red head and Msma George continues.
This was well written and continues with secrecy and intrigue.
Nicely done.
John
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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The continuation of the story with the voluptuous red head and Msma George continues.
This was well written and continues with secrecy and intrigue.
Nicely done.
John
Comment Written 24-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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Thank you for this, John! I appreciate the feedback and encouragement.
I'd sure love it if you would add YOUR brand of pizzazz and fun to the story, too, though. All you'd need to do is write to Begin Again and request a chapter number, and VIOLA!! You'd bring a smile to us all with your creations!!
xoxoxo
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I wonder if Ethan is going to accept Red's offer or not. I do hope you continue to add to this story so I can find out. I am enjoying reading this. You've done a great job writing this chapter.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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I wonder if Ethan is going to accept Red's offer or not. I do hope you continue to add to this story so I can find out. I am enjoying reading this. You've done a great job writing this chapter.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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Thanks Barbara! I appreciate this warm and thoughtful review very much.
I think YOU should add a chapter! You're great with chapter books! A seasoned veteran of the art form! I'd be so happy to read one by you and your pizzazzy way of creating the perfect intrigue and interest. I know you're involved in your own at the moment, but if you want a quick diversion, this could be the perfect, fun means! Nothing elaborate is necessary - just something short but good.
Hope you take me up on this! I enjoyed the no-serious-commitment of it and have a hunch you would, as well.
xoxoxo
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I would like to but I'm on deadline to get my last novel, the one with Sami and Noah in it to my publisher. I'm still doing my edit before he does his.
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Gotcha! Good luck with it. Be a bulldozer!! xoxox
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LOL I'm trying.
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You? I'm sure you're SUCCEEDING. It's all you know how to do, Miss Capable! xoxox
Comment from Jim Wile
Loved your sultry addition to this story, Rachelle. You've certainly mastered the "noir patois" and the noir style of writing very well in this entertaining chapter.
I'm so glad you turned me onto this story, which promises to be a lot of fun to read and contribute to.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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Loved your sultry addition to this story, Rachelle. You've certainly mastered the "noir patois" and the noir style of writing very well in this entertaining chapter.
I'm so glad you turned me onto this story, which promises to be a lot of fun to read and contribute to.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025
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I thank you for this delightful review, Jim, and am so looking forward to reading your contribution tonight after I return home from lessons! It is a VERY fun endeavor, indeed!! Glad you decided to add your solid and intriguing brand to the collaboration. xoxo
Comment from Jacob1395
This is another engaging chapter, Rachelle and I loved how you made the character's come to life in just a few short paragraphs. I really enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2025
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This is another engaging chapter, Rachelle and I loved how you made the character's come to life in just a few short paragraphs. I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2025
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Add your talented touch in, Jacob!! You'd do wonderful things for Carol's story!!!
Thanks for the delightful review. xxox
