Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

If it isn't the daughter who stole the jewels, could it be Joe is back on the scene. He would know about the stolen jewels and might still be pining for Ruby. Nice addition to the story by group.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2025

I guess we'll see. Let's see where the next authors take the story. Have you thought of adding a chapter, Carol? It's fun.

Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary

Excellent

Jim,

This was a wonderful story and full of excitement. It kept this reader engaged throughout the story. To think her daughter would stea l from her when she was living the good life.

Well done

Cecilia

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2025

Thanks, Cecilia. This is an interesting project to be a part of. I'll likely add another chapter down the road.

reply by Cecilia A Heiskary on 27-Feb-2025

You're welcome. Is this the one that Carol started?

reply by the author on 27-Feb-2025

Yep. There are a few new chapters after mine. It's a fun story.

If you want to see all the chapters, just click on the >>> following the chapter links at the top.

reply by Cecilia A Heiskary on 27-Feb-2025

Thank you I will do that. I am so far behind on my reviews. I took a couple days off a couple weeks ago and I can't seem to make a dent :(

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a very nicely written chapter in the multi author book and I very much enjoyed listening to it. It flows very well when it is read aloud and your sentence structure in paragraph and your punctuation all are very well done. May you have a wonderful day and a terrific week. Patricia.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2025

Thanks very much, Patricia. I appreciate your kind words.

Comment from Jessica Wheeler

Exceptional

Jim, SO good. I love your use of language, and where you took the story. You do such a great job when it comes to defining characters. Dropping subtle descriptions and words like "fixer" paint a clear picture for the reader. Loved this!
Xo
Jess

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2025

Thanks so much, Jess, and for those 6 stars too. I think this is such a cool idea to have people keep adding to the story. I hope to add another chapter down the road.

Comment from Neonewman

Exceptional

Bravo!
Damn, Jim, your back story was freaking flawless. I loved the description of Tony; I swear I could hear his squeaky voice as I read. I, one hundred percent, loved that you brought Corky into this chapter. I think he is an incredible character who will be mentioned throughout this story.

This is an incredible idea, Carol issued. If I have the time, I will have to join.
God bless,
Steve

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025

Thanks so much, Steve. I appreciate your kind words and those 6 stars too. The caddie master I used to work for when I caddied as a teen was a little old Italian guy with an unforgettable high, squeaky voice. That's who I thought of for Tony. I used him in one of my earlier golf novels called Some Call It Luck.

reply by Neonewman on 25-Feb-2025

Oh, that's cool. We all have someone in our past that tends to never leave us. My pleasure, as always, Jim.

Comment from Rachelle Allen

Exceptional

OOOOOOOOH!!!! REALLY, REALLY good one!! I love this backstory!!!!!! I swear, you have thought of EVERYTHING, you clever writer, you!! I especially love the description of Tony and his huge body and squeaky voice a la Mike Tyson!!

I can't wait to see where our next writer takes this, but you have certainly set the stage for her BEAUTIFULLY!!

I am totally impressed!! Seriously, I never would have thought of anything this good!!!!
xoxoxo

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025

Thanks so much, Rachelle for your very kind review and the 6 stars.

I didn't think it was a particularly exciting chapter, but I thought there was enough put out there that needed to be tied together with a backstory, so that's what led me down this path. Everyone before put in the details; I just tied them together.

This is fun, and I'm excited to see where it goes next too. Thanks for making me aware of this story.

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

AS this novel continues to take place, how old will Nathan be when the last chapter is written. And what of the red-headed lady? I'm always interested in her whereabouts.

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025

Did you ever see the movie "Shooter" about an ex-army sniper who gets his revenge against the guys who set him up to be a patsy? The character's name is Bob Lee Swagger, and he's a character in the novels of Stephen Hunter. He was a young man in that novel. As Hunter is aging, he's still writing the Bob Lee Swagger stories twenty years later, and Bob Lee is aging too. Now he's in his 70s and still kicking ass.

I guess the answer to your question about Ethan is that it depends on how long this joint novel continues until it peters out. It could still be going 20 years from now, and Ethan might be 100 years old then. I guess we'll find out (although I doubt I'll still be around 20 years from now the way things are going!)

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Very clever to put a tracking device within the tiara. I enjoyed your chapter, and its development of the story, giving some background of what happened ten years ago ... and now more drama, but "Strawberry Shortcake" is not responsible ... so who is?
Wendy

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025

Thanks, Wendy. Maybe you could add a chapter and tell us who is, hmm?

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

This is a great background for the multi-author book! I'm surprised with all these different writing styles that the book flows seamlessly and the story unfolds naturally as if written by one author!

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2025

Thanks so much, Helen. Everyone seems to be getting into the style of a noir story. This is fun so far. Great idea from Carol.

Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

This was excellent. You incorporated elements from all the previous chapters. It was clever the way you took the Strawberry Shortcake caper (mentioned in Chapter 2) to Morocco (names in Chapter 3) and explained where the name came from and how jewels ended up under a house, I'm glad you added your creativity to this fun project.

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2025

Thanks very much, Lorraine. This has been a fun story so far. No telling where it goes now.