Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Strawberry shortcake sounds like a woman who is causing a bit of a stir among the male population here, I enjoyed the mystery here as your story unfolds, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025

Thanks Dolly! I'm so happy begin a gain (Carol) launched this project. It was really fun to contribute! I'm glad you're liking it!

Comment from njcoleman

Excellent

Excellent new chapter, Lori! This story has picked up steam big time! And now we meet Vito and it's on to the Pump Room! Great job!
Neil (writer of chapter four).

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2025

Hi Neil, thank you! And I loved the backstory you gave about Joe--really defined his character. This is such a fun project. I just love seeing where it goes next! Lori

Comment from Jessica Wheeler

Excellent

I loved building on this chapter, Lori! You created a perfect scene with such imaginative details that opened up many possibilities- like Vito, and The Pump Room! This was so good.
Xo
Jess

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2025

Thank you and I absolutely LOVE where you've taken it. Your noir writing is off the charts. It really couldn't have been a better step forward in this mystery.

Comment from Jim Wile

Excellent

A good continuation of the story, Lori. Maybe Joe isn't involved, but Ethan maintains his skepticism about him. At least he got another clue to investigate with the mention of Vito in Chicago. It will be interesting to see where it goes when he calls Strawberry Shortcake with this new information.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2025

Thanks, Jim. You set me up nicely for chapter 6. I just read Chapter 7. It is a great continuation. What fun this is!

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Lori,

Excellent continuation for the Trouble in Red story with what appears to have accurate dialogue and lingo. Also with the addition of a new charector and destination, The Pump Room.

I threw my hat into the ring and am assigned a chapter.

John

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025

Thanks so much! Can't wait to read your chapter!

reply by the author on 26-Feb-2025

I'm so glad you're joining! Can't wait to read your chapter!

Comment from Neonewman

Excellent

This is an incredible addition to this already fascinating story. I love the character added, Vito. I can't wait to see what this guy is all about. It'll also be interesting to see what the pump room offers.
God bless,
Steve

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025

Thanks, Steve! I can't wait to see where this goes too!

Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

I enjoyed your entertaining addition to this mystery of the stolen jewels. You added even more drama with the addition of boyfriend Vito, and The Pump Room. That title is intriguing. You set the story up really nicely for someone to continue. Well done.

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025

Thanks so much! Had so much fun! Can't wait to see where it goes!

Comment from Rachelle Allen

Exceptional

Oh, Lori!!! You took this on SUCH a good path!!! Intriguing, good dialogue, with a plot that is thickening like butterscotch pudding in a saucepan! (That's noir lingo; bet you just loved that, didn't you...)

I am so happy you brought your wonderful brand of writing to this endeavor. You've done absolutely wonderful things with the mystery and character development!! I am "all in!"

xoxoxo

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025

Thanks so much Rachelle! I do love your noir lingo! I'm going to practice that style myself. Can't wait to see where this goes next!

reply by Rachelle Allen on 25-Feb-2025

Oh, I know!! Isn't this so FUN! I'm loving reading everybody's contributions so much!!! xoxo

reply by the author on 26-Feb-2025

It is a blast!

reply by Rachelle Allen on 26-Feb-2025

I really love your always-so-positive way!! xoxo

reply by the author on 26-Feb-2025

Right back at cha! :-)

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a nicely written chapter in the continuing book and I very much enjoyed listening to it Flows very well when it is red loud your sentence structure your paragraphing and your punctuation are all very good. May you have a wonderful day and a terrific week. Patricia

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025

Thanks Patricia! Hope you a great week too! Lori

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I can't wait to find out more about Vito. I'm pretty sure he's not the type of guy to take home to mama. I enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing this post with us.

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2025

Thank you! I'm excited to find out more about Vito!