Trouble In Red
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Comment from Neonewman
BAM!!! Just like that the trajectory of this story changed. Twist, then turn, then twist again. This was a lively chapter. I love how you introduced the brain disease, this would explain her erratic behavior.
Well, now we have to wait for the next chapter.
God bless and well done, Wendy.
Steve
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2025
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BAM!!! Just like that the trajectory of this story changed. Twist, then turn, then twist again. This was a lively chapter. I love how you introduced the brain disease, this would explain her erratic behavior.
Well, now we have to wait for the next chapter.
God bless and well done, Wendy.
Steve
Comment Written 04-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much, Steve. I had fun writing this one, but now I feel sorry for Ethan Cole trying to figure out who is guilty of what!
And I am glad it’s not me writing the next chapter. Lol.
Great review. I am so pleased you enjoyed it.
Wendy
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Thank you so much, Steve. I had fun writing this one, but now I feel sorry for Ethan Cole trying to figure out who is guilty of what!
And I am glad it’s not me writing the next chapter. Lol.
Great review. I am so pleased you enjoyed it.
Wendy
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My pleasure, Wendy. I opted in for a chapter, I believe I will be after Jim Wile. Hopefully I'm set up nicely, as this isn't my normal genre.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wow, a very intriguing chapter. That brain disease sounds horrible... poor mama George... but she was not good to ruby. Hopefully Ethan can get to the bottom of it.
Well done, Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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Wow, a very intriguing chapter. That brain disease sounds horrible... poor mama George... but she was not good to ruby. Hopefully Ethan can get to the bottom of it.
Well done, Wendy
Comment Written 03-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2025
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Let's hope so. I am thankful for your very nice review - thank you so much! I am glad you enjoyed my chapter.
Wendy
Comment from royowen
There really is so mystery going on here, one needs a brain something like Miss Marple or Hercule Poirot, or indeed, a Sherlock Holmes, to work out what's going on with Mama George and her fortune, and how others fit in to the human maze of intrigue. Beautifully written Wendy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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There really is so mystery going on here, one needs a brain something like Miss Marple or Hercule Poirot, or indeed, a Sherlock Holmes, to work out what's going on with Mama George and her fortune, and how others fit in to the human maze of intrigue. Beautifully written Wendy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Thank you, Roy. Yes, a detective-type brain is definitely needed, so I am glad I am not writing the next chapter. Lol. Thank you for the great review.
Wendy
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Well done
Comment from Bill Schott
There is certainly a lot of supposition employed in this job of finding Ruby and the stolen jewelry. I think the disease is a huge piece that the detective has come upon with enough help from the reader to establish the fuzzy factor which feeds into the motivations of the rest of the seamy cast.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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There is certainly a lot of supposition employed in this job of finding Ruby and the stolen jewelry. I think the disease is a huge piece that the detective has come upon with enough help from the reader to establish the fuzzy factor which feeds into the motivations of the rest of the seamy cast.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Thanks so much, Bill. Yes, Ethan Cole has his work cut out now, to sort out what's going on and who the villains really are! I am glad I am not writing the next chapter!
Wendy
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This was a good chapter in this multi author book Wend, firstly setting the scene for us with Mama George's behaviour then Ethan researching the brain degeneration. Quite a twist. well done,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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This was a good chapter in this multi author book Wend, firstly setting the scene for us with Mama George's behaviour then Ethan researching the brain degeneration. Quite a twist. well done,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 01-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Thank you, Valda! A lovely review - and I am glad I don't have to write the next chapter, as I have no clue as to how Ethan will resolve this. Lol!
Wendy
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is do interesting. It's the kind of story that could be a good movie. You truly have written this well with authentic dialogues and an interesting plot. The presentation supports your writing. I enjoyed reading this.
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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This is do interesting. It's the kind of story that could be a good movie. You truly have written this well with authentic dialogues and an interesting plot. The presentation supports your writing. I enjoyed reading this.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 01-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Thanks so much, Alex for your very kind words. I appreciate your review. I'm sure you'll enjoy the next chapter by a different FS writer as well.
Wendy
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Yes, I will! You're welcome, Wendy!! :)
Comment from LJbutterfly
Wow Wendy! You changed the trajectory of the story. Everything we thought prior to this chapter, needs to be reconsidered. If Mama George has CBD, we can't rely on anything she said.
What Ruby has done, is initiate an investigation into her mother's sanity that may uncover and stop thugs and Vito and his sister from manipulating Mama G and stealing from her. What an interesting twist you have added. Good luck to the next writer.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Wow Wendy! You changed the trajectory of the story. Everything we thought prior to this chapter, needs to be reconsidered. If Mama George has CBD, we can't rely on anything she said.
What Ruby has done, is initiate an investigation into her mother's sanity that may uncover and stop thugs and Vito and his sister from manipulating Mama G and stealing from her. What an interesting twist you have added. Good luck to the next writer.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much - this review is very insightful, and very encouraging. Yes, everything now needs to be thought about from a different perspective. I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter.
Wendy
Comment from Jim Wile
I like the possibilities you've opened up here, Wendy. I especially like the CBD disease angle which indicates Mama George may be the victim of paranoia and she's being duped into believing she had pulled a heist and was subsequently robbed by Ruby in a ploy by the thugs to get her inheritance. Very nice!
Then we have to question what part does Vito and Carla play in this and how is it the two thugs are working both for Vito and Mama George. I'm eager to see how this is going to play out now.
Great addition to the story!
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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I like the possibilities you've opened up here, Wendy. I especially like the CBD disease angle which indicates Mama George may be the victim of paranoia and she's being duped into believing she had pulled a heist and was subsequently robbed by Ruby in a ploy by the thugs to get her inheritance. Very nice!
Then we have to question what part does Vito and Carla play in this and how is it the two thugs are working both for Vito and Mama George. I'm eager to see how this is going to play out now.
Great addition to the story!
Comment Written 01-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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Thank you very much, Jim. What a great review.
Wendy
Comment from Paul McFarland
You certainly have enough twists and turns in this one, Wendy. I'm going to have trouble keeping things straight in my mind between installments.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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You certainly have enough twists and turns in this one, Wendy. I'm going to have trouble keeping things straight in my mind between installments.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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It’s thrown a whole new slant on things for Ethan Cole. Good luck to him sorting it all out! Apologies to the writer of the next chapter! Lol. Thanks so much for reviewing.
Wendy
Comment from jmdg1954
Wow. What a critical turn of events. Perfecto...
The preverbal monkey wrench has been "Mike dropped" into the story raising a ton of question.
This is exciting.
Very well thought out Wendy.
Let's see where it goes.
John
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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Wow. What a critical turn of events. Perfecto...
The preverbal monkey wrench has been "Mike dropped" into the story raising a ton of question.
This is exciting.
Very well thought out Wendy.
Let's see where it goes.
John
Comment Written 01-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2025
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Thanks so much John. Hope your hand is healing well. Yes, it’s thrown a whole new slant on who’s doing what. Sorry for the writer of the next chapter! I appreciate your review!
Wendy
