If
A poem44 total reviews
Comment from Michael John Gould
I really enjoyed the first half it made me think out of the box as well emotionally feel the words second half which I enjoyed was so well written just felt to preachy for me and I go to church every Sunday for it just didn't go with the first half but I hope I could write like some day
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2025
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I really enjoyed the first half it made me think out of the box as well emotionally feel the words second half which I enjoyed was so well written just felt to preachy for me and I go to church every Sunday for it just didn't go with the first half but I hope I could write like some day
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2025
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Thanks so much, Roy
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was worthy of a six star but I'm out. Sorry I didn't review faster. It's getting hard for me to check in now. I did enjoy this poem and felt a strong point was made. We deny His existence, then blame Him for the bad, destroy the beauty of His creation then never accept responsibility. Yet, His love for us, never waivers. Amazing. Gretchen
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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This was worthy of a six star but I'm out. Sorry I didn't review faster. It's getting hard for me to check in now. I did enjoy this poem and felt a strong point was made. We deny His existence, then blame Him for the bad, destroy the beauty of His creation then never accept responsibility. Yet, His love for us, never waivers. Amazing. Gretchen
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Thanks Gretchen, for these terrific comments and great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation, Roy.
-A well written poem with effective imagery and rhyme.
-The poem flows well from beginning to end.
-A very good opening verse with the comparison to a ship.
-A good second verse about what God owns, and
how he made us stewards, but as stewards,
we have to be worthy and do good work.
-Very good closing section about Adam and
his fall from grace. I like how you end
with a couplet, and then the question.
-Very well done.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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-Very nice artwork and presentation, Roy.
-A well written poem with effective imagery and rhyme.
-The poem flows well from beginning to end.
-A very good opening verse with the comparison to a ship.
-A good second verse about what God owns, and
how he made us stewards, but as stewards,
we have to be worthy and do good work.
-Very good closing section about Adam and
his fall from grace. I like how you end
with a couplet, and then the question.
-Very well done.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Thanks Pam, for these fantastic comments and great review, blessings Roy
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You are very welcome, Roy.
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Bless you
Comment from Nicki.B
I really love the opening stanza here Roy, if we don't have God to love a trust to lead the way, then we will be lost souls, like fools walking with our eyes closed.
To be thankful to God for all he has done for us is important and to do the bes the can by him.
Very nice work, you have great rhyme and flow and of course a very important message from rhe heart your wishes to share.
Well done Roy!
Best Wishes
Nicki x
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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I really love the opening stanza here Roy, if we don't have God to love a trust to lead the way, then we will be lost souls, like fools walking with our eyes closed.
To be thankful to God for all he has done for us is important and to do the bes the can by him.
Very nice work, you have great rhyme and flow and of course a very important message from rhe heart your wishes to share.
Well done Roy!
Best Wishes
Nicki x
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Thanks Nicki, for these terrific comments and great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, If, sends out the message that whether one believes in God or not, He is the Master of the Universe and controls all things. He does not need our help, but we can use His.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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This poem, If, sends out the message that whether one believes in God or not, He is the Master of the Universe and controls all things. He does not need our help, but we can use His.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Thanks Bill, for these terrific comments and great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Pearl Edwards
If - is a powerful poem, Roy and your words written with the passion that comes straight from your heart, your faith. I think there are too many captains on different courses in our world at the moment. This one gave me goosebumps Roy, well done.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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If - is a powerful poem, Roy and your words written with the passion that comes straight from your heart, your faith. I think there are too many captains on different courses in our world at the moment. This one gave me goosebumps Roy, well done.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Thanks Valda, for these terrific comments and great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a really interesting work of art you have chosen to go with your beautiful poem. The questions you pose in your poem are so accurate for God's plan. The answers are a bit of an inditement on us for not believing enough or trying our best.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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This is a really interesting work of art you have chosen to go with your beautiful poem. The questions you pose in your poem are so accurate for God's plan. The answers are a bit of an inditement on us for not believing enough or trying our best.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Thanks Carol, for these terrific comments and great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Wayne Fowler
You wrote/constructed (?) a very nice poem with a message that will pass the test of eternity.
I don't quite get why you ask where Adam is, though. I'm befuddled.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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You wrote/constructed (?) a very nice poem with a message that will pass the test of eternity.
I don't quite get why you ask where Adam is, though. I'm befuddled.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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When God called for Adam when he had eaten of the fruit, he was hiding God said to Adam, where are you? I'm surprised you asked Wayne, thanks for the great review, blessings Roy
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Oh, I thought you meant where was Adam after he died - heaven or hell.
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The shepherd goes looking, aren't we all Adams' bless you
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a great and moving statement of the Christian faith in God and his mercies. While I am not a Christian, I can appreciate this statement of faith in God.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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a great and moving statement of the Christian faith in God and his mercies. While I am not a Christian, I can appreciate this statement of faith in God.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Thanks Jake, for these terrific comments and great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Arabellesmom
Hi there I'm pretty new to fan story but loving it. What a wonderful community on here and wow so much talent !!!! I enjoyed your poem a lot. Also like the picture with poem. Great job :)
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Hi there I'm pretty new to fan story but loving it. What a wonderful community on here and wow so much talent !!!! I enjoyed your poem a lot. Also like the picture with poem. Great job :)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Thanks for these terrific comments and great review, blessings Roy
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Welcome
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Thank you
