Twenty Years of Lost Freedom?
The 'What If' Anniversary13 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Peter,
This is a well told vignette. It shows that she loves him and he probably doesn't want to stay in the marriage. It seems his statement is a veiled request to be divorced and be free.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy the rest of your weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Hi Peter,
This is a well told vignette. It shows that she loves him and he probably doesn't want to stay in the marriage. It seems his statement is a veiled request to be divorced and be free.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy the rest of your weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 29-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2025
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Hello Joan,
I sincerely want to express my heartfelt gratitude for taking the time out of your busy schedule to submit your wonderfully warm message. It truly means a lot to me.
Please take care of yourself and stay well.
Sending you my warmest regards,
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You are most kindly welcome on all counts, Peter.
Joan
Comment from Sallyo
Ouch. Poor Audrey!
That ending was unexpected, even with the title. I thought maybe Audrey had aged 20 years and everything had changed.
A couple of punctuation oopsies...
darling" she
darling?" she
be a free man"
be a free man."
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2025
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Ouch. Poor Audrey!
That ending was unexpected, even with the title. I thought maybe Audrey had aged 20 years and everything had changed.
A couple of punctuation oopsies...
darling" she
darling?" she
be a free man"
be a free man."
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2025
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Hi
Thank you for your constructive review and for the oopsies!
Kind regards.
Comment from jessizero
This short piece of fiction made me smile. It seemed a little familiar, but I think it was well done. Thank you so much for sharing this, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2025
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This short piece of fiction made me smile. It seemed a little familiar, but I think it was well done. Thank you so much for sharing this, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2025
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Thank you for your lovely review. This little tale is based on some truth. Before retirement I worked in a number of British prison and I recall a prisoner who faced the same dilemma.
The girl was 15 and he was 19 and the girl's father father caught them "at it"
"Marry my daughter or spend time behind bars " the father advised.
He told her dad to go and boil his head, and he then spent several years in prison for USI with a minor.
Bless you and stay safe.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Where's that shotgun. It's not too late. Blast the bum!
"Have another drink, darling. Have a couple drinks. You should celebrate... and get drunk enough not to feel what I'm gonna do to you."
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Where's that shotgun. It's not too late. Blast the bum!
"Have another drink, darling. Have a couple drinks. You should celebrate... and get drunk enough not to feel what I'm gonna do to you."
Best wishes.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Hi Wayne
Thank you for your very descriptive review!
Take care and stay safe.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Well, who knows? He may have been killed off inside those prison walls!
"What's wrong darling" - need punctuation in here before the closing speech marks - best to use the question mark.
"If I had taken the prison option, then today I would be a free man" - need closing punctuation before the closing speech marks here.
Fun little piece
GMG
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Hi there,
Well, who knows? He may have been killed off inside those prison walls!
"What's wrong darling" - need punctuation in here before the closing speech marks - best to use the question mark.
"If I had taken the prison option, then today I would be a free man" - need closing punctuation before the closing speech marks here.
Fun little piece
GMG
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Thank you for your helpful review. I have made the grammatical changes as indicated.
Kind regards.
Comment from Thesis
I think instead of being a free man, Gerald is going to be a dead man today. I enjoyed your humorous story. I didn't thing it was going where you took it, but I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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I think instead of being a free man, Gerald is going to be a dead man today. I enjoyed your humorous story. I didn't thing it was going where you took it, but I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Many thanks for your delightful review. To pack a story with 150 words is quite a challenge!
Best wishes.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Peter,
This is a great flash fiction piece. Wow, how harsh were those words to his wife. That a serious gut punch right there. I think I'd file divorce just because. Great story with a good twist.
Well done
Cecilia
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2025
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Peter,
This is a great flash fiction piece. Wow, how harsh were those words to his wife. That a serious gut punch right there. I think I'd file divorce just because. Great story with a good twist.
Well done
Cecilia
Comment Written 06-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2025
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Hi Cecilia
Thank you very much for your lovely review.
Take care and stay safe.
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You're welcome and I have Mr. Ruger by my side.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha! I loved this flash fiction and I think you have hit the nail on the head here for some marriages. I love the humour here in this fine presentation and I wish I had a six left for you Peter, a great read, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2025
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Ha ha ha! I loved this flash fiction and I think you have hit the nail on the head here for some marriages. I love the humour here in this fine presentation and I wish I had a six left for you Peter, a great read, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 06-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2025
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Hi Dolly
Many thanks for your encouraging words. I enjoyed spinning this tale .
God bless and stay safe.
Peter
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Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written and yet it has a sad story to it. I wish you the very best with your writing. I also wish you a wonderful day and a very terrific week. May God bless you. Patricia.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2025
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This is very well written and yet it has a sad story to it. I wish you the very best with your writing. I also wish you a wonderful day and a very terrific week. May God bless you. Patricia.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2025
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Hi Patricia
Thank you for your encouraging words. Bless you and stay well.
Peter
Comment from Lana Marie
Haha....But now he's trapped in his relationship until death do one of them part. And now they get to question their last 20 years together.
I enjoyed your flash fiction!
Poor guy, now he's living with regrets. Would it have been a better option?
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2025
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Haha....But now he's trapped in his relationship until death do one of them part. And now they get to question their last 20 years together.
I enjoyed your flash fiction!
Poor guy, now he's living with regrets. Would it have been a better option?
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2025
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Hi Lana
I had a lot of fun writing this little piece of matrimonial treachery. Even I had to chuckle at the ending.
Bless you Lana and stay happy.
Peter.
