Emerald Isle
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Second Course"Invitation to Paradise
20 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
And so, the mystery and suspense continues. I enjoyed your vivid descriptions of the guests seated around the table, becoming suspicious of each other. I read Carol's Chapter 1, and forgot about it until I saw your chapter, which I enjoyed. You kept the mystery going.
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And so, the mystery and suspense continues. I enjoyed your vivid descriptions of the guests seated around the table, becoming suspicious of each other. I read Carol's Chapter 1, and forgot about it until I saw your chapter, which I enjoyed. You kept the mystery going.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2025
Comment from Carol Clark2
You gave us good descriptions of several of the characters. I like how the mood has changed from curiosity to suspicion, and heading toward animosity as the second course is served.
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You gave us good descriptions of several of the characters. I like how the mood has changed from curiosity to suspicion, and heading toward animosity as the second course is served.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2025
Comment from Pam (respa)
Good artwork and story to go with it, Ulla. You did a good job with it. You give us a picture of these people who have been gathered together for some reason, and no one knows what it is. Max seems to be the person of interest. I like the description of Peter, "a man who didn't suffered fools lightly." *...suffer fools.
A good ending for this segment that leaves things up in the air, except for dessert. That's always a good way to end, but maybe not for this group of characters who have no clue why they are there, or is there someone who does, and if so, why?! Very well done, my friend.
who didn't suffered fools lightly.
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Good artwork and story to go with it, Ulla. You did a good job with it. You give us a picture of these people who have been gathered together for some reason, and no one knows what it is. Max seems to be the person of interest. I like the description of Peter, "a man who didn't suffered fools lightly." *...suffer fools.
A good ending for this segment that leaves things up in the air, except for dessert. That's always a good way to end, but maybe not for this group of characters who have no clue why they are there, or is there someone who does, and if so, why?! Very well done, my friend.
who didn't suffered fools lightly.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2025
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You are keeping the mystery going here Ulla as you keep us all in suspense in this inventive story and as the tension rises then those involved become more enquiring and form their own opinions, another fine chapter in your story, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2025
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You are keeping the mystery going here Ulla as you keep us all in suspense in this inventive story and as the tension rises then those involved become more enquiring and form their own opinions, another fine chapter in your story, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2025
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Thanks you , Dolly. Ulla :)))
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Intriguing chapter in the Emerald Isle book. Good dialog and plot that unveils smoothly. Great character development. I'm curious to find out what happens next with the guests. You always have good wine in your stories lol
Well done!
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Â Atticus
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Intriguing chapter in the Emerald Isle book. Good dialog and plot that unveils smoothly. Great character development. I'm curious to find out what happens next with the guests. You always have good wine in your stories lol
Well done!
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Â Atticus
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much, Marival. I'm so glad you liked it. Oh, I can't help myself about the wine. I love a good red with my meal. Lol. Thanks again. Un besito. Ulla xx
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I love wine with a meal too 😋
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I see you have picked Max to know something, but he doesn't share what, although he seems to want the others to be worried. You have moved the story along quite nicely. You do have a few corrections to make. . . . cut into (to) the succulent . . . . . . used to be(ing) in charge . . . . . .what('s) all of this . . .
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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I see you have picked Max to know something, but he doesn't share what, although he seems to want the others to be worried. You have moved the story along quite nicely. You do have a few corrections to make. . . . cut into (to) the succulent . . . . . . used to be(ing) in charge . . . . . .what('s) all of this . . .
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much, Carol. I'm glad you liked this. I have made the corrections and thanks so much for pointing them out. Ulla xcx
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, a new book, you are writing novel machine. I need to read the first chapter 2 get a grasp of the storyThank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the next chapter.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Wow, a new book, you are writing novel machine. I need to read the first chapter 2 get a grasp of the storyThank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the next chapter.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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We are several who are writing this book. I hope to get another chapter in. Thank you so much, Iza. Ulla xcx
Comment from RJ Heritage
I read it and found it was well written, was a bit lost until I read the preceding chapter, then I understood it a bit more.I hope the mystery of them being there unfolds. I think that there is a typo in your 9th paragraph from the top. I believe it should read,'"didn't 'suffer' fools lightly." Thank you for sharing.
RJ
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I read it and found it was well written, was a bit lost until I read the preceding chapter, then I understood it a bit more.I hope the mystery of them being there unfolds. I think that there is a typo in your 9th paragraph from the top. I believe it should read,'"didn't 'suffer' fools lightly." Thank you for sharing.
RJ
Comment Written 23-Mar-2025
Comment from Sankey
An interesting read. Look forward to where we are heading. A bit repetitious here "descended around the table while the second and main course made its way around the table."
suggest change in the first "descended (on the group) while the second and main course made its way around the table.
"(Would a)nyone [would] like some real red wine?"
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An interesting read. Look forward to where we are heading. A bit repetitious here "descended around the table while the second and main course made its way around the table."
suggest change in the first "descended (on the group) while the second and main course made its way around the table.
"(Would a)nyone [would] like some real red wine?"
Comment Written 23-Mar-2025
Comment from Wayne Fowler
I'm ready for the dessert!
"Anyone would like some real red wine?" - This sentence needs reworded. Maybe just lose the 'would' or switch 'anyone' and 'would'.
Best wishes.
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I'm ready for the dessert!
"Anyone would like some real red wine?" - This sentence needs reworded. Maybe just lose the 'would' or switch 'anyone' and 'would'.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2025
