Stone Prison
She imprisons herself out of fear of hurting others9 total reviews
Comment from Harry Craft
A very interesting poem about one imprisoning themselves to keep from hurting others. It seems like such a painful situation to be in and yet could be a real scenario. I liked reading this poem and photo goes well with it too.
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A very interesting poem about one imprisoning themselves to keep from hurting others. It seems like such a painful situation to be in and yet could be a real scenario. I liked reading this poem and photo goes well with it too.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2025
Comment from Kirsten Shonle
This is an amazing poem. To be imprisoned in our own minds is a true horror story. There was so much emotion expressed here. I like how you even went into the metaphors of the straight jacket. This was a well written poem and I enjoyed the read.
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This is an amazing poem. To be imprisoned in our own minds is a true horror story. There was so much emotion expressed here. I like how you even went into the metaphors of the straight jacket. This was a well written poem and I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
Comment from Stephyweffyxx3
Very good first poem. I can relate a lot to what your poem talks about. Being a hostage of your mind, it's hard to find people to understand clearly of how you are feeling inside and most likely get judge because of the way you view your life compared to how someone else views it.
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Very good first poem. I can relate a lot to what your poem talks about. Being a hostage of your mind, it's hard to find people to understand clearly of how you are feeling inside and most likely get judge because of the way you view your life compared to how someone else views it.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
Comment from Julie G1
This verse portrays an inner angst that can happen to any individual. The imagery is poignant and evocative, as the poet leads the reader to appreciate an excellent talent. Keep on writing.
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This verse portrays an inner angst that can happen to any individual. The imagery is poignant and evocative, as the poet leads the reader to appreciate an excellent talent. Keep on writing.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
Comment from Amelie Johns
Welcome to Fanstory. I enjoyed reading your poem. Mental illness is like being a prisoner of your mind. It reminds me of something I wrote at some point where I described feeling like a prisoner of my own mind. I can feeling the inner struggle here and your words convey the strong emotions effectively. If I could make one suggestion, it would be to use larger font. A wonderful read. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
Best wishes,
Amelie
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Welcome to Fanstory. I enjoyed reading your poem. Mental illness is like being a prisoner of your mind. It reminds me of something I wrote at some point where I described feeling like a prisoner of my own mind. I can feeling the inner struggle here and your words convey the strong emotions effectively. If I could make one suggestion, it would be to use larger font. A wonderful read. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
Best wishes,
Amelie
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Thank you, I enjoy the feedback, and will heed your suggestion of larger font!
Comment from Tim Margetts
Welcome to FanStory, and thank you for such an emotionally honest and vulnerable first post.
This poem makes a powerful impression with its raw openness-it's not easy to put this level of internal struggle into words, let alone share it publicly.
What stood out to me most was the extended metaphor of the self-imposed prison. The imagery of the jacket, the cold stone walls, the trembling heat beneath-all of it built a strong, cohesive emotional atmosphere.
Lines like "trapped in the stays of a strait jacket, long gone the struggle to escape" and "a glimmer of hope remains...not allowing it to fester, to catch flame" carry real weight.
The poem is quite long for a free verse entry-if you revise later, consider splitting it into sections or stanzas for pacing and breath.
It would also help guide the reader through the emotional progression more clearly.
That said, the voice is authentic, the emotion sincere, and the language evocative. There's real poetic instinct here, especially in the closing image-keeping others safe from what's locked within.
A strong, heartfelt debut-brimming with potential and layered with feeling.
I am looking forward to reading more from you.
Tim
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Welcome to FanStory, and thank you for such an emotionally honest and vulnerable first post.
This poem makes a powerful impression with its raw openness-it's not easy to put this level of internal struggle into words, let alone share it publicly.
What stood out to me most was the extended metaphor of the self-imposed prison. The imagery of the jacket, the cold stone walls, the trembling heat beneath-all of it built a strong, cohesive emotional atmosphere.
Lines like "trapped in the stays of a strait jacket, long gone the struggle to escape" and "a glimmer of hope remains...not allowing it to fester, to catch flame" carry real weight.
The poem is quite long for a free verse entry-if you revise later, consider splitting it into sections or stanzas for pacing and breath.
It would also help guide the reader through the emotional progression more clearly.
That said, the voice is authentic, the emotion sincere, and the language evocative. There's real poetic instinct here, especially in the closing image-keeping others safe from what's locked within.
A strong, heartfelt debut-brimming with potential and layered with feeling.
I am looking forward to reading more from you.
Tim
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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I greatly appreciate such a detailed review! I am thrilled my work has conveyed what it was set out to do, it is a delight to receive validation and honest opinion. Also, thank you for the suggestions, I believe I will edit my poem with this in mind!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really like how your poem draws me into the intense emotions you describe. The way you express the inner struggle between wanting connection and keeping others at a distance feels so real. I love how you build this tension throughout. This is so well written. Keep going - your writing sure leaves an impression!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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I really like how your poem draws me into the intense emotions you describe. The way you express the inner struggle between wanting connection and keeping others at a distance feels so real. I love how you build this tension throughout. This is so well written. Keep going - your writing sure leaves an impression!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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thank you, I am glad you liked it. Thank you for the review!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We have a few ancient prisons in Britain that are still functional and they have housed many people who have committed heinous crimes. Prisons just got bigger and bigger as time goes on.
I have a couple of suggestions for your poem:
1. Arrange the lines one under the under for ease of reading.
2. Make your words larger so that they can be seen.
Welcome to Fanstory and I wish you luck with your writing.
Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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We have a few ancient prisons in Britain that are still functional and they have housed many people who have committed heinous crimes. Prisons just got bigger and bigger as time goes on.
I have a couple of suggestions for your poem:
1. Arrange the lines one under the under for ease of reading.
2. Make your words larger so that they can be seen.
Welcome to Fanstory and I wish you luck with your writing.
Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 30-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Thank you for the review, as well as the editing suggestions!
Comment from kahpot
"But through all the havoc I wreck" should this be wreaked?
What a wonderful though sad read, your words tell of a truth and hate inside, yet your containment is for the benefit of others.
Sorry I got a bit engrossed in your work, welcome to FS. so very well written, an excellent free verse, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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"But through all the havoc I wreck" should this be wreaked?
What a wonderful though sad read, your words tell of a truth and hate inside, yet your containment is for the benefit of others.
Sorry I got a bit engrossed in your work, welcome to FS. so very well written, an excellent free verse, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 29-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Thank you for your review, I put "wreck" because it is an ongoing process, no t only the past tense, but possible current and future, as well. But I see where you were thinking,and appreciate the advice.
