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Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Languid Days"
A Progression Of Expression From Fiction To Faith

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Comment from Jewell McChesney
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I found myself taking a deep breath and imagining the enmeshing being done on a hammock which sways betwix Island trees.

Thanks for that. What a great little mind vacation.

I will read through this book and so far, it is all enjoyable.

Your rhyming is exquisite and your words prolific.
I love happening upon new friends.
J

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
    thank you for the 2 star rating. Whoops! that was me. Thanks you for your time in reviewing this piece. It is appreciated
reply by Jewell McChesney on 01-Dec-2008
    Ha!
Comment from bud pine
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I like your style. Every line draws a memory, a mind sight of contentment. Your poem is well written and fun to read. I enjoyed it immensely. Thank you.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2007

reply by the author on 08-Apr-2007
    Thank you, thank you, thank you? for your time and input, it will be a useful tool in my attempts to grow as a poet and writer. I value all opinions that come as a result of an honest review.
Comment from TrueBeliever
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Some people are sooooo lucky!!!! Original concept and great verbiage used in this professionally presented poetic rendering. Warmest wishes, I enjoyed reading this most interesting contribution. Love Ondra

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2007

reply by the author on 08-Apr-2007
    Thank you, thank you, thank you? for your time and input, it will be a useful tool in my attempts to grow as a poet and writer. I value all opinions that come as a result of an honest review.
Comment from lancellot
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This is what I call a vacation. The ice chilling in a glass filled a fruit drink. No one calling you the phone, no emails or silly boss asking you dumb questions. It to bad the airport signals the end. Good work.

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2007

reply by the author on 06-Apr-2007
    Thank you, thank you, thank you? for your time and input, it will be a useful tool in my attempts to grow as a poet and writer. I value all opinions that come as a result of an honest review.
Comment from Kingsland
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this piece of writing is very poetic in its phrases
you have a very good rhythm and flow in this poem
this was my pleasure to read and review this well written verse... John

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2007

reply by the author on 06-Apr-2007
    Thank you, thank you, thank you? for your time and input, it will be a useful tool in my attempts to grow as a poet and writer. I value all opinions that come as a result of an honest review.
Comment from rhymer1
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Entertaining folderol in splendid rhymer and meter couplets. Visuals a delight. So reminiscent of vacations and weekends at Nag's Head SC (or is it NC) in a life long ago before marriage. Slainte, rhymer1

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2007

reply by the author on 06-Apr-2007
    Thank you, thank you, thank you? for your time and input, it will be a useful tool in my attempts to grow as a poet and writer. I value all opinions that come as a result of an honest review.
Comment from Trena One Who Cares
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This poem was well written it has good rhythm and good flow nice rhyme, Sounds like a great vacation reminds me of the Florida Keys. Good Job Trena

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2007

reply by the author on 06-Apr-2007
    Thank you, thank you, thank you? for your time and input, it will be a useful tool in my attempts to grow as a poet and writer. I value all opinions that come as a result of an honest review.
Comment from poeticcat2003
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Paradise in short verse. This is a great poem to capture the elation and the surrealism of being on vacation then having to return.

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2007

Comment from Oatmeal
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Blue-Stubby,

Welcome to fanstory! We are very glad that you have found us! Buckle your seat belt and hold on tight! You are getting ready to go on the ride of your life! LOL

Your descriptive words made the imagery spring into life! Good job. Very professional.

My favorite part was-

Crimson hues, a setting sun.
Island music, nighttime fun.

There was no SPAG. No typos or homographs. No errors at all.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2007

Comment from VICTIMEYES
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this was nicely structure and so evenly presented and in good form, the whole poem is picture perfect, and the words do tell well the idea of your languid days, nice.

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 Comment Written 06-Apr-2007