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A Progression Of Expression From Fiction To Faith

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Comment from lee_poe
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Fantastic! ugly as anything I've ever read but so gorgeously ugly.

All covered in dirt when I found my shirt
and wiped flies from my face

Terrific imagery. It all reads so realistically -- I'd sure liketo know where you live that I might stay far away!

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2008

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Comment from skye
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Oh, the life of a demon, a werewolf.
This poem just cries out for sympathy for the poor werewolf, but no, not from me.
LOL.
The rhymes are terrific, the story unfolds strongly through the poem, and the details are gory enough for any blood lover.
Well done.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2008

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Comment from daizylublue
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I think this was really good. It flowed well and had a good story. I did not see any spelling or grammatical errors in it. Descriptive and unique.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2008

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Comment from Spacey~Stacey
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Awesome imagery. You tended to all the details to make the reader feel part of this piece. Thank you for sharing your work...and I'll be sure to stay out of the park after dark ;)

Stacey

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2008

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Comment from PUPA
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Hi BS,
Though not my favorite theme, I enjoyed your tale, as it is well written and you succeeded in presenting a very strong visual read. The good rhyme and smooth flow made this an enjoyable read.
Love
Pupa

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2008

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Comment from BWitch
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Extremely strong visual read. Brilliant imagery, graphic even.
I found it disturbing to say the least, but that caters to my taste anyway. LOL!
Wonderful piece of poetry! Well done.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2008

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Comment from Earthwriter
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well done dark poem, not to my liking as fars as subject manner but well written i liked your use of imagery no major errors found

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2008

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Comment from Curt Mongold
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Yes, it produced imagery in my head...yuk! Of course that means good. Interesting take on the werewolf theme. Nice flow to the work makes it an easy read.
Curt

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2008

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Comment from ravenshadowwinds
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I wasn't sure I wanted tor ead this. I like to read stories with this subject matter but I wasn't sure that it would work well in poetry. It did. Good job.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2008

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Comment from Godfrey
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Blue-Stubby Yes, I would say it does have a stong visual read. What a fun story! You had an inspiration and it worked beautifully. Great job. G

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2008

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