Spit, Gum and Shoe Laces
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Unlike A Fairytale"A Progression Of Expression From Fiction To Faith
6 total reviews
Comment from Jewell McChesney
I let the fruits fall to the ground
and crushed them with my foot.
Lucifer roared and fled to hell,
leaving a trail of smoldering soot.
That's it! Whew..this is SO good and your author's notes even better.
How is it our world is so upside down, removing Jesus from public prayers, promoting gay marriages, removing God from or money yet allowing pornography to even get off the press or onto the internet? I don't get it....wait, yes I do....
anyway, this is powerful writing. Thanks for sharing!
Do not grow weary in well doing!
Jewell
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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I let the fruits fall to the ground
and crushed them with my foot.
Lucifer roared and fled to hell,
leaving a trail of smoldering soot.
That's it! Whew..this is SO good and your author's notes even better.
How is it our world is so upside down, removing Jesus from public prayers, promoting gay marriages, removing God from or money yet allowing pornography to even get off the press or onto the internet? I don't get it....wait, yes I do....
anyway, this is powerful writing. Thanks for sharing!
Do not grow weary in well doing!
Jewell
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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well, God is showering me with blessings today, through your reviews. Thanks for being a willing participant... eyes wide open.
Comment from Brian S. Pratt
Very good
I could practically visualize every nuance you put forth.
Well done indeed. No corrections noted.
Hmmm, apparently this review needs to be longer to get past the chick holding the book.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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Very good
I could practically visualize every nuance you put forth.
Well done indeed. No corrections noted.
Hmmm, apparently this review needs to be longer to get past the chick holding the book.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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THANK YOU FOR YOUR REVIEW AND IT IS GREATLY APPRICIATED
Comment from mstad55
A most excelent message. The authors notes tied it all together. I don't know that I would change anything. This is the first I've read of your work, so I'll be looking to see what else you have to offer. mstad55
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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A most excelent message. The authors notes tied it all together. I don't know that I would change anything. This is the first I've read of your work, so I'll be looking to see what else you have to offer. mstad55
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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thank you for your review and uplifting words
Comment from Joseph David Soukup
I am glad that someone can stick to one topic in a poem and perform it well. Great. Although I might not agree with why you oppose sex from a beautiful woman with flowing locks of hair, I do believe this to be a rather good to great poem. I am not sure, however, if you are talking about your wife or another tempting maiden.
The best part honestly, is where you are describing the beauty in the midst of ugly, not the ugly in the midst of beauty as what it seems like you are going for.
All in all a pretty good poem, I think this artist has potential (Stick to the sexy/romantic stuff, it seems that is your strong emotional point.)
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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I am glad that someone can stick to one topic in a poem and perform it well. Great. Although I might not agree with why you oppose sex from a beautiful woman with flowing locks of hair, I do believe this to be a rather good to great poem. I am not sure, however, if you are talking about your wife or another tempting maiden.
The best part honestly, is where you are describing the beauty in the midst of ugly, not the ugly in the midst of beauty as what it seems like you are going for.
All in all a pretty good poem, I think this artist has potential (Stick to the sexy/romantic stuff, it seems that is your strong emotional point.)
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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thank you for your review and uplifting words
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Another very fine write I have had the pleasure to review for you today! Your words are woven so beautifully to tell the tale of lust losing out over God and faith...Good job. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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Another very fine write I have had the pleasure to review for you today! Your words are woven so beautifully to tell the tale of lust losing out over God and faith...Good job. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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Thank you for your review and the grand rating
Comment from adewpearl
temptation invoked a women should be woman
she laid slithering should be lay
you have certainly come up with an effective concrete image to represent Lucifer/Satan's temptations that he offers up
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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temptation invoked a women should be woman
she laid slithering should be lay
you have certainly come up with an effective concrete image to represent Lucifer/Satan's temptations that he offers up
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2008
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super... thanks for the edits and i will put them to good use
