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Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Delighting in Him"
A Progression Of Expression From Fiction To Faith

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Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
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this is another good piece. I always find haiku the most difficult of all poetry to write, you seem to manage it very well. well done

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
    THANK YOU FOR YOUR TIME AND EFFORT IN REVIEWING THE PIECE. IT IS MUST APPRECIATED.
Comment from rama devi
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Great title. Marvelous theme. Well said and well presented. Only nit is that haiku does not use capital letters (except when required as in the name Jesus)/

Thanks for sharing.

Warm Regards,
rama devi

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
    thank you for your time and effort in reviewing the piece... and the helpful tip. always learning. thanks again
Comment from Roisin
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It's a nice poem but very short. The sentiment is nice but maybe better chosen words would make it more powerful. I enjoyed it anyway.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
    This was in HAIKU format,
    three lines... 5 syllables 7 syllables 5 syllables
    i noted the format at the top...
    thanks for the time and effort in reviewing the piece
reply by Roisin on 10-Dec-2008
    Sorry, I didn't realise. I'm new to the site and just finding my way around.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
    no problem... i edited the notes to define HAIKU structure.
    everything happens for a reason... thanks.