Comment from Blue Danube

Excellent

BeginAgain:
I much like what you write therefore I signed up to receive an e-mail each time you post something new.
Have read "From One Who Knows" five times over and I'm confused starting at the fifth line.
Hope I'm not having a dense day to-day but, hard as I've tried, I don't get a clear resolution.
Question: Who says "Welcome to my house, friend. You can call it home." ?
Not trying to make a nuisance out of myself but your story interests me a lot.
Sincerely,
Blue

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009

Blue This is based on a true story, my son's. Fortunately he has moved past the bar, but his heart struggles to heal.

I appreciate you reading and I am glad you asked about it.

What it means is that the old man lost everything when his wife left him and he too looked in the bottle for relief...He never found it, even though he sits in the bar day after day...So he tells his new friend,,Welcome to my house..you'll probably be here for awhile..so you can call it home. Home that clarifies it for you...or maybe I'll need to change it. Thanks again for the review. Carol

reply by Blue Danube on 13-Aug-2009

Thanks for taking the time to explain.
I think I get it now in that the old man is welcoming a new friend to the bar which he calls home because they will be spending a lot of time there.
I don't know if you really want to change your story a bit just for clarifying purposes as to who is who.
Perhaps other reviewers won't have the same confusion or doubts as I did.
Sincerely,
Blue

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Oh, the old man has been getting drunk in that bar since 1959 - that is not good - I sure hope this young guy gets over his cheating fiance a whole lot sooner!!! You tell this story, that actually has two scenes and settings (I'm impressed) in only 100 words quite effectively. You have the settings, the conflict, the characters - and it all makes perfect sense. It actually does more than just make sense - it is quite tragically moving. Brooke

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009

Brooke Thank you for understanding how tragic it really is. This story is based on my son's life unfortunately...though he has finally moved past the drinking for the most part, but he still struggles with his heart. They were together for four years, never fought and were planning their wedding....Life takes some strange twists sometimes. Thanks for all your kind words. Carol

Comment from eliz100

Excellent

Great job. You met the requirements for the story. You kept me a little off balance at first I didn't get he was remembering but it finally sunk in. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009

Eliz Thanks so much. It's so hard to get everything right with only 100 words. Add an extra zero and maybe, I could get it right. Glad you enjoyed it. Carol

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

This is a very well written, brief story. Betrayal is always a heart breaker. Misery loves company. Good luck in your contest.

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 Comment Written 13-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2009

Charlie

Thanks so much ...My son lost his fiance this way and still struggles to recover. Most times, he's finally moved passed the drinking. Now if he could move passed her...only time will tell.

Carol

reply by c_lucas on 13-Aug-2009

You're welcome, Carol. Charlie