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Comment from misscookie
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I love it this is beautiful
I still fear lighten
I love the way you express the fears yet you added comforted to the situration.
this is a good write.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
    Cookie,

    Thanks my dear friend for the generous comments. Smiles to you, Carol
reply by misscookie on 27-Feb-2010
    hello Carol, have a nice day and your welcome.
Comment from TheBritsWife
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Hi Carol, You really got me with the surprise twist at the end! I think this is an excellent piece of flash fiction. I was wondering about the line "Panic vibrated through my six-year-old voice", but it all fell into place at the end! I really enjoyed reading this. Good luck with your contest! It's a great entry. - Karen ;-)

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
    Karen,

    Thanks for catching the switch and I appreciate the kind review. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
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Those childhood fears stay with us. If the parents can soothe them away sometimes we find the comfort we need later in life. This is good micro-fiction. I could feel the fear and relief at being comforted.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
    Beth,

    Thanks so much for the kind review. I appreciate it very much. Smiles, Carol
Comment from DearlB
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This is a good story with a surprising twist at the end.
It was an easy read and had no spag errors that I saw.
You should do well in the contest.
Best of luck,
Dearl

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
    Dearl

    Thrilled you enjoyed the micro fiction. It's difficult to get a full storyline into so few words so I am thrilled when the reader connects. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
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It is strangbe how terrifying memories come back to haunt us through our dreams.
I though for a minute the child of six had a supernatural visitor. Glad it just turned out to be your husband rescuing you from your nightmare.

Juliette

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
    Juliteete,

    Appreciate the comments and generous review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from knowledge
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I see a story here. One of my sons was terrified of thunder storms. He would hide under his bed. One day I took him out in a storm and kept him with me while dancing and laughing in the wind, rain, lightning and thunder. After a while he settled down and began to dance with me. He lost his terror of storms.

Well written.

Thank You My Friend,

Knowledge

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
    Knowledge,

    What a wonderful parent you are to have found a way to ease his fears..Thanks for sharing and for the generous review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Agrona
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Great story with a nice twist at the end. You kept it nice and tight, left out any unnecessary words. I think that's a great entry to the micro fiction contest! I wish you good luck. I didn't see any SPAGS.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2010

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    Agrona,

    I appreciate the kind review. Thank you so much, Smiles, Carol
Comment from adewpearl
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I like the twist at the end - the narrator is not a six year old child but a grown woman with a six year old voice because she is reliving the trauma of a tornado. You depict the fears of this woman suffering from post traumatic stress-related flashbacks extremely well with intense emotion. Brooke

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
    Brooke,

    Thanks so much for understanding that it was flashbacks. A few didn't so I changed it from It's only a thunderstorm to it's only a dream....More like nightmare I think. Thanks so much...Carol
Comment from c_lucas
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There's a slight difference between a thunder storm and a tornado. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good luck in your contest.

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 Comment Written 26-Feb-2010

reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
    Charlie,

    Thanks for reading and reviewing. Smiles, Carol
reply by c_lucas on 27-Feb-2010
    You're welcome, Carol. Charlie