Flash Fiction
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Pirates and Boys"Collection of Flash, Micro, etc.
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Comment from Ann Smith
You can sense the fun and imagination in this story. I heard that Florida got snow this winter and so the billboard with the bikini clad girl does have a bit of irony while underneath you are throwing snowballs. The image and details are clear and I can hear the squeals of delight. Good luck with the contest. ann
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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You can sense the fun and imagination in this story. I heard that Florida got snow this winter and so the billboard with the bikini clad girl does have a bit of irony while underneath you are throwing snowballs. The image and details are clear and I can hear the squeals of delight. Good luck with the contest. ann
Comment Written 17-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Ann,
Thanks so much for your comments and appreciation for the short story. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Readywriter52
Tommy and his father were having fun tossing around snowballs. But going to Florida would have been warmer. I believe the billboard said it all.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Tommy and his father were having fun tossing around snowballs. But going to Florida would have been warmer. I believe the billboard said it all.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
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Readywriter,
Thanks for stopping by to read this short little story. Appreciate the comments. Carol
Comment from nora arjuna
Carol, i read this a couple of times. Probably just me. Does this mean they are vacationing in Florida and it's snowing, where it's supposed to be sunny? my whole family enjoyed watching captain jack sparrow. nice outing between father and son here. all the best. :)
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2010
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Carol, i read this a couple of times. Probably just me. Does this mean they are vacationing in Florida and it's snowing, where it's supposed to be sunny? my whole family enjoyed watching captain jack sparrow. nice outing between father and son here. all the best. :)
Comment Written 16-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2010
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Arjuna,
Yes, my friends in Florida and Texas had lots of snow this year...truly an unexpected event. Carol
Comment from Tellis
Yeah, snow in Florida is pretty rare. I bet the snowball fights were epic. I enjoyed reading this terrific story.
Tellis
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2010
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Yeah, snow in Florida is pretty rare. I bet the snowball fights were epic. I enjoyed reading this terrific story.
Tellis
Comment Written 16-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2010
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Tellis,
My friends in Florida and Texas had quite the fun this year...Making snowangels and having snowball fights..
Carol
Comment from douglasgclarke
Nice little story - It's nice to see a father and son connect.
But there wasn't an conflict in the story. Noting to overcome.
Also I didn't really get the ending. Was it that they could have fun somewhere besides in the warmth?
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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2010
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Nice little story - It's nice to see a father and son connect.
But there wasn't an conflict in the story. Noting to overcome.
Also I didn't really get the ending. Was it that they could have fun somewhere besides in the warmth?
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Comment Written 11-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2010
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douglas,
The contest rules for the micro fiction did not require conflict unless you want to consider they lived in Florida (thus the billboard) and it had snowed ' definitely not an everyday occurence in our southern state. I was required to use the word cannonballs = thus the pirate theme from the movie and the snowballs as ammunition. Thanks for the review...Carol
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I understand the rules, but to be a good story it should have some point to overcome.
I missed the fact that they were in Florida, expecting a billboard like that to be in New York advertising Florida.
Comment from sugardog
Very good!! Loved this FF story. You wrote a very creative tight story and stayed in the FF's strict word limitation. I thought you chose a fun subject to write about and gave it a nice twist at the end-who would have thought snow in Florida. Good luck in the contest. Dana
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Very good!! Loved this FF story. You wrote a very creative tight story and stayed in the FF's strict word limitation. I thought you chose a fun subject to write about and gave it a nice twist at the end-who would have thought snow in Florida. Good luck in the contest. Dana
Comment Written 25-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Dana,
Thanks so much for the kind comments. i always appreciate hearing from you. Smiles, Carol
Comment from MJMuraco
This was truly amusing. The graphics were great and I had to laugh when I read the comments about snow in Florida. We have so much here that it doesn't faze us. excellent writing.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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This was truly amusing. The graphics were great and I had to laugh when I read the comments about snow in Florida. We have so much here that it doesn't faze us. excellent writing.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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MJ
Me too! suppose to be 60 today and 25 with snow on Sunday...Mother Nature is going crazy! Thanks for the kind review. Carol
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Carol ...
This certainly is a marked change from your usual, gripping stories but ... I enjoyed it nevertheless.
There is nothing to suggest changing and, as it is a Contest entry, I wish you well. Thank you for sharing it with us.
With love from ... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Hullo Carol ...
This certainly is a marked change from your usual, gripping stories but ... I enjoyed it nevertheless.
There is nothing to suggest changing and, as it is a Contest entry, I wish you well. Thank you for sharing it with us.
With love from ... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Nanette,
Needed to take a break now and then...Will be back at it again soon enough. Thanks for the kind review. Carol
Comment from MercyWrites
Cute story. You manage to write a complete story in hundred words one with details and interesting dialogue. I like
the ending, and it made me smile when dad and son threw a snowball at the girl on the poster. I don't blame them.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Cute story. You manage to write a complete story in hundred words one with details and interesting dialogue. I like
the ending, and it made me smile when dad and son threw a snowball at the girl on the poster. I don't blame them.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Mercy,
Thanks for the kind review. Appreciate it as always. Carol
Comment from suneagle
107 words. Loved the animation, Carol. Great flash, nicely told. I enjoyed the fun of it and the twist about it being in Florida. Does it really snow there?
One trivial point:
It read -- 'Welcome to Florida. Come have fun in the sun.'
(Usually quotations from printed matter have the same double quote marks as dialogue:
It read -- "Welcome to Florida. Come have fun in the sun.")
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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107 words. Loved the animation, Carol. Great flash, nicely told. I enjoyed the fun of it and the twist about it being in Florida. Does it really snow there?
One trivial point:
It read -- 'Welcome to Florida. Come have fun in the sun.'
(Usually quotations from printed matter have the same double quote marks as dialogue:
It read -- "Welcome to Florida. Come have fun in the sun.")
Comment Written 15-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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suneagle,
Thanks for the kind response...You tempted me to write another one too...I like that one better, but I think I'm learning bit by bit. Smiles, Carol
