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Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Pirates and Boys"Collection of Flash, Micro, etc.
47 total reviews
Comment from fictionwriter
Funny. I love Jack Sparrow's character and so does my son. I could see pretending to be pirates and fighting with snowballs. Great job.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Funny. I love Jack Sparrow's character and so does my son. I could see pretending to be pirates and fighting with snowballs. Great job.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Joy,
Glad you enjoy the story. My Grandson simply loves that ole pirate...Thanks so much. Smiles, Carol
Comment from IndianaIrish
Haha...I loved this, Carol. Your twist and using snowballs as cannonballs is brilliant. Very enjoyable flash. Best of luck in the contest.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Haha...I loved this, Carol. Your twist and using snowballs as cannonballs is brilliant. Very enjoyable flash. Best of luck in the contest.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 14-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Indy,
Yes, thought as long as the snow was finally melting, I'd toss a few about...Nice to hear from you. Hope all is well. Smiles, Carol
Comment from AnnaLinda
Carol,
I think that you did a fantastic job
on your contest entry! You made great
use of the word 'cannonballs' in this
line:
"Icy cold cannonballs ripped through the air amidst squeals of delight.
I also enjoyed your surprise ending.
Linda
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Carol,
I think that you did a fantastic job
on your contest entry! You made great
use of the word 'cannonballs' in this
line:
"Icy cold cannonballs ripped through the air amidst squeals of delight.
I also enjoyed your surprise ending.
Linda
Comment Written 14-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Linda,
Thanks so much for the kind review and for enjoying the story too. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Adri7enne
Loved your artwork. I'd heard it snowed in Florida this year. What a cheat!
Fun little flash, girl. A snowball fight in the land of sun and sand. Go figure.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Loved your artwork. I'd heard it snowed in Florida this year. What a cheat!
Fun little flash, girl. A snowball fight in the land of sun and sand. Go figure.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Adri7enne,
Yes..Florida and Texas got more than their share this year. Who ever heard of 30 degrees in Miami...Thank you so much for stopping bu..Smiles, CArol
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Ha - I like this, Carol..
you're a clever one.
We went to one of the
canary islands on holiday
once and they had torrential
rain which they hadn't had
the likes of for 70 years!!
I was kept busy helping the
older one (older than us) and
trying to keep warm, as we
only had summer clothes and
the hotel wasn't actually
built for such weather.
We were brown with rush rather
than sun, by the time we arrived
home.
Love it, my friend.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Ha - I like this, Carol..
you're a clever one.
We went to one of the
canary islands on holiday
once and they had torrential
rain which they hadn't had
the likes of for 70 years!!
I was kept busy helping the
older one (older than us) and
trying to keep warm, as we
only had summer clothes and
the hotel wasn't actually
built for such weather.
We were brown with rush rather
than sun, by the time we arrived
home.
Love it, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Margaret,
What a horrid way to spend a relaxing vacation...Happened to many this year. Thank you for reading this shortie. Wrote another called Touch of Green that might put a smile on your face. Smiles, Carol
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I've already reviewed Touch of Green - Margaret x
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Goes to show you that senility is setting in faster than I thought...Thank you and have a nice evening...Carol
Comment from sgalletti
Another fun piece cleverly written in just a few short words. I, personally, hate Florida (I lived there for awhile). However, love Johhny Depp and the Pirates and appreciated how you made this a short metaphor--with correct word count and use of theme. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Another fun piece cleverly written in just a few short words. I, personally, hate Florida (I lived there for awhile). However, love Johhny Depp and the Pirates and appreciated how you made this a short metaphor--with correct word count and use of theme. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
Comment Written 14-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Sue,
Thank you for the kind review...I loved Fort Myers (my parents wintered there for 40 years) the ocean draws me back every now and then. Thanks for the review...Smiles, Carol
Comment from patmedium
Carol, this is a lovely, fun-filled write. The images on my mind's eye are strong and clear and the emoptions come across clearly, too. Pat.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Carol, this is a lovely, fun-filled write. The images on my mind's eye are strong and clear and the emoptions come across clearly, too. Pat.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
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Pat,
Yes, I could so see this taking place...Thrilled with snow in FLorida (not the crop growers though). Smiles, Carol
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Snow shouldn't last too long that far south, though, should it? Pat.
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Pat,
Lasted long enough to make cannonballs out of the tomatoes and oranges...about a day and a half I think. Take care....
Comment from Realist101
HI Carol! How this reminds me of my son when he was little. We used to have such fun! NOW, it is just gripe gripe gripe...this little story is perfect, and of course, now I want to go south!! :) Hugs, Susan
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2010
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HI Carol! How this reminds me of my son when he was little. We used to have such fun! NOW, it is just gripe gripe gripe...this little story is perfect, and of course, now I want to go south!! :) Hugs, Susan
Comment Written 14-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2010
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Don't we all wish to be in the Florida sunshine...Can't believe they got snow there this year...that is until I try to buy tomatoes...Hope all is well! Smiles, Carol
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I know, I love tomatoes, and oranges, and we just don't buy them often anymore. And the deer ate our tomato plants last year!! So, it is a mess. Did you know they mess with the weather by "seeding" it? I always wondered at the huge contrails in the sky, it is weather control attempts...I think this is a huge mistake...but, who am I to say??? I hope you are ok Carol, I think of you often...Hugs. Susan
Comment from Joan E.
What a clever animation to dress your tiny story. I enjoyed the contrast between the pirates, fantasy movie and the bikini-clad billboard. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2010
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What a clever animation to dress your tiny story. I enjoyed the contrast between the pirates, fantasy movie and the bikini-clad billboard. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2010
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Joan,
Thank you for reading and enjoying. I thought of a better one shortly after I posted this one...You'll have to read a Touch of Green if you get a chance...Smiles, Carol
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Thanks for the tip. You might want to read my response to growing old: "Hurly Burly."
Comment from missy98writer
Carol,
Adorable micro-fiction you've penned. Their is a beginning, middle and end. "Pirates of the Caribbean' I've never seen all the way through, I'm more of a 'Titanic' gal. Great imagery I could seen Tommy and his dad playing pirates outside the theater where snow covered the ground. Boys will be boys and they have a snowball fight. Of course you had to add a bikini clad girl on a billboard nearby. Loved the twist ending because they were in Florida. Excellent descriptive writing and natural dialogue. A wonderful entry in the micro-fiction contest. Cute cartoon pirate you've used. Shiver me timbers your micro-fiction was entertaining!
Melissa.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2010
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Carol,
Adorable micro-fiction you've penned. Their is a beginning, middle and end. "Pirates of the Caribbean' I've never seen all the way through, I'm more of a 'Titanic' gal. Great imagery I could seen Tommy and his dad playing pirates outside the theater where snow covered the ground. Boys will be boys and they have a snowball fight. Of course you had to add a bikini clad girl on a billboard nearby. Loved the twist ending because they were in Florida. Excellent descriptive writing and natural dialogue. A wonderful entry in the micro-fiction contest. Cute cartoon pirate you've used. Shiver me timbers your micro-fiction was entertaining!
Melissa.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2010
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Melissa,
Glad you enjoyed the snow in Florida and the guys having fun. Appreciate the review...Smiles, Carol
