I Meant to Sail the Oceans
contemplative quatrains134 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
The yearning comes through loud and clear in your quatrains. I enjoyed each of the images along with the form and the rhyme scheme. My favorite phrase was the lush "sweeping dunes of sand" and its alliteration. Thank you for sharing the contemplation.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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The yearning comes through loud and clear in your quatrains. I enjoyed each of the images along with the form and the rhyme scheme. My favorite phrase was the lush "sweeping dunes of sand" and its alliteration. Thank you for sharing the contemplation.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Joan, for your understanding reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Warren Rodgers
Brooke, Your poem is excellent with perfect rhyme and rhythm and great artwork to accompany your entry. I love the message. I wonder how many of us feel that way as we grow older. I've always admired those who use their ticket although I can't necessarily say that I'm one of them. lol. Good luck in the contest. Best Regards, Warren
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Brooke, Your poem is excellent with perfect rhyme and rhythm and great artwork to accompany your entry. I love the message. I wonder how many of us feel that way as we grow older. I've always admired those who use their ticket although I can't necessarily say that I'm one of them. lol. Good luck in the contest. Best Regards, Warren
Comment Written 17-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Warren. I think most of us regret the times we've not used that ticket. Brooke
Comment from Amicus
What a lovely poem, Brooke. The flow of this one is wonderfully natural, the diction simple and clear, the meaning universal and poignant. It reminds me of the old say that one doesn't regret the errors one made in life as we near the end but the things one meant to do but didn't. Of course, when one is a prolific dreamer and yet has but one life to lead, decisions made of necessity determine which dreams will be met and which will not...so don't be too hard on yourself, my dreaming friend :>) There is another old say that is a true too--"Everything is as it should be"....This regret for roads not followed need not be indicative of any timidity or flaw in the traveler but merely a statement of the reality of the limitations of human life IMHO.
In any case, this poem on a theme you often explore is top notch. Simple yet profound.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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What a lovely poem, Brooke. The flow of this one is wonderfully natural, the diction simple and clear, the meaning universal and poignant. It reminds me of the old say that one doesn't regret the errors one made in life as we near the end but the things one meant to do but didn't. Of course, when one is a prolific dreamer and yet has but one life to lead, decisions made of necessity determine which dreams will be met and which will not...so don't be too hard on yourself, my dreaming friend :>) There is another old say that is a true too--"Everything is as it should be"....This regret for roads not followed need not be indicative of any timidity or flaw in the traveler but merely a statement of the reality of the limitations of human life IMHO.
In any case, this poem on a theme you often explore is top notch. Simple yet profound.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Amicus, you are right, of course - we beat ourselves up over the roads not taken, and some of them we failed to take out of timidity while others we could not take because all sorts of responsibilities of life got in our way. It's hard to be a nomad once you're raising a family, for instance :-) Thanks, so much. Brooke
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
I sincerely hope this lovely poem wins the contest, Brooke. It left me wondering if I could ahve experienced more in life, been brave, tried harder. Excellent rhyme and rhythm. A flawless piece.
Hugs
Kat
PS I posted a story.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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I sincerely hope this lovely poem wins the contest, Brooke. It left me wondering if I could ahve experienced more in life, been brave, tried harder. Excellent rhyme and rhythm. A flawless piece.
Hugs
Kat
PS I posted a story.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Kat, I think we all do some of that wondering - sometimes we just wimped out of opportunities, other times we answered the call of responsibilities that didn't allow for us to be adventurers, but we always wonder. Thanks so much for your generous rating and most thoughtful comments. Brooke :-)
Comment from AnnaLinda
Brooke,
This is a very creative quatrain entry poem!
Your rhythm is quite musical and your rhymes
so smooth! I enjoyed the images that your poem
imparted and your lines about not having a ticket,
reminded me of those lucky souls who had no
ticket for that final Titanic departure...?
Linda
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Brooke,
This is a very creative quatrain entry poem!
Your rhythm is quite musical and your rhymes
so smooth! I enjoyed the images that your poem
imparted and your lines about not having a ticket,
reminded me of those lucky souls who had no
ticket for that final Titanic departure...?
Linda
Comment Written 17-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Linda. I appreciate your kind review - yes, sometimes not having the ticket can be a good thing. LOL Brooke
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Yup! You are welcome Brooke!
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Yup! You are welcome Brooke!
Comment from Rick Koestler
But when day of departure
for every journey came,
I failed to use my ticket --
no summits can I claim.
These last 4 lines disturb me, Brooke. Does this mean the person wanting to be so adventurous is but a daydreamer at heart? Timid to the core? Or just plain absentminded?
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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But when day of departure
for every journey came,
I failed to use my ticket --
no summits can I claim.
These last 4 lines disturb me, Brooke. Does this mean the person wanting to be so adventurous is but a daydreamer at heart? Timid to the core? Or just plain absentminded?
Comment Written 17-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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no, not absentminded - one who only dreams and never follows through on them - thanks, Rick :-) Brooke
Comment from lola29
Brooke, this is an awesome read. Somehow, it encourages me to try something new today. Your writing always lifts my spirit and makes me think I can. You are very inspirational.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Brooke, this is an awesome read. Somehow, it encourages me to try something new today. Your writing always lifts my spirit and makes me think I can. You are very inspirational.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Lola, thanks so much :-) I truly appreciate your thoughtfulness. Brooke
Comment from Brad Sterling
Yet another skillful, lovely poem - from a vivid imagination - a thoughtful journey through memories of dreams never quite accomplished - yet sometimes dreams are better left so, rather than facing disappointment - thank you again for another delightful piece - and of course luck in contest.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Yet another skillful, lovely poem - from a vivid imagination - a thoughtful journey through memories of dreams never quite accomplished - yet sometimes dreams are better left so, rather than facing disappointment - thank you again for another delightful piece - and of course luck in contest.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Brad. I appreciate your most insightful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from missy98writer
Brooke,
Beautifully written quatrain poem. Awesome art work you used. Outstanding descriptive writing. Wonderful rhythm and rhyme. I love the stanza:
I meant to find a mountain
to climb where eagles soar,
to look upon a vista
no others would explore.
Great title 'I Meant to Sail the Oceans.' I think what you mean by the poem is the narrator wanted to do all these things in life but never did and died not having accomplished their goals. I got that from your last two lines:
I failed to use my ticket --
no summits can I claim.
Wow, I wish the system would allow me to give your a six on this one. Brilliant quatrain poem for the contest.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Brooke,
Beautifully written quatrain poem. Awesome art work you used. Outstanding descriptive writing. Wonderful rhythm and rhyme. I love the stanza:
I meant to find a mountain
to climb where eagles soar,
to look upon a vista
no others would explore.
Great title 'I Meant to Sail the Oceans.' I think what you mean by the poem is the narrator wanted to do all these things in life but never did and died not having accomplished their goals. I got that from your last two lines:
I failed to use my ticket --
no summits can I claim.
Wow, I wish the system would allow me to give your a six on this one. Brilliant quatrain poem for the contest.
Melissa.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Melissa. I'm so happy you feel so positively about this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from chaswriter
Brooke - Opportunities lost is so sad when one does not venture into the unknown to grow in both experience and spirit. A very lovely poem with interesting rhyme and good flow. Enjoyed it as always.
Charlie
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Brooke - Opportunities lost is so sad when one does not venture into the unknown to grow in both experience and spirit. A very lovely poem with interesting rhyme and good flow. Enjoyed it as always.
Charlie
Comment Written 17-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Charlie. I appreciate your thoughtful comments. Brooke :-)
