I Meant to Sail the Oceans
contemplative quatrains134 total reviews
Comment from RhiannonD
I'm not sure what a quatrain is... (four verses of four?)but I liked this poem. It reminds me of the poetry I read in my childhood. I liked the consistency of the rhythm and rhyme and have to admit I was a little disappointed that the person never went to all those places. In Australia we call those people 'Gunners' because they are gunna do this and gunna do that.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2010
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I'm not sure what a quatrain is... (four verses of four?)but I liked this poem. It reminds me of the poetry I read in my childhood. I liked the consistency of the rhythm and rhyme and have to admit I was a little disappointed that the person never went to all those places. In Australia we call those people 'Gunners' because they are gunna do this and gunna do that.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2010
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Rhiannon, a quatrain is one verse of poetry that is four lines long :-) I love the "gunner" designation. Thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Laura Davis
Wonderful! This should encourage people to not give up their dreams. To take chances, because if you don't the opportunities may never present themselves again.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2010
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Wonderful! This should encourage people to not give up their dreams. To take chances, because if you don't the opportunities may never present themselves again.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Laura - I appreciate your thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from knowledge
I just red a poem by HAWordsmith that talks about lost dreams. It is fear that keeps us from following through on our dreams.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2010
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I just red a poem by HAWordsmith that talks about lost dreams. It is fear that keeps us from following through on our dreams.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Knowledge - she is such an amazing writer. Brooke :-)
Comment from Heynonni
I enjoyed this very much. I understand regrets for missed opportunities, but I don't understand what "submits" are. The explanation of the structure of the poem in the author's notes was very helpful, but perhaps the purpose of a submit could be defined there as well.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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I enjoyed this very much. I understand regrets for missed opportunities, but I don't understand what "submits" are. The explanation of the structure of the poem in the author's notes was very helpful, but perhaps the purpose of a submit could be defined there as well.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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You misread the word - it says summits, not submits - summits are mountain tops - explorers claim a summit for their country if they are the first to climb a mountain. Thank you, Heynonni :-) Brooke
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thank you so much for the explanation. I meant to write summit; it was either dyslexia or poor eyesight :)
Comment from Ann Smith
I think many times we fail to use our tickets because of fear. I especially like the second stanza with the dolphins and the whales. What an adventure that would be? The imagery and details are crisp and clear. Thank you for the author's notes about the form. Good luck with the contest. :)ann
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2010
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I think many times we fail to use our tickets because of fear. I especially like the second stanza with the dolphins and the whales. What an adventure that would be? The imagery and details are crisp and clear. Thank you for the author's notes about the form. Good luck with the contest. :)ann
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Ann. I appreciate your gracious and encouraging comments :-) Brooke
Comment from North Country Girl
Thanks for the intuitive and expressive message. I actually liked the rhymed lines and normally I am easily bored with poetry. These really worked. It reminds me of a Ziggy cartoon where Ziggy wants to fly a plane, be an engineer, etc. --if he could only get out of that chair.
Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2010
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Thanks for the intuitive and expressive message. I actually liked the rhymed lines and normally I am easily bored with poetry. These really worked. It reminds me of a Ziggy cartoon where Ziggy wants to fly a plane, be an engineer, etc. --if he could only get out of that chair.
Well done.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2010
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Thank you, North Country Girl :-) I love it when a non-poetry person enjoys a poem :-) Brooke
Comment from smileycloud
hey Brooke
good luck to you my friend in this contest
great form and style as usual
I know your poem says u didn't use the ticket; your poem says also that u didn't have to; u already have seen and felt all your poem speaks about
and so can I do the same through your talented imagery and expression
I would venture a guess; you can claim many summits; especially inner ones and people ones.
but I also like the message; that we shoul just simply grasp the momemt and DO IT and not miss out
have a smiley day
lorraine
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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hey Brooke
good luck to you my friend in this contest
great form and style as usual
I know your poem says u didn't use the ticket; your poem says also that u didn't have to; u already have seen and felt all your poem speaks about
and so can I do the same through your talented imagery and expression
I would venture a guess; you can claim many summits; especially inner ones and people ones.
but I also like the message; that we shoul just simply grasp the momemt and DO IT and not miss out
have a smiley day
lorraine
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Lorraine - I appreciate your thoughtful comments :-) brooke
Comment from AlvinTEthington
Good use of descriptive imagery. One seldom sees the 7/6/7/6 syllabic scheme and it is very hard to execute. You do it well. Excellent execution of the abcb rhyme scheme. Nice alliteration in the fourth line. Good juxtaposition of picture and poem.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Good use of descriptive imagery. One seldom sees the 7/6/7/6 syllabic scheme and it is very hard to execute. You do it well. Excellent execution of the abcb rhyme scheme. Nice alliteration in the fourth line. Good juxtaposition of picture and poem.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Alvin - I really like this syllable count, should use it more often than I do :-) Brooke
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Yes, but the hymni syllabic count of 8/7/8/7 one sees much more often and is easier with which to work. This syllabic count is difficult with which to work, but you do it well. You're welcome for the review.
Comment from IndianaIrish
Best wishes, Brooke, in the contest with this winning poem. We often have a long, long list of dreams that never see reality, but even though we wonder "what if", those little things in our lives can be just as grand as climbing any mountain.
Karyn :>)
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Best wishes, Brooke, in the contest with this winning poem. We often have a long, long list of dreams that never see reality, but even though we wonder "what if", those little things in our lives can be just as grand as climbing any mountain.
Karyn :>)
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Karyn. Glad the meaning of this poem comes through for you :-) Brooke
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Again you show how talented you are in your writing another quality contest entry very well written and presented good luck I enjoyed regards Fuller
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Again you show how talented you are in your writing another quality contest entry very well written and presented good luck I enjoyed regards Fuller
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thanks, Fuller, for your thoughtfulness :-) Brooke
