I Meant to Sail the Oceans
contemplative quatrains134 total reviews
Comment from Begin Again
Brooke,
A bucket filled with good intentions, a cup that runneth over, and a mind and/or body that stood still unable to make that first step past the threshold. Well written. Very enjoyable.
Carol
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Brooke,
A bucket filled with good intentions, a cup that runneth over, and a mind and/or body that stood still unable to make that first step past the threshold. Well written. Very enjoyable.
Carol
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Carol, for your perceptive comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Trybuck
Sometimes life is filled with good intentions that never became anything more. We all have to start somewhere at some point in time or wind up being left behind once again..
Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Sometimes life is filled with good intentions that never became anything more. We all have to start somewhere at some point in time or wind up being left behind once again..
Well done, Buck
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Buck, for your perceptive comments :-) Brooke
Comment from M. Karol
adewpearl
Wonderful lines rather they lead me to believe for a positive end. The end itself was a low down but all the same I really enjoyed it. I suppose it happens when people don't realise their potential or leave things midway.
M
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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adewpearl
Wonderful lines rather they lead me to believe for a positive end. The end itself was a low down but all the same I really enjoyed it. I suppose it happens when people don't realise their potential or leave things midway.
M
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, M, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from stormwolf2
I think we can all say with regret that we never achieved some of life's challenges that were once in our sights. Then we wake up one morning and it is too late!
A well written poem to ponder on. Good rhythm and rhyme.
Best wishes,
Malcolm
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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I think we can all say with regret that we never achieved some of life's challenges that were once in our sights. Then we wake up one morning and it is too late!
A well written poem to ponder on. Good rhythm and rhyme.
Best wishes,
Malcolm
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Malcolm, for most perceptive comments :-) Brooke
Comment from shy1250
So disagree with that last line; everything you write is yet another summit, and the view changes with every thought and emotion you muster, every attempt at change you try (and some days this counts doing the dishes and making the bed!) Verse flowed like fine silk, word usage superb, my personal fave "to climb where eagles soar", but all of it was hugely deserving of that purty ribbon! Nothing to suggest, no errors jumped out at me (although it's 4 am, yep psych docs changed my meds yet again, gotta luv em!). Sorry for my absence; crippling depression and recent physical illness have had me down for a bit. later and God bless, shy
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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So disagree with that last line; everything you write is yet another summit, and the view changes with every thought and emotion you muster, every attempt at change you try (and some days this counts doing the dishes and making the bed!) Verse flowed like fine silk, word usage superb, my personal fave "to climb where eagles soar", but all of it was hugely deserving of that purty ribbon! Nothing to suggest, no errors jumped out at me (although it's 4 am, yep psych docs changed my meds yet again, gotta luv em!). Sorry for my absence; crippling depression and recent physical illness have had me down for a bit. later and God bless, shy
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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I'm so sorry, Shy, to hear you have not been well. I truly appreciate your most kind review. Brooke :-)
Comment from Deanita
Dear Brooke you never cease to amaze me with your wonderful poem and this is one of them.
All the things you want to be and do and you didn't.
I meant to be an ezcellent poet but the rhyme escaped me.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Dear Brooke you never cease to amaze me with your wonderful poem and this is one of them.
All the things you want to be and do and you didn't.
I meant to be an ezcellent poet but the rhyme escaped me.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Deanita. I truly appreciate your thoughtfulness :-) Brooke
Comment from Pacinogal
Hi Margaret,
I liked this poem despite the ending.
The picture took me away.
An excellent contender for the contest.
Good luck, excellent post.
Kindly,
Kathy
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Hi Margaret,
I liked this poem despite the ending.
The picture took me away.
An excellent contender for the contest.
Good luck, excellent post.
Kindly,
Kathy
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Kathy - glad you enjoyed. Brooke :-)
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Sorry for calling you Margaret. I must be losing it. LOL. Brooke, You are very welcome. Kindly, Kathy
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I've called people the wrong name more than once on this site - I noticed you had but just smiled, especially since I adore Margaret :-)
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Thanks for your descretion. You're a peach.
I'm glad you adore Margaret. :) Kathy
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Brooke:)
As always, your poetry enthralls me. I also miss the ticket on most of the wonderful explorations you describe. In a way it also makes me feel inferior as verse after verse of your poems meet every challenge of cadence, rhyme and flow.
If i could borrow one person's imagination from FanStory it would belong to you.
Thank you for sharing another masterpiece. Once again, I can award you only a virtual six stars.
Roger
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Hi Brooke:)
As always, your poetry enthralls me. I also miss the ticket on most of the wonderful explorations you describe. In a way it also makes me feel inferior as verse after verse of your poems meet every challenge of cadence, rhyme and flow.
If i could borrow one person's imagination from FanStory it would belong to you.
Thank you for sharing another masterpiece. Once again, I can award you only a virtual six stars.
Roger
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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thank you, Roger, for your kind comments :-) You are most encouraging. Brooke
Comment from Curt Mongold
Hi Brooke,
This sounds a lot like a poem I wrote, only it had a lighter tone, if you can believe that! I have always wanted to travel, as a matter of fact, that's why I joined the service at the age of 17. What did they do? They stuck me in a missle silo base in Missouri! After that it was marriage and kids, always something to prevent me from leaving. I feel like poor old George in "It's a Wonderful Life." Only I don't have Clarence!
Your rhymes and flow are superb as always Brooke, best wishes,
Curt
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Hi Brooke,
This sounds a lot like a poem I wrote, only it had a lighter tone, if you can believe that! I have always wanted to travel, as a matter of fact, that's why I joined the service at the age of 17. What did they do? They stuck me in a missle silo base in Missouri! After that it was marriage and kids, always something to prevent me from leaving. I feel like poor old George in "It's a Wonderful Life." Only I don't have Clarence!
Your rhymes and flow are superb as always Brooke, best wishes,
Curt
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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A missile silo base in MO - now that is irony. You and I need to find a travel agent who supplies free trips, my friend!!! :-) Brooke
Comment from BlaccJacc
This poem was very pleasing to read, and hade a completeness to it. Definitely a poetic story. The rhymes were not forced at all and seemed almost incidental. great imagery, just a wonderful poem all together.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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This poem was very pleasing to read, and hade a completeness to it. Definitely a poetic story. The rhymes were not forced at all and seemed almost incidental. great imagery, just a wonderful poem all together.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Gravi. I appreciate your thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
